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Posted: 27 January 2011 at 12:01pm | IP Logged
 
 
Part 13
 
 
Daanish stared at Maaya, unable to process what she had just said.
 
Daanish: Tumne....undead kaha?
 
Maaya: Haan.
 
Daanish: Undead?
 
Maaya: Daanish...
 
Daanish (shaking her): Bolo Maya bolo!
 
Maaya (crying out): Yes Daanish. You are undead! U.N.D.E.A.D. Undead!!!
 
[Daanish turns away from her. There is a heavy silence while Daanish comes to terms with what he has just heard. Finally, he turns around with tears in his eyes.]
 
Daanish (in a small voice): Maaya?
 
Maaya: Hmm?
 
Daanish (in an even smaller voice): Melody itni chocolatey kyun hoti hai?
 
[Maaya stares at him.]
 
 
*
 
Chaand: Haseena...
 
Haseena: Yes Chaand?
 
Chaand: Do we have a son...or a daughter? Beti kab hui?
 
Haseena: Excuse me?
 
[She comes over to the door and stands with her mouth open and her head twisted to the right.]
 
 
*
 
Maaya starts walking out but Daanish grabs her arm.
 
Daanish: Hey! Sorry yaar...main toh mazaak kar raha tha.
 
Maaya: Tumhein mazaak soojh raha hai?
 
Daanish (contritely): Sorry. Par kya karoon...undead...I mean, mujhe toh pata hi nahin undead hota kya hai.
 
Maaya (sighing): It means that you have died, but you can still move around your body.
 
Daanish: Oh!
 
Maaya: Only the dead can see you. You are one of us now.
 
Daanish: One of you? Par tum toh dead ho!
 
Maaya: Haan...par meri aatma....main humesha bhatakti rahoongi. Badla lene ke liye. Tumhaare saath rehne ke liye.
 
Daanish: Mere saath?
 
Maaya (emotionally): Haan. Tumhaare saath. You were the only one I loved. You promised that we will be together...always. I died wishing to be with you forever. Isliye.......
 
Daanish: Par main toh Panchhi ke saath rehna chaahta tha...
 
Maaya: Tumhaari wish galat thi. Tum galat the. Tumne mujhe dhokha diya.
 
Daanish: Chal jhoothi!!
 
Maaya: Daanish...
 
Daanish: Main baahar ja raha hoon. Mera peechha mat karna.
 
Maaya: Par Daanish...
 
[Suddenly there are sounds of people moving below. Daanish and Maaya go to see.]
 
Misha: Okay guys....this is the place. Yeh sab furniture cover kar do aur saari jagah saaf kar do. Kal ise renovate karenge.
 
Daanish (yelling): Oye! Haath mat lagaana meri cheezon ko!!
 
[He keeps screaming and shouting, but the workers carry on with their work of cleaning the place like they cannot hear anything.)
 
Maaya (in a sing-song voice): I told you so.........................
 
 
*
 
Abhay: Mom. Mom!!!!!
 
[Haseena keeps on staring at him, her tilting from one side to another.]
 
Oh come on Mom...wake up!!
 
Haseena (startled): Abhayyyyyyyyyyyyyyy! (hissing) What are you doing with MY collection of red lipsticksssssssssss? Have you gone mad?
 
Abhay: No mom. Mujhe bas chaahiye thi.
Aapke paas aur hain?
 
[Haseena faints. Chaand starts banging his head against the wall.]
 
 
***
 
 
 

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Posted: 27 January 2011 at 12:37pm | IP Logged
ROFL
And it has to be one of the best updates till now!
 
Can't believe it im saying this but i actually enjoyed Danish and Maya's part! Shocked LOL Seriously only you can make them enjoyable! LOLLOL
 
her head twisted to the right.
Hahaha! She does this all the time!
 
And omg! Did Abhay have transgender surgery? *faints at the thought* ROFL
 
Poor Chaandeena. Kya kya sehna padega Abhay ke haathon? Disapprove LOL
or rather Abhay's strange habits and obsessions which involve more than hands? ROFL
 
Tooo good! Waiting for more! =)

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Posted: 27 January 2011 at 12:46pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by sugaryanu

ROFL
And it has to be one of the best updates till now!
ShockedShockedShocked really??!!! thank you!! Embarrassed *gets thoughtful*  
 
Can't believe it im saying this but i actually enjoyed Danish and Maya's part! Shocked LOL Seriously only you can make them enjoyable! LOLLOL
awwwwwwww!! Thank you!! EmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassed
 
her head twisted to the right.
Hahaha! She does this all the time!
LOLLOLkya kare...control nahin hota na. TongueLOL
 
And omg! Did Abhay have transgender surgery? *faints at the thought* ROFL 
ShockedShockedShockedhawwwww!! nooooooo!!
 
Poor Chaandeena. Kya kya sehna padega Abhay ke haathon? Disapprove LOL
or rather Abhay's strange habits and obsessions which involve more than hands? ROFL
LOLLOL jo panga liya woh nibhaana padega....loote lipsticks chaahe loote woh mascara, chaand ko haseena ko uthaana padega........ WinkTongue
 
Tooo good! Waiting for more! =)
Thank you!!!!!! Embarrassed
 
 
p.s. you're first again!!!!!!!! WinkClapWink
 
p.p.s. do check your inbox!! Embarrassed
 
 
 

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Posted: 27 January 2011 at 12:50pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by amail1601

Originally posted by sugaryanu

ROFL
And it has to be one of the best updates till now!
ShockedShockedShocked really??!!! thank you!! Embarrassed *gets thoughtful*  
Yup! i mean the previous were good too but this one had a special touch! Wink
 
Can't believe it im saying this but i actually enjoyed Danish and Maya's part! Shocked LOL Seriously only you can make them enjoyable! LOLLOL
awwwwwwww!! Thank you!! EmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassed
 
her head twisted to the right.
Hahaha! She does this all the time!
LOLLOLkya kare...control nahin hota na. TongueLOL
 
And omg! Did Abhay have transgender surgery? *faints at the thought* ROFL 
ShockedShockedShockedhawwwww!! nooooooo!!
 
Poor Chaandeena. Kya kya sehna padega Abhay ke haathon? Disapprove LOL
or rather Abhay's strange habits and obsessions which involve more than hands? ROFL
LOLLOL jo panga liya woh nibhaana padega....loote lipsticks chaahe loote woh mascara, chaand ko haseena ko uthaana padega........ WinkTongue
 
Tooo good! Waiting for more! =)
Thank you!!!!!! Embarrassed
 
 
p.s. you're first again!!!!!!!! WinkClapWink
Arey haan! yeh tu mein bhool gai LOL
Yay for me! LOLLOL
 
p.p.s. do check your inbox!! Embarrassed
Checked and replied. Embarrassed 
 
 
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Posted: 27 January 2011 at 1:01pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by sugaryanu

Originally posted by amail1601

Originally posted by sugaryanu

ROFL
And it has to be one of the best updates till now!
ShockedShockedShocked really??!!! thank you!! Embarrassed *gets thoughtful*  
Yup! i mean the previous were good too but this one had a special touch! Wink
Lol...I didn't mean that...was just thinking about what you liked so could focus on improvement. Smile 
 
 
p.s. you're first again!!!!!!!! WinkClapWink
Arey haan! yeh tu mein bhool gai LOL
Yay for me! LOLLOL
Yayyy! ClapLOL 
p.p.s. do check your inbox!! Embarrassed
Checked and replied. Embarrassed 
Replied too. Smile 
 

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Posted: 27 January 2011 at 8:09pm | IP Logged
hei,
it was very funny actually..
"melody itni choclatee kyun hoti hai" ROFL!!! to d core.ROFLROFLROFL
I couldn't stop thinking abt tat convo.
then haseena fainting seeing abhay ROFLROFLROFL
totally a fun filled update..

waiting 4 ur next update..
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Posted: 28 January 2011 at 2:19am | IP Logged
It was crazily hilarious I mean  with Abhay and lipstickROFLROFL
Keep such updates coming they make my dayLOL
Thank u for pmSmile
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Posted: 28 January 2011 at 4:01am | IP Logged
Originally posted by amail1601

Originally posted by lighteningbuzz

Wow yaar! You have this awesome, brilliant sense of humor!! You always have me cracking up! LOL
ShockedShockedShocked May I please quote you on that?? My best friend used to keep telling me I have a lame sense of humour. OuchLOLLOLLOLLOL 
Seriously, thank you soooooooooooooooooooo much!!!!!!!!!!!!! EmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassed 
 
These lines were out of this world hilarious!
LOLLOLLOL Glad you thought so!!! EmbarrassedEmbarrassed 

Chaand: It was such a weird situation. I wanted you, but I had come to see your sister. I have fought so many times with these TV creatives to stop using our story, but they are adamant. They say it brings them TRPs...

Oh My dear God! LOLLOL I am sure it does!
ROFL Yeah...the number of times I have seen that particular twist... LOLLOLLOL
 
 
Haseena: Oh Chaand.....unka naam mat lo. Unke naam se...I cannot control...... [Her eyes start glowing.]
 
ROFL!
 
"unke naam se...I cannot control!" ROFL CVs run for your lives!!! LOL *CVs run*
 
Now, if this show shuts down tomm becuz, somehow the CVs disappeared, I won't be surprised by what happened to them and how it happened to them. LOL
 

Chaand: Sorry darling. I will bring one for you tomorrow.

Haseena (putting her face close to his): Chaand.... that. is. why. I fell in love with you.......... you are so sweet!

Chaand: Oh Haseena...............

[They move apart and stare into each other's eyes, doing little twisting neck movements in that ancient ritual of love known as 'necking'... Of course, some misguided humans later started using the term for a very disgusting (from a Vampirical point of view) activity where people actually touched each other, but that is another story.]

LOL LOL
 
And then:
 

Maaya: Haan Daanish. Main. Main tumhaare liye hi aayi hoon.

Daanish: P-p-p-par ..tum toh...tum toh marr gayi ho na? You are dead!

Maaya (laughs bitterly): Toh maine kab mana kiya?

Oh God!
 
 
Daanish: Agar tum marr gayi ho, toh main tumhein kaise dekh sakta hoon?

Maaya: Socho Daanish. Saath jeene..aur saath marrne ke vaada kiya tha na..

ROFLROFL Poor Danish! ROFL
 
Daanish: No. It cannot be. *pushes her away* I am not dead.

Maaya: Yes. You are not dead.

Daanish: Toh phir?

Maaya: You are undead

LOL I wonder what is next in store for Danish......
 
 
Great work! Clap
 
 
Thank you!!! EmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassed

 

Originally posted by lighteningbuzz

Okay, I just got done reading your 12th update.
 
Kabir-Angag Dostana- LOL.................wait, what happened to Abhay??? LOL I think Abhay-Kabir are completely made for each other! LOL
 
Chand-Haseena ki love story........LOL As John Abraham says in Dostana, "What a wonderful story!" LOL Wink
 
Keep it up! Your updates are awesome.
 
 
 
 
 
Abhay...well......actually, he is made just for me na...toh keeping him away from Kabir. EmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassedLOLLOL
 
Thanks so much!!! *hugs*
 
 
Your best friend told you have a "lame sense of humour." Wow, is she nuts? Maybe her definition of humour is different.
 
You are keeping Abhay away from Kabir..........lol LOL Nahin!!!!!!!! but, but, I liked their jodi..........even the SBS thought so. LOL 
 
Well, I can understand that you want Abhay for yourself. Wink But, you are going to have to wrestle with Piya for that.........but, I think that would be fairly easy becuz, Piya at times can be easy to fool as she has the capability to annoy Abhay to bits........LOL  LOL

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