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NEW COMBO FF=) ~*Mohabbatein*~CH12 ON PG 14 (Page 12)

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Posted: 06 February 2011 at 9:27am | IP Logged
Forget to say plz add me in Pm list :)

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Posted: 07 February 2011 at 5:24am | IP Logged
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Originally posted by cyum321

Awesome.

after long break welcome back dear

thank youBig smile
i went for a really close wedding and now im bck but school has started making it harder to update but ill try my best. How r u guys? hope the new year is treating u wellBig smile
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Posted: 07 February 2011 at 5:26am | IP Logged
Originally posted by hinalshah

hey kashish welcome back yaar n loved the update and yes shaan will fall in love with khanaak before khanaak can fall in love with shan or both at same time
OMG i have sooo much thought ahead- i jst cnt wait for u guys to read it Smile

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Posted: 07 February 2011 at 5:29am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Jessica100

wowwwwww!!!!!!!! AWESOMESTTTT !!!!!!!!!!LOVELYY UPDATEEEEEEEEEE BUT I WANT MORE AND MORE OF SHANAK ! SOOO PLZ ! AND KASHISH I REALLLY LIKE UR NAMEEE !! AND I THINK U SHOULD ALSO BRING A CHARACTER WITH UR BEAUTIFUL NAMEEE !!
ohh THANK YOU SOOO MUCH. first time someone has complimented my name and i dnt think u noticed but im actually in the story narrating it. Have you seen Mohabbatein the movie. well u noe how SRK narrates the story of three couples- thats what im doing too.Big smile
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Originally posted by gauchalover

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yeah take ur time reading and please comment and tell me how it wasSmile adding u to the PM list definately Big smile
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Posted: 07 February 2011 at 6:02am | IP Logged

Very good update and good to have u back on writers desk..

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Posted: 14 February 2011 at 1:10am | IP Logged
Happy Valentines Day people. Im sure some of you are in a very romantic mode. well jst watch out for this update because it is one of the high points and since its such a romantic day celebrating love- u all are getting double dose- yes you read it right TWO updates =) i hope you like it
and here it is ---enjoy and do comment

Chapter Ten                                   

The next day was Shivratri pooja and Shaan was asked to go with the Gujrals. Khanak came down wearing a white lehenga(the one in the SR scene) with her hair open(her hair is usually in a pony tail) he walks down the stairs and Shaan is awestruck. Cant even move. Khank walks past him but does notice how good he looks in a kurta. She stands next to her father and they proceed towards the temple. After the pooja and aarti is done, Khanak goes to pray to the shivling. (where you put milk and water- if you dnt know dnt worry bout it) Shaan follows and someone pushes him and his hand touches khanak's and the milk gets poured over shivling( this is an indiactor of them being couple as only husband and wife do it together) Khank steps back astonished at what happened which Shaan doesn't realize. She decides to ignore it and goes near the bhang. Without realizing its bhang, she drinks it. Shaan follows her and sees her drinking.

Shaan: yeh kya peerahi hoon

Khanak: diktha nahi hai burthal, bhang bhang peerahi hoon, bhang, tumme uthna dum nahi ki tum peo

Shaan: yaar yeh kaise baat howa, lo- he grabs a glass and drinks it.

And they drink for a while and a song starts as Shaan starts to sing

Shaan: Hey Jai Jai Shiv Shankar Kaanta Lage Na Kankar

Hey Jai Jai Shiv Shankar Kaanta Lage Na Kankar

Ke Pyala Tere Naam Ka Piya picks up another glass

                                                

Khanak : Ho O O Gir Jaoongi Main Mar Jaoongi trips and Shaan holds her

Jo Tune Mujhe Thaam Na Liya

O Sau Rabadi

Shaan: Hey Jai Jai Shiv Shankar Kaanta Lage Na Kankar

Ke Pyala Tere Naam Ka Piya

Khanak : Ho O O Gir Jaoongi Main Mar Jaoongi

Jo Tune Mujhe Thaam Na Liya

O Sau Rabadi  points towards Shiv murti

 

Khanak : Ek Ke Do Puts one finger then two fingers out

Shaan : Hmmm

Khanak : Do Ke Chaar puts two fingers then four

Shaan : Hmmm

Khanak : Mujh Ko To

Shaan : Hmmm

Khanak : Dikhte Hain

Shaan : Aisa Hi Hota Hai Jab Do Dil Milte Hai He grabs Khanak and hugs her and Khanak pushes him

Khanak : Ek Ke Do

Do Ke Chaar

Mujh Ko To

Dikhte Hain

Shaan : Aisa Hi Hota Hai Jab Do Dil Milte Hai

Khanak : Sar Pe Zameen Paanv Ke Neeche Hai Aasmaan Ho

Sau Rabadi she sits down

Shaan : Sau Rabadi he sits down

Khanak : Sau Rabadi she stands up

Shaan : Sau Rabadi he stands up

Jai Jai Shiv Shankar Kaanta Lage Na Kankar

Ke Pyala Tere Naam Ka Piya Shaan drinks another glass

Khanak : Ho O O Gir Jaoongi Main Mar Jaoongi

Jo Tune Mujhe Thaam Na Liya Khanak tries to take the glass but stumbles and hangs onto Shaan

O Sau Rabadi

Chorus : O Bansi Bhaiyya..He He He..

 

O More Raja Bade Jatna Se ki Chune teri phulwaari ke ri..

 

Khanak : Kandhe Pe She puts her head on his shoulder while sitting on the stairs

Shaan : Hmmm

Khanak : Sar Rakh Ke

Shaan : Hmmm

Khanak : Tum Mujh Ko

Shaan : Hmmm

Khanak : Sone Do

Shaan : Masti Men Jo Chahe Ho Jaye Ho Ne Do Shaan moves her shoulder so Khanak's head slips and lands on his lap

Khanak : Kandhe Pe

Sar Rakh Ke

Tum Mujh Ko

Sone Do

Shaan : Masti Men Jo Chahe Ho Jaye Ho Ne Do

Khanak : Aise Men Tum Ho Gaye Ho Bade Beimaan Ho Khank pulls his ears

Sau Rabadi

Shaan : Sau Rabadi

Khanak : Sau Rabadi

Shaan : Sau Rabadi

Brrrr Jai Jai Shiv Shankar Kaanta Lage Na Kankar

Ke Pyala Tere Naam Ka Piya

Khanak : Ho O O Gir Jaoongi Main Mar Jaoongi

Jo Tune Mujhe Thaam Na Liya

O Sau Rabadi

Chorus : He He He..Kya Kya

 

Shaan : Raste Mein He pretends he is driving while Khanak holds onto him

Khanak : Hmmm

Shaan : Hum Dono

Khanak : Hmmm

Shaan : Ghar Kaise Jayenge

Khanak : Ghar Wale (ahh)Ab Hum Ko (ahh)Khud Lene Aayenge he picks her up

Shaan : Raste Mein He starts walking and stumbling with her in his arms

Hum Donon

Ghar Kaise Jayenge

Khanak : Ghar Wale (ahh)Ab Hum Ko (ahh)Khud Lene Aayenge She jumps down

Shaan : Kuchh Bhi Ho Lekin Maza Aa Gaya Meri Jaan Ho Shaan looks her naughtily

Sau Rabadi She runs and plops down

Khanak : Sau Rabadi

Shaan : Sau Rabadi Shaan plops down with her

Khanak : Sau Rabadi

Shaan : Jai Jai Shiv Shankar Kaanta Lage Na Kankar

Ke Pyala Tere Naam Ka Piya

Khanak : Ho O O Gir Jaoongi (Aye) Main Mar Jaoongi (Aye)

Jo Tune Mujhe Thaam Na Liya

O Sau Rabadi

 

 

Khanak started to dance towards the exit and soon she was gone. Shaan rushed to look for her and found her sitting on hay.: Jai jai shiv Shankar, khatta lage na khankad..she was screaming the song rather than singing it. Shaan knew she had had way too much

Shaan: Khanak gadi main betho

Khanak making a cute face: nahin

Shaan: nahin?

Khanak stands up and puts her nose up: nahin, nahin, nahin, nahin aur she stopped and asked for Shaan's ear -NAHIIIIINNN!

Shaan: acha bacha abhi batata hoon He picks her up and puts her in the car. She struggles at first but then looks at Shaan lovingly

Khanak: Shaaan! Shaan looks at Khanak surprised. It was the first time she had said his name and he felt his heart jump but then his face fell as khanak grabbed both of his cheeks and pulled it saying: Tum itne CUUTTTEE hoo!! Aur tumhara yeh chotta sa nak aur itne baaaddii baaddi ake aur tunhara Bandar jise kan. She laughed like a small kid.

Shaan stops the car. Acha tho main Bandar aur tum, tum kya ho pari? and it started to rain as if god was approving it. Khanak stepped out of the car and started to dance in the rain twirling. Her slim body teasing Shaan's intentions. (Oh btw guys white transparent. Hehehehe!)

Shaan: OHHH NOO!!

Shaan tried getting khanak but she just ran and finally getting her he put her in the car. And put the keys in the engine but it jst wouldn't start. They were stuck.

He saw a cottage and carried Khanak there .

Shaan: Hello, koi hain?It was empty. He put khanak down but khanak wasn't willing to let go, she was drifting off to sleep and was shivering. Shaan took off his jacket and put it on her. He then prepared a fire and stuffed hay together to make a bed for Khanak. He sat there staring at her. Her beauty jst drew him towards her as he slowly put his arms around her to check if she was cold. But she was fine and he went to sleep sitting beside her as the night drifted away.

Khanak woke up the next morning and looked at her surroundings. She remembered all of yesterday and her eyes widened as she saw Shaan next to her. She pushed him, making Shaan grab her waist and pull her down in his sleep. She was surprised with their close proximity. SHAAANNN

Shaan woke up to her eyes. It was the most beautiful morning for himIf only every morning was this beautiful. He then snapped out of it and left her.

Khanak got up and paced around: Ohh god papa kitne worried honge. Shaan please chalo and a sleepy shaan followed her and they started walking( no im not going to magically make the car work)finally reached the temple where all were sitting worried. They looked at the two as Khanak ran towards her dad and hugged him. He was soo happy to get his daughter back.

YG: chalo beti, ghar chalo.

One of the people from the crowd: ROKO!

Precap: why did they stop them. Wats going to happen now. Wat do u guys think? Next one is a short update with a hard impact.

Chapter Eleven

Recap: One of the people from the crowd: ROKO!

YG : kya howa bhaisab

Person: Aapki beti abhi abhi ek raat ek ajnabi ladke ke saath guzaar kar ayi hai aur aap use ghar lejhrahe hai. Uski halath tho dekhiye, na jaane kaha muh kala karke ayi hai

YG: aapne zaban ko lagam dijiye. Hame apni betiyon par pura bharosa hai. Khanak has started crying and Shaan is shocked

Khanak: papa main Shivji ki kasam khathi hoon, aapki aur ma ki kasam khathi hoon, maine kuch galath nahin kiya. Aap Shaan se puch sakthe hai

Shaan: Ji sir kuch bhi nahin howa, gadi kharab hogayi aur barish horahithi aur. But YG had put his hand up.

YG: hum jante hai, hame tumpe bharosa hai aur sabse zayada aapni bethi par. He joined his hands to everyone: Namaste hum kal milthe hai, chalo Khanak, Shaan.

Person: aap aapni bethi ki glathi chupasakthe hai par hum is kalangani(I dnt know how to say it in English but the best word would be impure) ko is mandir main per bhi rakne nahi denge. Hum sanatini(religious) logo main sanskar jaisi bhi koi cheez hai jo aapne shayat apne bethi ko nahi diye. And everyone started chanting,: nahin aane dege! Khanak was crying, YG was disappointed with the people and Shaan. Well Shaan was furious. Furious would be an understatement. How dare they point a finger at Khanak. His khanak!

Shaan: BAS! Bas hogaya. He gives a fake laugh and claps. Wah! Kya duniya aagaya hai jahan ek ladki pe sab ungliya(fingers) uthathe jarehe. Khanak ne kuch galath nahi kiya aur na kabhi kar sakthi(khank looks up). Khanak jaise pavitra ladki aaj tak nahi dekhi maine. Uski sirf charitra(character) hi nahi, par man(heart) bhi pavitra hai. Ispe ungli udhane se pehle aap aapne ghar mein dhekle tu phethar(beneficial) honga. Kya aapki bethiyaan aab bhi salwar kameez pehenthi aur aapne badho ke samne kayide(manners) se rehthi hai. Acha yeh tho dur ki baat hai, kya aap ki bethiya aab bhi aap bhulthi hai yeh tum? Kahiye. Jawab dijiye? Pause and silence.Maine thik socha tha, sawal sab ke paas hai par jawab ek bhi nahi. Aur agar Khanak bhi ungli udh rahi hai tu kyun udh rahi. Yahi na ki mere aur Khanak ka kya rishta hai aur main inke ghar mein kyun rehrahaho. Hain na? aapka jawab mere paas hai. He walks inside the mandir and gets a handful of SINDOOR and FILLS KHANAK'S MAANG!!!!!(party party!!!! Woooohhh!!! Are yaaro zaara nacho tho, shadi hai aur hum baraat im sure hum shaan ke taraaf se hai aur uski chothe bhi churayege. Wat say? Aur shaan yeh muka kese chodtha, ladki bhi yahi thi aur mandir bhi- yeh tho free shadi hogaya!!lol)

 

enjoy people and comment kashish is signing off now..over and out 
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