Breathless ~2~...Note! Page 34 (Page 4)

Hey Shrinzii...

suprb nd awsome part ..love da way u write .....plz dnt disappear again .......

Edited by diyaa1pk - 30 December 2010 at 9:33am

Plz add me to the pm list.
This ff is amazing.
I loved this soooooooooooooooooooooo much.........
AR are just amazing.

Hey!! I don't think you'll remember me cause I got to read your amazing fic only after you had finished thirteen chapters .. I was just randomly going through the forum and then suddenly I see breathless 2 and I am like when did that happen .. You won't believe how excited I got .. U finally updated .. Thanks a lot .. Coming to the update it was awesome like always .. How did you even think it won't be up to the mark .. I just love love the way you write .. The way u switch between scenes and incorporate all characters in our update is so amazing .. I think I have already mentioned this but I adore the one liners you give at the end of your updates and oh how can I forget your titles .. How do you come up with such lovey ones everytime .. Hope all is fine with your mom and your all settled-down .. Btw which course are you doing?? .. Please do pm me with your next update if possible .. Eagerly waiting for more and also for your replies .. Hope it's sometime soon .. Take care .. Loads of love neha

Edited by ahenseven - 28 December 2010 at 12:18pm

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhh! you finally updated, and what an update, the part was absolutely amazing!! please do continue soon gorgeous!!

nice ...part..but this time plz continue soon ....

thx 4 PM

congos 4 da new thraed!!!

RESERVED :D

OMG, My net just had to go out when I went to go edit this comment. Okie, I need to go read it one more time I still can't believe you're back, and with such a bang! Your update wasn't disappointing at all..I PROMISEEE <3 AHH, you know what's really funny is for the past few days especially..I've been pressing refresh to see if you've updated..and I don't come online for a couple hours..and it's been updated! AHH, but this was a nice surprise. Promise to come back soon with  my comment :D
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Shrina, honestly I can't even tell you how amazing a writer you are! Everything in your fan fic just flows so easily and beautifully! The conversations. the characters, the interactions..it all feels so real..and I guess that's part of the reason I love your fic so much, is because in a way it's really realistic, and there's such subtle romance oozing from each line, each part!

Okay, I've said this once before, but I can't help but repeat myself..I absolutely lovee the Riddhima in your fan fic. She has this spunk in her that I absolutely love!

"Did they spray viagra in the air or something?" Riddhima questioned,

That made me laugh so much when I read it. I could totally imagine them being stared down by the young, and some not so young guys at the gym! How do you come up with these lines? They're so witty! I loved how you added in the greasy afro haired guy..aha poor Muskaan!

Oh, and that's another character that I love. She has so much of the DMG Muskaan in her, yet she's so different at the same time, and I absolutely love that! She's feisty, and sexy, and it would be a sin if I didn't tell you how extremely cute I found the interactions between Rahul and Muskaan!  But I'll tell you about that. when I get to that part :D

Riddhima took a deep breath and nervously glanced up to see what unfortunate soul she had just thrown her not-so-fresh self at. To her complete surprise, she was met by a smiling face with a familiar pair of sparkling grey eyes looking down at her.

 

Armaan?

I absolutely am in LOVE with the Armaan in your fan fic! You make him sound unbelievably sexy!

Riddhima realized that she was still pressed up against his chest and started to back away when his hand shot out and brushed against her cheek. Her heart started beating wildly in her chest at the contact. She felt like she had just run the fifty yard dash, simply from his light touch across her skin.

Not only Riddhima's my heart started beating 423480291483 times faster too! I was like what did he say, what is he doing..? Until I read that he was only reaching over to tug her earphones out..but the way he made his hands deliberately brush over her cheeks like that before he tugged them out made me love him even more. It's those little gestures that you make him do that I absolutely love. They're obviously both crazily attracted to each other, and just these little things make it even cuter.

deep, smooth-as-silk voice in her ear.

AHH, I love the way you describe his voice!

Armaan scoffed at her last two words....Oh okay Riddhima.

Ha, I love him. He was obviously enjoying having her so close to him because she obviously would never press against his body like that deliberately..atleast not yet


"Definitely definitely page 92." Armaan stated in between laughs. "Damn Anjali...we all know you'd be flexible in bed. You don't need to show it off to all your admirers."

LOLLL. Armaan, man he definitely lives up to his image!

He reached over and took her bottle of water away from her in an attempt to meet here eye to eye.

Rahul and Muskaan are so extremely cute in your fan fic, and to be honest..I like them a lot better here than I did in DMG. The whole fidgeting with her water bottle out of nervousness, and then him take it away from her...the quiet nervous voices they talked in..and his comment about how she made him so happy and all..so so so cute! I especially loved how you ended the part with him asking her if she really just wanted a girls night out? I was hoping she'd ask them to join too  But it's okay, I'm sure you'll have something great for the next part too..and a girls night out is definitely always fun!



Shrina! I know I've said "I love, I love, I love" like a 1000 times in this comment already, but I really did LOVE how Riddhima thought about Armaan while taking her shower That was so cute, and then the way he was waiting outside for her! I just love everything about AR, and their interactions and just everything in this FF It gives me butterflies in my tummy just reading about them! This Casanova is definitely falling hard for Riddhima!

You're such an amazing writer, I honestly am a fan! This has to be the best FF on the forum, and I really hope we'll get an update soooon! But I'm just really glad you got this part up..it was definitely worth the long wait! There's just no words to describe how good you are, and perfect your FF is.  It truly leaves me breathless


-Mira

p.s. sorry for the long comment but I couldn't help it



Edited by ..Mira.. - 28 December 2010 at 10:17pm