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FF- DEEWANGEE: Ch18 'Its 8 pm on pg 55 (Page 4)

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Chapter 1-
 
Arpi's house: Its 8.00 am & Arpita is bed cuddling under her pink blanket... Suddenly she hears some one yelling?

"Ab tak so rahi ho kya? Wake up lazy bones.. College nahi jana hai kya? Im getting late" . . . . It was Jagat, Arpita's elder brother who was getting late for office.

 

Arpi, still struggling in bed, manages to wake-up and gets ready in 15 mins. Meanwhile, at the breakfast table-

Jagat- Mummy, humne kaha na Aapse is ladki ke karn hum  aaj phir late ho jayenge.. Everyday Im late because of her?

Aparna,who was busy serving aloo parathas did not pay heed to Jagat.

Aparna- Toh kya??. . . . she said casually.

Tumhri choti behan hai? tum ye sab nahi karoge toh kaun karega??

Jagat- Ghar mein sirf hum akele hai kya? Papa nahi le jaa sakte use? Jab dekho tab humiko sab karna padta hai. . . . He said angrily?

Aparna was just about to say sumthing but stopped when she saw Arpi coming. She greeted her with an embrace, kissed her on her forehead & said- Arre wah!!! Humri gudiya toh aaj bahut sundar lag rahi hai?Yeh lo jaldi se naashta karlo.

Arpi, who by now had noticed an angry Jagat sitting beside her, tried to change the topic for she knew he was fum9ing with anger?

Arpi- why are you yelling early morning.. its not good for heath. . . . she chuckled.

Aparna served Arpi some toast and a glass of orange juice. Soon, Subodh entered the dining hall and took his seat besides Arpi..

Subodh- "Yeh kya bachhi? tum sirf toast kha rahi ho?  U'll feel hungry. Chalo eat these Parathas jo tumhri Mummy ne banaya.." he began feeding Arpi some parathas.

Aparna- " what are you doing Sharmaji?? She wont them"

Arpita- "Papa, hum yeh sab khayenge toh? I'll put on more weight." She said shyly.

Aparna- "kya aap nahi jante.. she's quite Health- conscious!!!"

 

Jagat who was now fuming with anger suddenly roared-

" Agar Aap sab ka pyaar-dular Khatam ho gaya hai toh kya hum jaa sakte hai?? Im getting late"

Arpi hugs both her parents and gives Jagat a slight hug and says- "Sorry Bhaiyya.. chalo lets go."

 
Next update: AFTER CHRISTMAS LOL
 
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Edited by KriYa_life - 20 December 2010 at 5:42am

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Thank You Scraps, Graphics and Comments for orkut, myspace
it's very well written.......waiting for next......Wink





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Originally posted by yoga23priya

Thank You Scraps, Graphics and Comments for orkut, myspace
it's very well written.......waiting for next......Wink
thanks a lot.. but Im not satisfied with it... It should have been more longer and better...



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well written yaar... :) :)

as far as the character goes i love them..at first i was a bit confused of the characters then i realised 'twas totally different from the original!! i wud love to see them like this onscreen too!!
do continue...will be awaiting the next one!! :)

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Originally posted by KriYa_life

Originally posted by yoga23priya

Thank You Scraps, Graphics and Comments for orkut, myspace
it's very well written.......waiting for next......Wink
thanks a lot.. but Im not satisfied with it... It should have been more longer and better...
no worries dear may be next chapter will be longTongue




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Originally posted by -sia-

well written yaar... :) :) thanks a lot dear...

as far as the character goes i love them..at first i was a bit confused of the characters then i realised 'twas totally different from the original!! I purposely kept it like that i wud love to see them like this onscreen too!!
yaar even I ...do continue...will be awaiting the next one!! :) hmm.... wait wait... LOL


Edited by KriYa_life - 20 December 2010 at 7:13am
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oh that very nice

again i got confused

its totally differnt take on the story

wonderful

sure let it come after xmas


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wooww Ramona..
amazing..
m waiting fr the next dear..
totally different....!!!

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