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Pieces Of These Species - 150PtsUpdt(FINISHED) (Page 69)

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Posted: 08 February 2011 at 7:07am | IP Logged
Finally managed to complete it TongueTongue read the entire thing till pt. 120 ... the last part was beautifully written .. akanksha ....you are a gem of a writer dear ClapClap... i could feel every word of the ashi-kabir conversation ... the entire part was so beautifully written that i am unable to say it in a proper phrase .... Smiledo continue soon ... would love to read more ... i am completely hooked to RCC these days and it's only because of you guys ... ClapClap

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Posted: 08 February 2011 at 8:14am | IP Logged
Originally posted by BUBLAI

Finally managed to complete it TongueTongue read the entire thing till pt. 120 ... the last part was beautifully written .. akanksha ....you are a gem of a writer dear ClapClap... i could feel every word of the ashi-kabir conversation ... the entire part was so beautifully written that i am unable to say it in a proper phrase .... Smiledo continue soon ... would love to read more ... i am completely hooked to RCC these days and it's only because of you guys ... ClapClap

Aww, thank you! HugI'm really glad you liked it, && we found a new reader. Big smile Liz will update today around 2am IST. And I might update after that. Smile

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Posted: 09 February 2011 at 9:35am | IP Logged
Originally posted by _Akanksha_

Originally posted by BUBLAI

Finally managed to complete it TongueTongue read the entire thing till pt. 120 ... the last part was beautifully written .. akanksha ....you are a gem of a writer dear ClapClap... i could feel every word of the ashi-kabir conversation ... the entire part was so beautifully written that i am unable to say it in a proper phrase .... Smiledo continue soon ... would love to read more ... i am completely hooked to RCC these days and it's only because of you guys ... ClapClap

Aww, thank you! HugI'm really glad you liked it, && we found a new reader. Big smile Liz will update today around 2am IST. And I might update after that. Smile

okay ... i am eagerly waiting for the next update Tongue
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Posted: 09 February 2011 at 9:52am | IP Logged
OHMIGODDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD....he hear heard hearddddddddddddddddddd...omg omg omgggggggggggggggggggggg i loooooooveeee u my angell..ur such a seety pue..totty fruity..candy mandyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy..awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwieeeeeeeee
 
wen i regain my senses ill reply with a clear state of mind!

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Posted: 09 February 2011 at 10:29am | IP Logged
Originally posted by luv_wacko

OHMIGODDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD....he hear heard hearddddddddddddddddddd...omg omg omgggggggggggggggggggggg i loooooooveeee u my angell..ur such a seety pue..totty fruity..candy mandyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy..awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwieeeeeeeee
 
wen i regain my senses ill reply with a clear state of mind!
ahahha!!
wacko, can we plz get an update from u?
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Part 121

 

 ''Ashi.'' He muttered softly, his voice barely audible. He came rushing towards her and hugged her tightly. Unknowingly she hugged him back. Thousand of questions going on the back of her mind, 'wht is with him? Did he hear me speak to kabir? Does he love me too? Heyy bhaggu!!'

"ashi.. why did u leave? I cld see u were disturbed. Are u okay??" he smirked.  " I know this was a fake call.. Stop pretending now!!"

"Pretending?" she looked at him.

He let go of her and held her shoulders, "aww sweetheart, yesh!! Pretending.. now dnt tell me u weren't.. not wanting to sit with your friends, fidgeting with ur cell phone when your nervous, tightening your fists, crumpling your shorts, and then all of a sudden.. Getting a fake call, and then u pretend as o its kabir.. and tht too wen? Wen u see me with meher.. didn't u say ud help me to get her.." he pouted

"Of course I did! And you have her now! Did u even need my help?" she rolled her eyes, "and whts with the pretending business? Why would I pretend?"

"coz I smell something burning!!" he grinned

"psycho!! Why wld I be jealous of u and meher… u loved her, u got her…wht has tht got to do with me.. am happy for u, get tht straight in your pea sized brain!" she snapped

"ashi.. chill sweetheart, did I say u r jealous? Tum har cheez apne pe kyun leti ho?"

"kyunki tum mujhe hi bol rahe the.. me fidgeting with my fone, crumpling my shorts, getting fake calls.. poora time mujhe hi ghoor rahe the psycho? Thoda time apni lovebird ko bhi toh do.. ussey cuddle karte waqt, mujhe na dekho!" she stomped out of the canteen and rushed towards the shed.

Yuvi just couldn't stop smiling, he had heard it all. he had heard it straight from the horse's mouth.. " I love Yuvi. I love him, and I love the feeling of loving him"

Her words were ringing hard. She was all over his mind. "anwesha bannerjee ray!!" he had a grin plastered on his face while he kept taking her name. "Finally I knw tht you love me. And its nt only me who's suffering from this beautiful illness. Am so glad to have you back.. but not so soon baby.. you will have to find out for yourself that I love you.. and dnt u worry sweetheart.. the amount of hints ill give u wont evn be funny.. how can u think tht I love tht pink pastry.. argh… thanks to jas…we need to take care of her first.." he rushed towards the shed with the same grin on his face. "how I love to see her jealous!"

Ashi was sitting calmly on the cot she found outside the shed. She was not sad this time, nor was she annoyed. She just kept looking at her fingers.. she remembered him kissing her umpteen number of times..  kabir was right she thought. It shouldn't matter if yhe one you love, loves you back.. just the feeling of loving someone is so beautiful. Moreover, she could see how happy yuvi was. "ill always have him in my life. So wht if he is just my friend.." she smiled "aah.. there he comes.. mere piche piche kahin bhi aa jaata hai!" she mumbled behind her ears.

"don't you ever leave like tht" he said. 'now, was he ordering me?' she thought,

"are you ordering me?" He nodded,

 "why do you even care?" she said..what the hell was i doing? "why are u evn here?" she said. Heyy bhaggu!! Shut up ashi!!shut up!! She ordered herself, she couldn't describe it, it was like she was angry for nothing. 'was it really bothering him for coming here and making sure am alright?'

Yuvi- "am here coz I wanted to knw if ur okay! Why wer u acting tht way in the canteen?? And trust me ashi, your defense mechanisms wont work here!"

 "well, am here now, am safe, am fine.. what else? U cn leave" she said pointing at the door.

"what else?"he smirked making place on the cot and sitting right besides her, "the question was, whts wrong with your behavior?"

Ashi (narrowing her eyes)- "why do u want to study my behavioral patterns? Dnt u have enuf work.. go study your girlfriend yuvi, tht'll come to some help!"

Yuvi- "no! am not going to my girlfriend right now.. my bestfriend is upset, and she is important thn any1 right now."

Ashi (smiling)- "accha? Aur agar meher ko pata chala toh? Is it worth risking this relationship? Not sufi dude!" (she playfully hit him.)

Yuvi- "girlfriends toh change hoti rahengi wacko… par tum toh hamesha saath hi rahogi na!"

He could see colour rushing up her cheeks, he knew she wasn't sad anymore, he just couldn't see her upset.. 'ull have to find it out yourself baby' he thought. The only thing ringing in ashi's mind were kabir's words. 'I so love to see him happy' she sighed. Breaking the eye contact she suddenly said, "mein.. tumhare saath… hamesha!!! Kyun?? Kya mein tumko adopt kar rahi hoon??"

"kyun?? Karna chati ho?" he gave her his adorable looks, staring straight into her eyes, which made her go numb for a moment. "ashi… jas lied to you.. it wasn't meher." Yuvi crossed his fingers, just hoping to get out of the shed safely.

"WHAT?" ashi was taken aback, she looked back at him, "wht do u mean jasmine lied?"

Yuvi – "jas didn't want any1 to knw.  She lied to you. It isn't meher.."

Ashi (still shocked)- "then what did I see in the canteen. Weren't you stuck to her like the chewing gum in my mouth is going to stick to your hair? Come out with it fast.. yuvi.. u are not safe!"

Yuvi (biting his lips)- "tht was all planned, I wanted to see her reactions!"

Ashi-"whose? Jasmine's?"

Yuvi- "no psycho!! Hers.. the one I love"

He looked away, trying hard for his hints not to be his answers. "jas didn't want her to knw the truth.. she didn't want any1 to knw the truth.."

"and who is she?" she simply asked, as if she asked him which is his favorite song.         

"ashi.." she looked at him, as he had this small smirk down his face, "kahaa na, your my bestfriend, don't you think you should find it out yourself?"

"bestfriend…duh uh!!"she rolled her eyes, "sure!"

"am an idiot, right?" he asked. When she giggled, he sighed. Then there sat there in silence. She rested her head on his shoulders. He suddenly sang I got a feeling by black eyed peas. she sang with him, until she felt sleepy.

He shifted his gaze at her again, he slowly tilted his head and planted a kiss on her cheek for a long time, and he let it go. he looked at her with wide concerned eyes and suddenly smiled.. "do you think, me being with meher affected her?" he asked.

"dnt u think, u kissing me every now and then would affect her more?" she woke up

"aah.. you?? She wouldn't care less.. am sure she knows am safe with u.. you'd never fall for me.. would you?"

 

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Liz! Liz! Liz!! Agar tumhaare once-in-a-bluemoon wale updates aise honge, toh it's worth ALL the patience, and ALL the time!! Big smileBig smile Aww, I loved Yuvi here!! ''You will have to find it out for yourself baby'' Awww!! This is so cute!! EmbarrassedEmbarrassed And the way he kept on confronting her until she gave in and rolled her eyes and they became wacko-psycho again!! EmbarrassedEmbarrassed And the cheek kiss!! EmbarrassedEmbarrassed Liz, terrific terrific terrific part!! Big smile Loved it SO much!! Big smileBig smile 

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Posted: 10 February 2011 at 12:15am | IP Logged
Originally posted by _Akanksha_

Liz! Liz! Liz!! Agar tumhaare once-in-a-bluemoon wale updates aise honge, toh it's worth ALL the patience, and ALL the time!! Big smileBig smile Aww, I loved Yuvi here!! ''You will have to find it out for yourself baby'' Awww!! This is so cute!! EmbarrassedEmbarrassed And the way he kept on confronting her until she gave in and rolled her eyes and they became wacko-psycho again!! EmbarrassedEmbarrassed And the cheek kiss!! EmbarrassedEmbarrassed Liz, terrific terrific terrific part!! Big smile Loved it SO much!! Big smileBig smile 

u did??
am glad yaar... have taken a good long chutti.. btw am the hottie boss.. so yeah!Tongue
ashu/debs whoevr is writing next...plz can we have a flirtatious yuvi giving extremely visible hints and ashi being dumb??
plz plz plz
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