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MAYUR FF ~ The Dark Magic ~ (Page 10)

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Posted: 01 January 2011 at 8:27pm | IP Logged
love this ff so much. You keep getting better and better with each FF. This is already my most favourite ff of yours after the 2nd partLOL I always want MayUr together but here I also hope she never forgives him. He did what he had to and she was the one who sufferedAngry Nupur got pregant?Shocked didnt expect that but really good twistSmile
keep up the great workHugi also didnt know your name was kinzaLOL

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Posted: 01 January 2011 at 9:37pm | IP Logged

Yay!!! u started another ff. I'm so happy.

Part 1
This is different from ur other ffs but u have still done a wonderful job. I would never have imagined Mayank in such a role. Though it is negative, u explained his character well.
 
Part 2
I liked this part esp the back to back with Mayank and Nupur. So Priya is Mayur's daughter...and she has taken after Mayank in terms of taste. Poor Nupur...she is trying so hard to fulfill her daughter's needs and Priya is such an understanding child.
 
Looking forward to read about Mayank meeting Nupur & then his reaction to Priya.
 

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thanxxxx 4 d pm kinza
soorryyy i red it b4 i got ur pm

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wooohhh.......... mind  blowing
you are just an awesome and amazing writer.........
waiting for mayur's meet...

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Posted: 02 January 2011 at 2:24am | IP Logged

please send me copy of all the parts of this ff

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 since my exams are going on i could not able to read it
 i would read after xams
 i just love your all the magic ffs
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wow !!!!!!
mehak pata tha tum isse amazingly hi present karogi ............

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add me...add me...add me to ur pm list!
refreshing concept!Smile

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thank u so much guys..Hug.

@jaee..welcome back Mrs Rathore...Hug
@mansi..all the best cutee, for ur exams..Hug

PART 3:

New York to  Mumbai...

Mayank was sitting in the aeroplane and muttering the names of the cities which were just announced in the plane..his mind went back to 8 years when he was sitting in a similar plane and the announcement was ...Mumbai to New York. At that time he thought that he was the luckiest person of the world..saved by God..but today he realized that he was trapped by God..

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Nupur was lying awake in her bed ..remembering the day when for the first time she saw her parents crying...

kia hua nupur..bolo na bacha..kai hua..

The  teary, broken voices of her parents was haunting her..like every night..she was remembering the faces of her parents..

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Mayank remembered how he returned home, his breath panting and his face clearly could tell that he had committed something unpardonable, but he saw his parents celebrating his admission in MIT..holding his passport with a visa of USA..he thought that God was with him..he will leave this city and never return..

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Nupur still wasn't able to forget her father's broken , defeated voice of..

kaun tha wo beta?

She closed her eyes, pain was becoming unbearable.

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Mayank recalled how his friends were shocked at the news of his admission in MIT..he was the best, everyone was looking at him with a praise and longing in their eyes, he was the best..and at that time he thought..what if ..what if he wouldn't have done that...if he could have just waited a bit..destiny was making him the best, he didn't had to....he didn't had to rape anyone to prove himself

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She remembered how her mother used to bring food for her, her father used to read her favorite stories, but she just couldn't react to anything, she just lied staring the ceiling, remembering the vicious grip of his hand..she hated his touch...she hated him..and still..she hates him..

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Even after coming miles away form that city he couldn't forget  those eyes..those huge terrified eyes..he became an insomniac..there was no sleep for him..no peace for him..

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Immense love of her parents did make nupur normal, until she knew she was pregnant..

nupur closed her fist tight..that was the most painful day of her life...the positive result on the strip  swiped the earth beneath her feet....she remembered how she was shivering the whole night..she went to peek into her parents room, after so many days today she had eaten lunch and her parents were happy that she was normal..but this would kill them

she still remembered each and every thought that crossed her mind that night..and lastly what she thought was..... suicide..

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He couldn't even kill himself, he had a family to support, who had sacrificed all their life to give him quality education...he couldn't betray them..leave them in the same condition, just because he wasn't able to  carry the burden on his conscious..

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nupur beta..hamien chor ka ja rahi ho..ik baar nahi socha k tumhre bagier hum kia karen gey..

her parents had caught her, she was attempting to cut her wrist...those helpless voices, ...

baba..plz...mujh main ap ko aur zilat dene ki himmat nahi hai...main pregnant hon..

that was the time when she saw her father falling down to the ground like defeated person, a person who had nothing left and she head her mother crying...

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each and every thing was clear in front of his eyes, he had worked and studied like a machine..just to keep those two eyes away from him..but no matter what..those eyes followed him..

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The white cloth in her backyard..that backyard where her father used to carry her in his arms and  used to play all day..today that backyard had the dead body of her father..a person who died because the pain of her daughter was getting unbearable for her....that day she vowed to hate that person..that day she vowed to curse that person..ever moment..in her every breath..

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Mayank knew it was her curse that his life was was a dark shallow...

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.dekhiye preganby to 2 months ho gaye hain..abortion can lead to poison spread in the body,..

Nupru was adamnt on killing the child, but her mother she couldn't lose her daughter after her husband..

koi baat nahi nupur...hum is bache ko pal len gey..kisi ko nahi pat cahle ga k ye tumhara bach hai..hum sher chor den gey..koi nai jaga ja jar tumhari shaddi kar don gi main..per main tumhain kho nahi sakti nupur..

maa mujh nafrat hai is bache se..main nahi..

nupur marne se pehle tumhare baba ne mujh se wada kiya tha k main hamesha tumhari hifazat karon gi..agr tumhare baba hote tu bhi tumhain maut k mun main nahi bhejtey..tumhari jaan sab se qeemati hai..koi baat nahi..tumhare sath jo ho raha hai, is main tumhra koi qassor nahi hai..bache..tum kisi aur ki gunaahoon ki saza buhgat rahi ho....tumhain apne hisey ki khushi zaroor miley gi..mera wada hai tumse..uper waley ne sab ko us ki hisay ki khushi deney ka wada kiya nupur..

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the plane had almost covered half of the journey..and nupur looked at the clock.it was very less time left in dawn.

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mayank was adamant that there was no happiness left for him him..he wasn't able to look into any girl's eyes, they always reminded of those eyes..whenever he touched any girl, her helpless attempts crossed his mind..

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.she remembered how they they changed their city...she had to leave the home where she grew up, had to leave behind her father's home..she completed studies privately..every moment the child growing inside her gave her a feeling which she could never explain..her mother told her it as her "mamta"..

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There was no feeling left in mayank..he was a rock..but the world never knew..this rock has heart..which repents..

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her mother was right..every one has chance for his happiness...and nupur got it when she held her child..her daughter..for the first time

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Mayank was having his lunch in the plane, wondering, when was the last time he was really happy..

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It was almost dawn, she got up from her bed..recalling the day when she lost her mother...she had to move back ....to her father's home..

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mayank couldn't believe he was moving back to the city he had vowed never to return..

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Nupur woke up priya and they both started waling towards the school..nupur's destiny brought her again to the school which ruined her life..just because she was a student there, she got a job of teaching the Montessori..and priya's fees was also half..

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Mayank reached india, a strange fear taking him over..mehta was there to recieve him..with the same warmth...

Metha..kuch aram kar lo..


M..nahi., pehle mujhe site pe jana hai..


Mehta..chaloooo....


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nupur marked a short leave in the register and went upstairs, in the school building..today her hatred was at its peak..but why?..

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Mayank was welcomed warmly by the administration, their past student had achieved such great status in the world...

ap ko school ak ik baar round..

M..main khud dekh leta hon..

He started walking in the corridors, he had studied 12 years in this school but the only memory he had was of  that classroom.

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Nupur reached the classroom,and went to sit on the desk, the same she was sitting 8 years before.

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Mayank started climbing the stairs, remembering the plans he made..of ruing his life..

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Nupru plaed her head down and stared the floor..the place where she was...raped..

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Mayank had reached the top floor corridor....started walking..everything crossing his mind, when he again saw someone sitting on the same bench..same as 8 years before..

the same pony tail, hair hiding her face..he felt as if he was seeing this pose from the last 8 years..he controlled his beats and stepped in the classroom..

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Lats time nupur was unaware that someone had entered the room, but 8 years of life had taught her  very much...she stood up t the voice of footsteps..and turned

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Mayank and nupur looked at each other..not knowing what they felt..they had never felt this before..

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Hia kia ye jo terey merey darmiyan hai
undekhi unsuni koi dastaan hai...



Edited by -Mehak - 02 January 2011 at 10:52am

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