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Originally posted by sweet coco


YEP! I live in the suburbs so it's a 40 min drive w/out travel!!! Tough competition...nope! I'm pretty sure I would win in the wild and wacky department, but I think she's a lot wilder than she gives herself credit!!WinkLOL

Sweetie....your writing tels me your imagination can def run wild, but the question is does our beloved Hasini act on those thoughts!?!LOLLOL


What have I done to u? Some 21 year old shrinks let loose in my thread...

Koi mujhe inse bachao....
WAIT?! So I'm right!! 
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OMG!! hasini and night13....you guys are so deep!!! Tough competition b/c I can't decide who is deeper BUT love both of your responses!!
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Originally posted by sweet coco

OMG!! hasini and night13....you guys are so deep!!! Tough competition b/c I can't decide who is deeper BUT love both of your responses!!



I challenge u to join us.. it surely is a tough competition... not sure if u can handle it...
are u deep enough ?

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Part 65: Nirvana: This is the perfect title…I wonder how long it took you to come up with it!!! I bet at least 4 hours! LOL!!!

 

Meer's dialogue was fabulous! She comes off as much more confident and strong than Geet in her monologue!! I like how blunt she is with Geet….exactly how good friends should be!!

 

Geet's lines: I knew he was the only warmhearted guy I was ready to share my life and my past…the key word here being past! I realized how important this word is because sharig your present and life can be easy, but not your past and Geet found her one…the one that she shared her past—her horrid past with and he understood. Her inner turmoil now is not to make him feel that she's taking him for granted, especially now that Meer made that point!

 

It was not just in her dreams, but she was still struggling to settle with reality that I had truly become hers and it needed promoting the very element, that our thin fabric of bonding was made of. Maan is truly splendid!!! How greatly he understands her and the thin fabric line is superb…you've def got an unique way with words!!!

 

Geet…a truly unique piece…loved her nervousness while the clerk had her on hold… "reinstate the existence of all that I held dear": HMMMM!!! Geet can def be a little melodramatic at times, but you effin' true!!! I loved how she screams out the window that Maan is hers….and THANK YOU for the comic relief: the neighbor telling her to shut up!!! LOL!! So funny!!

 

Such a romantic scene: the hug and her telling him the date and this line: only to claim me for eternity!!! You did a marvelous job of describing him having a "low whimper"…Geet releases her pain and sorrow through tears, but very rarely does Maan show his emotional side and I loved how he lets it out!  Awwwwwwww!! "I want you for myself": Now def the relief kicks in, she was always his, but now that burden of not knowing if lifted and both are free from the pain and agony!!! And even she can give herself fully to him now… and love how she feels that sense of guilt for making him feel "denied"…nice use of words!! The syntax in this chapter is so die for!

 

Maan's New York most cherished memories was awesome…all the monumental moments in his life took place in New York!!!! He met her, fell in love, and today becomes one with her—his Mishti!!!

 

Today now for my favorite part of the whole chapter…and you know how excited I was and still am over this part!!! Here goes:

 

His starts to unbutton his shirt as he goes to the bedroom and bam! There she is!! Oh MY EFFIN' GOD!!! What a nice way to end his monologue and enter hers!! LOL!!! Plus 18...REALLY?! LOL!! You worry too much!  It wasn't as wild and crazy as you thought it might be and like I told you before….not at all vulgar, but very sensual in the most beautiful way possible!!! You kept it magical just like our beloved Maneet!! Nice…me likey likes so much!!! 


She's worried about him ridiculing her….love Geet!! And wanting to hide in the closet!!! Still has that essence of humor! "The climax of our 12-day fast" that double entendre….ama-ZING!!! Take a bow!!! YES!! She wore the nose ring and the wasit jewelry….him being speechless: puuuuurrrr-FECT!! AWW!! He calls her smile "serene"…I love that word! I hope my huuby finds my smile "serene"! LOL!!!!

 

OH!! He's forgetting words….once again silence is golden!! And then the caressing begins…aaye haaye kya baat hai!! She felt the "deeper shades of passion"…..woman this writing is turning me on! LOL!!!! Ok I apologize for my inappropriateness, but this is soooooooo goooooood!!!! And now the kissing begins!!! YIPPPEEE!!! Back flides in session!!

 

She's running her hand on her bare chest….our girl has some serious guns! I'm glad his passion is sinking into her! And he's removing her accessories….this part is so sultry and sensual!!! OMFG!! This right here: "we gasped for breath for having come out of our short but intense session of passionate kisses": This is so HOT!! You have no idea how HOT….it's beyond believe how scorching, sizzling, blazin' HOT this is!!!

 

Awww!! She uses the chup bilkul chup line…love it when she does it!!! She's speaking in his basha now!!! I can't believe ths girl is so BOLD!! I'm so damn happy!! I think I'm gonna cry…*sniffs* *sniffs*….actually I'm kidding…I'm a drama queen! LOL! But Geet is so impressive! Choli strings are beilng pulled and now I'm screaming….better shut up before my parents send me to a mental asylum!!! Kisses moving down to "places he had been a stranger to date": NICEEEEEEE!!!!!! I just read the words MOANING….omfg….yes!! Yes!! YES!!!  Ladies and gentlemen the lehenga is being pulled down…history is being made!!!

 

Ok but before I get carried away, she says "wipe away the bitter memories of my past and he now proved there was love too in a physical world": so immensely beautiful!!!


Okay back to my gushy giggly self….shirt is off Maan…man I wish I had a visual of this….my imagination and mind is doing cartwheels!!! His chiseled chest…I'm officially in Maanland….I need to come back!!! Someone slap me!! LOL!!

Simmering in sweet torture….diction is so fab!! And "seeking sanctuary": this is so legendary!!!  I can't breath anymore….stripped of clothing…sheets to be ruffles….the sheets are killing me here! You used them so brilliantly to describe the action between the two!!

 

I loved that you used this "to heighten my initiation into the sensual world" instead of turned on or some other commonly used words! I love the way you describe it!! Also love this line: "our spirits to experience euphoria at its highest": This is utterly beautiful! It's like a piece of heaven! And to top tahat off was this line: "psychedelic colors of bliss shimmering in our mortal souls"!! This wording is so wonderful and magnificent!! It's a magnum opus….so lyrical and artful!!!! "Passionate seesions of sensual drama": it's like I'm watching a theatrical piece or a work of art!!

 

Such a splendid chapter…I literally ran out of wors to praise you and your writing!! I need to get a thesaurus and a new set of vocabulary!!! You've done an amazing job….you deserve a Pulitizer and fast….such creative and original writing!! Loved this so much and looking forward to see the dynamic of Maneet's relationship changing!!!! Thanks a bunch for this!!



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