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PKYEK FF - The Crossroads...*NEW* Pg 51!!! UpDaTeD (Page 29)

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Posted: 31 January 2011 at 9:13am | IP Logged
Re: Part 16 & 17
Chand looked as if, "Haseena had ran away with another vampire!" LOLLOLLOL I can just imagine the look on his face!
 
And why does Kabir needs lipstick or Abhay?? LOL
 
Poor, Piya (she must now thing Abhay is ummm LOL cuz, he needs lipstick)!  LOL That reminds me of a friend of mine who liked this guy in school. I remember she had a BIG crush on him and would always talk about him about how he was unlike other guys! LOL Well, guess what he was definitely "unlike other guys" as we found out he was gay as he was dating another guy...........LOL. I remember her reaction, she didn't know if she should feel heartbroken, stupid, or disgusted. LOL
 
Chand poor guy...........everyone's just in the own world instead of giving him something for relief from the dye he just swallowed. ROFL
 
 


Edited by lighteningbuzz - 31 January 2011 at 9:14am

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Posted: 31 January 2011 at 9:27am | IP Logged
Originally posted by amail1601

Originally posted by yoyolo

Hey sweety !! awesome part as usual !! the lipstick confusion... BWAHAHAAHAH ROFL
Kabir and Abhay going for a date... Abhay wants to use lipstick...LOLROFLROFL

I laughed so hard that, as usual, Mom shouted at me ROFL
And I love ur FF the way it is Big smileSmile

hehe and yeah, I do have trouble with reading hindi, actually there were a lot of hindi dialogues in the 14th or 15th part, I dont remember which one so I couldn't really understand what was happening but there wasn't a lot of hindi dialogues in the 16th part so I edited my post EmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassed
will try my best to improve my hindi Embarrassed hehe
 
Hey Ish!! SmileSmileSmile
 
Thanks soooooooooo much!!! Really needed the encouragement!! EmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassed
 
Ohhh!! Hmm...can't reduce the Hindi coz of the authenticity factor, though I have tried, and it is my natural tendency to write in English...but yeah...we can do one thing - scrap me (my inbox is always full) whatever parts you don't understand, and I'll translate them for you. Smile
 
 


awwww that s so sweet of u Hug

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Posted: 31 January 2011 at 9:29am | IP Logged
Originally posted by lighteningbuzz

Re: Part 16 & 17
It's so good the way you don't miss any update!! *hugs* Smile
 
Chand looked as if, "Haseena had ran away with another vampire!" LOLLOLLOL I can just imagine the look on his face!
ROFL I know...made my head spin. ROFL
 
And why does Kabir needs lipstick or Abhay?? LOL
Erm.....they only know! EmbarrassedEmbarrassed
 
Poor, Piya (she must now thing Abhay is ummm LOL cuz, he needs lipstick)!  LOL That reminds me of a friend of mine who liked this guy in school. I remember she had a BIG crush on him and would always talk about him about how he was unlike other guys! LOL Well, guess what he was definitely "unlike other guys" as we found out he was gay as he was dating another guy...........LOL. I remember her reaction, she didn't know if she should feel heartbroken, stupid, or disgusted. LOL
Aww!!! ROFL Can imagine her condition. I have this friend who keeps saying that all my crushes are gay.....with 'evidence'.....it's sooo weird! ROFL
 
Chand poor guy...........everyone's just in the own world instead of giving him something for relief from the dye he just swallowed. ROFL
LOLLOLLOLHe's a vampire...he'll heal. LOLLOL 
 
 
 
Thanks sooooooooooooo much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Embarrassed
 
 

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Posted: 31 January 2011 at 10:33am | IP Logged
Too funny the dostana part just cant stop laughingROFLAnd its ok if Abhiya takes a back seat the craziness makes up for it.
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Thanx for the pm
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Posted: 31 January 2011 at 11:41am | IP Logged
Originally posted by shaggyscooby

Too funny the dostana part just cant stop laughingROFLAnd its ok if Abhiya takes a back seat the craziness makes up for it.
Wink
Thanx for the pm
 
 
LOLLOLLOLthanks!!
 
and you're welcome!Smile
 
I'm in the middle of writing the next update...stay tuned! Wink
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Posted: 31 January 2011 at 12:07pm | IP Logged
 
 
Part 18
 
 
Crunch. Crunch. Yummy!
 
Daanish looks at the last biscuit, and holding it almost reverently, he raises it to his lips, like a parched man trying to drink the last drop of water......... He nibbles on it, but unable to hold back anymore, swallows it whole and smacks his lips. All around him, empty wrappers flutter and float in the warm, fragrant breeze.......
 
Mmmm....that was nice.
 
Kaash....share kar sakta........... Piaaaa...............................
 
The breeze lulls him to sleep...........
 
 
*
 
Pia: Abhay?
 
Abhay (coming towards her): Pia.
 
Pia (rushing towards him): Oh thank god tum aa gaye!
 
Abhay (holding her arms to stop her from colliding with him): Are you ok?
 
(He lifts her face up and looks at her worriedly. Their eyes lock, and Pia suddenly finds herself unable to respond. However, the desperate worry on his face helps her to snap out of her trance.)
 
Pia: Yes...I am fine.
 
(Abhay releases her and steps back.)
 
Abhay: Good.
 
Pia: Abhay? Tum woh saamaan laaye?
 
Abhay: Haan. Car mein hai. I will just get it.
 
(He comes back with knotted ropes and candles.)
 
*holding her gaze again*
 
You girls be careful, okay?
 
(Pia nods and leaves. Abhay watches her go, and takes out his phone.)
 
Kabir? Yeah. I am here. With the lipsticks. Now we will have fun.
 
 
*
 
Misha and Tracker are busy tying up the loose ends.
 
Misha: Theek se kheencho Tracker...jaan nahin hai kya haathon mein?
 
Tracker: Mishooooo!! Kar hi toh rahi hoon. Main thak gayi hoon. Hum rest nahin kar sakte?
 
[Misha sees Pia.]
 
Misha: Oh thank god! Pia...tum baandho Maaya ko. I'll keep that stuff.
 
[Pia goes off to tie up Maaya, while Misha climbs up into Daanish's bedroom and places the candles. The girls then all go up to the roof and get into position.]
 
 
*
 
Kabir (annoyed): I don't know how I ended up helping you.
 
Abhay: You are not helping me. We are here to keep an eye on the girls.
 
Angad (dreamily): I can keep an eye...no...both my eyes on Ruhi forever. Kitni pyaari hai woh.......
 
Kabir: Bhagwan...bachaao mujhe is Tracker ke deewane se!!
 
Angad: Ruhiiiiiii.....
 
[Kabir and Abhay exchange glances behind Angad's back, until they both realise what they are doing and look away uncomfortably. They settle down in their hiding place to wait.]
 
 
*
 
Pia (worriedly): Misha...are you sure this will work?
 
Misha: Yes baby...yeh mera plan hai....of course it is going to work!
 
Tracker: Lekin agar hum pakde gaye toh?
 
Maaya: Toh sab responsibility meri hogi. Sab poblem meri wajah se hi hui hai.
 
Pia: Don't blame yourself Maaya!
 
Maaya (emotionally): Nahin Pia. I was wrong. Maine Daanish ko trust kiya. Maine uske saath...I got pregnant....aur phir sach bolne ki himmat nahin ki. Agar Panchhi aur Daanish ki shaadi ho gayi hoti toh?
 
Misha (to lighten the atmosphere): Toh kya.....Panchhi se shaadi kar ke Daanish waise bhi barbaad ho jaata.
 
Pia (smacking Misha): Stop it Mish!
 
[Suddenly they hear a voice.]
 
Voice: Having fun without me girls?
 
 
*
 
Haseena: Uff! Kya ho gaya hai tumhein Chaand? (hissing) Why are you behaving like that human girl.....Rani Roopwati?? Woh delicate doll *tilts her head* ....har two minutes mein faint ho jaati thi........
 
[She goes to the front door, and is left shocked to the core.......]
 
 
*
 
Kabir (pushing Angad): Door ho mujhse! Ek toh waise hi it is so dark..!
 
Angad (pushing Kabir back): Toh mujhe bhi toh jagah de baithne ki!
 
[They both start pushing and pummelling, and jostling Abhay in the process. Finally, unable to concentrate on Pia because of their squabbling, Abhay leaves.]
 
 
***
 
 
 
 
 
 
 __edit__
 
typos *sighs*
 
 
 


Edited by amail1601 - 31 January 2011 at 12:09pm

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Posted: 31 January 2011 at 1:39pm | IP Logged
I love ur FF... like seriously !! Hug
it's soooo funny and interesting and very entertainingDancing
omg.. what are they up to ? haha. I think I've understood what they're gonna do with the ropes, the candles & the lipsticks (haha it sounds so funny LOL) but as this FF is always full of surprises I might be wrong as wellBig smile
But OMGGGG I'm so excited can't wait for the next part !!!
You're too good, there's always a part of mystery & suspense in every update, and it always makes me want to read more and more !!EmbarrassedThumbs Up


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Posted: 31 January 2011 at 6:22pm | IP Logged
ROFLROFLROFLROFL
anyways update soon..
need 2 know wat d girls r upto n boys helping dem..

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