Part 65:
Nirvana: This is the perfect titleā¦I wonder how long it took you to come up
with it!!! I bet at least 4 hours! LOL!!!
Meer's dialogue
was fabulous! She comes off as much more confident and strong than Geet in her
monologue!! I like how blunt she is with Geetā¦.exactly how good friends should
be!!
Geet's
lines: I knew he was the only
warmhearted guy I was ready to share my life and my pastā¦the key word here
being past! I realized how important this word is because sharig your present
and life can be easy, but not your past and Geet found her oneā¦the one that she
shared her pastāher horrid past with and he understood. Her inner turmoil now
is not to make him feel that she's taking him for granted, especially now that
Meer made that point!
It was not just in her dreams, but she was still struggling
to settle with reality that I had truly become hers and it needed promoting the
very element, that our thin fabric of bonding was made of. Maan is truly splendid!!! How greatly he understands her and
the thin fabric line is superbā¦you've def got an unique way with words!!!
Geetā¦a
truly unique pieceā¦loved her nervousness while the clerk had her on holdā¦ "reinstate the existence of all that I held
dear": HMMMM!!! Geet can def be a little melodramatic at times, but you
effin' true!!! I loved how she screams out the window that Maan is hersā¦.and
THANK YOU for the comic relief: the neighbor telling her to shut up!!! LOL!! So
funny!!
Such a
romantic scene: the hug and her telling him the date and this line: only to claim me for eternity!!! You
did a marvelous job of describing him having a "low whimper"ā¦Geet releases her
pain and sorrow through tears, but very rarely does Maan show his emotional
side and I loved how he lets it out!
Awwwwwwww!! "I want you for
myself": Now def the relief kicks in, she was always his, but now that
burden of not knowing if lifted and both are free from the pain and agony!!!
And even she can give herself fully to him nowā¦ and love how she feels that
sense of guilt for making him feel "denied"ā¦nice use of words!! The syntax in
this chapter is so die for!
Maan's
New York most cherished memories was awesomeā¦all the monumental moments in his
life took place in New York!!!! He met her, fell in love, and today becomes one
with herāhis Mishti!!!
Today now
for my favorite part of the whole chapterā¦and you know how excited I was
and still am over this part!!! Here goes:
His starts
to unbutton his shirt as he goes to the bedroom and bam! There she is!! Oh MY
EFFIN' GOD!!! What a nice way to end his monologue and enter hers!! LOL!!! Plus
18...REALLY?! LOL!! You worry too much! It
wasn't as wild and crazy as you thought it might be and like I told you beforeā¦.not
at all vulgar, but very sensual in the most beautiful way possible!!! You kept
it magical just like our beloved Maneet!! Niceā¦me likey likes so much!!!
She's
worried about him ridiculing herā¦.love Geet!! And wanting to hide in the
closet!!! Still has that essence of humor! "The climax of our 12-day fast" that
double entendreā¦.ama-ZING!!! Take a bow!!! YES!! She wore the nose ring and the
wasit jewelryā¦.him being speechless: puuuuurrrr-FECT!! AWW!! He calls her smile
"serene"ā¦I love that word! I hope my huuby finds my smile "serene"! LOL!!!!
OH!! He's
forgetting wordsā¦.once again silence is golden!! And then the caressing beginsā¦aaye
haaye kya baat hai!! She felt the "deeper
shades of passion"ā¦..woman this writing is turning me on! LOL!!!! Ok I
apologize for my inappropriateness, but this is soooooooo goooooood!!!! And now
the kissing begins!!! YIPPPEEE!!! Back flides in session!!
She's running
her hand on her bare chestā¦.our girl has some serious guns! I'm glad his
passion is sinking into her! And he's removing her accessoriesā¦.this part is so
sultry and sensual!!! OMFG!! This right here: "we gasped for breath for having come out of our short but intense
session of passionate kisses": This is so HOT!! You have no idea how HOTā¦.it's
beyond believe how scorching, sizzling, blazin' HOT this is!!!
Awww!!
She uses the chup bilkul chup lineā¦love it when she does it!!! She's speaking
in his basha now!!! I can't believe ths girl is so BOLD!! I'm so damn happy!! I
think I'm gonna cryā¦*sniffs* *sniffs*ā¦.actually I'm kiddingā¦I'm a drama queen!
LOL! But Geet is so impressive! Choli strings are beilng pulled and now I'm
screamingā¦.better shut up before my parents send me to a mental asylum!!!
Kisses moving down to "places he had
been a stranger to date": NICEEEEEEE!!!!!! I just read the words MOANINGā¦.omfgā¦.yes!!
Yes!! YES!!! Ladies and gentlemen the
lehenga is being pulled downā¦history is being made!!!
Ok but
before I get carried away, she says "wipe
away the bitter memories of my past and he now proved there was love too in a
physical world": so immensely beautiful!!!
Okay back
to my gushy giggly selfā¦.shirt is off Maanā¦man I wish I had a visual of thisā¦.my
imagination and mind is doing cartwheels!!! His chiseled chestā¦I'm officially
in Maanlandā¦.I need to come back!!! Someone slap me!! LOL!!
Simmering
in sweet tortureā¦.diction is so fab!! And "seeking sanctuary": this is so
legendary!!! I can't breath anymoreā¦.stripped
of clothingā¦sheets to be rufflesā¦.the sheets are killing me here! You used them
so brilliantly to describe the action between the two!!
I loved
that you used this "to heighten my
initiation into the sensual world" instead of turned on or some other
commonly used words! I love the way you describe it!! Also love this line: "our spirits to experience euphoria at its
highest": This is utterly beautiful! It's like a piece of heaven! And to
top tahat off was this line: "psychedelic
colors of bliss shimmering in our mortal souls"!! This wording is so wonderful
and magnificent!! It's a magnum opusā¦.so lyrical and artful!!!! "Passionate
seesions of sensual drama": it's like I'm watching a theatrical piece or a work
of art!!
Such a splendid
chapterā¦I literally ran out of wors to praise you and your writing!! I need to
get a thesaurus and a new set of vocabulary!!! You've done an amazing jobā¦.you
deserve a Pulitizer and fastā¦.such creative and original writing!! Loved this
so much and looking forward to see the dynamic of Maneet's relationship
changing!!!! Thanks a bunch for this!!
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