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PKYEK FF - The Crossroads...*NEW* Pg 51!!! UpDaTeD (Page 25)

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Posted: 28 January 2011 at 11:46am | IP Logged
it was good but too short

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Posted: 28 January 2011 at 12:15pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by sanaghaffar1997

it was good but too short
 
thanks. Smile
 
lol..I like to keep my updates short but frequent. something you can read in 5-10 minutes everyday, or maybe even twice or thrice a day. Smile
 
might start something longer later...Wink
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Posted: 28 January 2011 at 2:04pm | IP Logged
 
 
 
 
Part 15
 
 
Daanish is confused. But he is also happy. He is alone in his house. There is no one telling him that he is undead. No one to take his furniture away.
 
He thinks of his parents, his beloved brother, his Panchhi....all are upset with him. Maaya is dead too.
 
Pia. It is all because of her.
 
But I am not alive either. Maaya ne toh yehi kaha tha. Aur yeh bhi that I did not get my wishes fulfilled because I was bad.
 
Kya main bura tha? Kya galat kiya maine?
 
Kuch galat nahin kiya.
 
Aur ab main is baare mein nahin sochoonga.
 
Now I will only think of sandwiches.
 
He goes down to the kitchen and makes himself all the sandwiches possible and starts eating.
 
*
 
There is astonishment on Chaand's face, followed by puzzlement, trailed by disgust. He sprays out whatever amount of the liquid he has not swallowed and gasps for breath. Impatient with the amount of time Chaand is taking to get the restorative blue liquid he had asked for, Abhay comes into his room. He stops when he sees Chaand choking.
 
Abhay: Dad? What's wrong?
 
(He sees the overturned goblet.)
 
(angrily) What the hell have you done Dad!!! Aapko kaha kisne tha use peene ko??
 
Chaand (choking): Sorry...maine gaaya bhi "Pi loon"....but koi reply nahin mila toh main pi hi gaya...
 
Abhay: Huh!!! You know what it was?
 
Chaand (still coughing): I think I have a good idea of what it was...
 
Haseena (suddenly appearing at the doorway): Yahaan kya ho raha hai? What is going on?! Tell. Me. NOW!
 
*
 
Angad finally catches up with Kabir.
 
Angad: Look, dude, tum please jo bhi karo, dhyaan se. Tumne Pia ko already bahut hurt kiya hai. Ab gadbad mat karna.
 
Kabir: I know. Tabhi maine sab ek letter mein likh diya hai. Kal use doonga. I hope ise padh ke mujhe woh maaf kar de.
 
Angad: Aur agar nahin kiya?
 
Kabir: Nahin kiya toh.......I don't know. I will wait for her.
 
[Angad's phone rings. He listens in amazement.]
 
Angad: Chal.
 
Kabir: Kahaan?
 
Angad: Tera mood theek karne!
 
[They both go off.]
 
 
 
***
 
 
 
(lots of typos coz I'm sleepy...but Chaand was about to explode so had to let the poor guy spit out the disgusting stuff.OuchLOL)
 
 
 
 
 
 


Edited by amail1601 - 28 January 2011 at 2:08pm

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Posted: 28 January 2011 at 2:05pm | IP Logged

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Ok im not sure ke should i laugh or be angry at that insensitive beep Dan! but im still rofling at the sandwhiches part! ROFLROFL 
 
And you were planning to burst Chaand! Haww! Good he spitted that red what ever it was on right time! Poor him. LOLLOL
 
And 'pee loon' ROFL Now i can never listen to this song without laughing out load and people staring at me thinking im losing it. LOLLOL
 
And sachi yeh ho kya raha hai? Mujhe bhi koi bataoo? LOL
 
Kabir Kabir Kabir. *sigh* Piya is not meant for you. Actually feeling bad for him. Show mein bhi yahi haal hai. Ouch
Anyways now what is Angad upto? Ek aur fatak khaane ka iraada hai kya? LOL 
 
Nice update Adi! Enjoyed it even more than the last one! Big smile


Edited by sugaryanu - 28 January 2011 at 2:19pm

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Posted: 29 January 2011 at 3:13am | IP Logged
Re: Part 14 & 15
 
LOLLOLDanish still hasn't found out rather he is undead or dead? Wait, how can he eat sandwiches, isn't he dead?
 
Chand! LOL OMG, he seems to want to drink everything he can get his hands on doesn't he! LOL
 
@Pee Loon! LOL
 
Kabir is so cute when he said, "I will wait for her." Awwwwww


Edited by lighteningbuzz - 29 January 2011 at 3:13am
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Posted: 29 January 2011 at 6:42am | IP Logged
Yayyyiieee !! I thankyou for updating soooo fast !! u are great !! hehe
I loved this part !!Danish really got what he deserved Dancing hehehehe hope Maaya will make him suffer for eternity buhuhahahahaha
Kabir & Angad are hilarious !!
and hahaha what's wrong with the Raichands ?LOL


Edited by yoyolo - 29 January 2011 at 6:46am
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Posted: 29 January 2011 at 7:21am | IP Logged
Originally posted by sugaryanu

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Ok im not sure ke should i laugh or be angry at that insensitive beep Dan! but im still rofling at the sandwhiches part! ROFLROFL 
 
And you were planning to burst Chaand! Haww! Good he spitted that red what ever it was on right time! Poor him. LOLLOL
 
And 'pee loon' ROFL Now i can never listen to this song without laughing out load and people staring at me thinking im losing it. LOLLOL
 
And sachi yeh ho kya raha hai? Mujhe bhi koi bataoo? LOL
 
Kabir Kabir Kabir. *sigh* Piya is not meant for you. Actually feeling bad for him. Show mein bhi yahi haal hai. Ouch
Anyways now what is Angad upto? Ek aur fatak khaane ka iraada hai kya? LOL 
 
Nice update Adi! Enjoyed it even more than the last one! Big smile
 
 
LOLLOLLOL I go all giggly whenever I hear that song, and yeah, people do think I have gone crazy. ROFLROFLROFL
 
God knows Angad ka kya hoga....I think being in love is making him grow up a bit....what say? Wink
 
Thanks soo much!! Embarrassed
 

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Posted: 29 January 2011 at 7:44am | IP Logged
Originally posted by lighteningbuzz

Re: Part 14 & 15
 
LOLLOLDanish still hasn't found out rather he is undead or dead? Wait, how can he eat sandwiches, isn't he dead?
 
Chand! LOL OMG, he seems to want to drink everything he can get his hands on doesn't he! LOL
 
@Pee Loon! LOL
 
Kabir is so cute when he said, "I will wait for her." Awwwwww
 
ROFL Woh you see...Daanish is a bit slow na. Wink
 
Daanish eats, Chaand drinks....hai na perfect couple? TongueLOLLOLLOLLOL
 
Yeah...even in the show, I used to find Kabir really cute until the whole triangle mess - jealousy and a lack of trust do bring out the worst in people. Ouch 
 
Thanks for the feedback!! Smile
 
 

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