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*Khushi's One-Shot* RTMC/DV SS Part 4 Pg 16 (Page 4)

--Ruchi-- IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 30 November 2010 at 2:11am | IP Logged
u made me emotional was very  touchy..
superb, amazing ClapClap

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Posted: 30 November 2010 at 4:17am | IP Logged
nice os.
keep it up.

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-afsha- IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 30 November 2010 at 4:26am | IP Logged

Awesumly written

Jus loved it

The way u expressed Gals love n her scarifice for the guy was fab

Loved it

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Posted: 30 November 2010 at 5:08am | IP Logged
awsum hun!!!!
loved it

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--sanchita-- IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 30 November 2010 at 6:30am | IP Logged
Very beautifully written so tragic.

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Posted: 04 December 2010 at 11:34pm | IP Logged
so nice it was amazing

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Posted: 05 December 2010 at 3:25am | IP Logged


It's a cold February night. People are bustling through the streets, either pulling up their coat collars or wrapping scarves around their necks, trying to stay warm.

It's so cold today.Geet standing on window, looking at the people moving like little dots. Standing in a heated room, she's beginning to pity those people. Why don't they go home? Do they plan on wandering until morning?

"Almost time to go home! My boyfriend must be going crazy." One of the nurses breathe a sign of relief. "Still needs to work overtime on Valentine's Day. It's so unfair!"

"You are fortunate." Another nurse says. "Some people don't have anyone waiting for them."

"You mean Dr. Geet?"
Like Sherlock Holmes, her ears perk up when she hear her name.
"Do you remember how she lost control on this day last year?"
"Of course I do." A nurse shudders. "I've never seen Dr. Geet like that. Crying and yelling, like she was crazy."
They are talking about how she was last year. They are correct. she was out of control, like they said.
"You can't blame Dr. Geet. If my boyfriend died in front of my eyes, I would probably go crazy as well."
"Keep it down. She hasn't left work yet. She might hear you." 
The two nurses are too late. I heard the entire conversation through the canvas wall.
"Dr. Geet, what are you doing standing here?"

Just as she was deciding whether or not to reveal herself, another nurse exposed her. she awkwardly step out. The 2 nurses who discussed her start to blush. Their faces became redder than the bow on Valentine's Day chocolates.

"I'm waiting to go home." she pretend that she didn't hear anything.
"Dr. Geet, you must have gotten too involved in your work. It's already past time to go home. See you tomorrow. Happy Valentine's Day!" She waves goodbye.

"Happy Valentine's Day." Geet wave back and watch the 2 nurses hurry away.

That's fine. she was ready to go home anyway. Even though no lover is waiting
for her, at least there's a lazy cat waiting for her to feed.

After she come home, the first thing she do is feed the cat. she forgot when she first had the cat. Probably since last year's Valentine's Day. At that time, she was like an abandoned cat, with eyes filled with despair. Cats don't cry, I do. That's the only difference.

"Better drink all the milk or I'll skin you." she threatened the cat. Her name is Christine, her least favorite English name. she don't know why she named the cat Christine. Christine meowed once to let her know that she heard her, but her eyes are complaining about geet's severity. Her eyes remind her of someone she used to know, standing in front of her with eyes of rebellions.

An year ago today, she had lunch with maan and took the opportunity to complain to him.

"Today is Valentine's Day. Why didn't you give me any flowers?"

Maan raised his eyebrow. "Why should I give you flowers? You are not my anyone."

"Then... you should at least give me a card!" she pouted her lips, hurt by his tone.

"I know, I know. After lunch, I'll send you an e-card."

E-card. That sounds so impersonal, but that's the way he is. "You have to e-mail it to me. I'll be waiting." she excitedly smiled and planned to sneak home after lunch to check e-mail. Even though he wouldn't use any romantic words, she still looked forward to the card.

"I can't stand you women. Why do you make such a big deal out of Valentine's Day??" He grumbled while eating his food. His comment induced her to fight with him again.

"You are not romantic at all!! Don't you watch any  Hindi Movie?"

"Hindi Movie? I only watch Discovery Channel."

"Your life is so boring." she made a face at him. "One recent drama was really good. You should have watched it."

"What's that drama called?" He didn't believe in the love portrayed in TV and movies. He always thought they were lies.

"It's called 'Geet Huyi Sabse ParayiWink." She gladly answered.

"What kind of trashy plot did it have?"

"What do you mean trash?? Show some respect!" She was so angry. "That drama was very touching, and the theme song was beautiful as well. It's called 'Mahi.........Blushing'." she wonder if he knew wats mahi means.

"Mahi, I know her. She used to be my classmate in school."

"Her voice is worth it." Even though she secretly agreed with him, she couldn't bring herself to admit it.

"Whatever." He glanced at his watch. "I'll give you 5 minutes to tell me the plot. After that, I'm leaving."

She tried hard to explain 6 hours worth of story in just 5 minutes. The drama portrayed the love stories of geet "Geet is a happy, lively, fun loving girl who hails from a small town in Punjab. She belongs to a close-knit, traditionalist family which upholds honor, respect and dignity above all else. The story begins with Geet's wedding. Her family is ecstatic as they have found the perfect match for their daughter - a young, successful NRI, who brings with him the promise of a bright and happy future. But he leaves her In between, that a big lost for geet, she will tried to find him but found that he's a frod, now geet is pregnant, his family wants to kill her but a person maan singh khurana enters her life as her saviour.Geet leaves her family n now in delhi working for MSK who falls in love with her n wants to marry her."

"What's so touching about it?" He asked, after listening to the story.

"Don't you think this story is wonderful? If I have such great screen writing ability, I wouldn't be a doctor anymore. I would become a screenwriter."

"If you become a screenwriter, I bet no one would watch the show. The TV station can go out of business." He quickly interjected.

"I'm going back to work. Hurry and send me the card!" She was so mad that she went home immediately, not even finishing her coffee.

As soon as she walked in her door, she turned on her computer and go online.

Staring at the empty in-box, she began to reminisce about how they met. Maybe no one will believe her, but maan and she were actually neighbors. Their homes were only 1 wall away. Ever since they were kids, they liked to fight with each other all day long. she still remember when she moved to the country that year. Used to the city life, she couldn't get used to the simple life in the country. After school, she would just go home and do nothing. Whenever that happened, he would always come over to tease me.

"Why are you staring off into space??" He loved to pull on her hair. "You're so ugly when you're doing nothing. But you're also not pretty when you smile." In maan's words, she's really ugly.

"You're the one who's ugly!" she pull back her hair. "If you think I'm so ugly, why do you visit me??"

"Can't help it. My home is right next to your home." He argued.

"Then I'll move!" The next day, she drew a line in the ground using some white chalk. A line that she forbid him to cross.

That year, they were both in the 5th grade. They couldn't stand each other and hoped the other would move away. But 5 years passed, and neither of them moved. Not only that, thy got into the same high school and into the same class.

"You're that infamous couple." All the students and teachers in the school would say whenever they saw them.

"We're not!" she always tried to explain. "We're only neighbors." At that time, she hated her parents for making them live next to him.
"My standard is not that low." He would say. "Who wants her to be a girlfriend?? It's not like she don't have eyes."

"Yes, I know your eyes are on top of your head." she really disliked him. "Better than having eyes on the bottom of my head like you." He implied that she couldn't judge guys. At that time, she had a crush on a senior.

She didn't think that his sarcasm had a hidden meaning. After a while, she found out that the senior student had lots of girlfriends. When she cried about it, he silently passed her a handkerchief and awkwardly held her in his arms.

"I told you he wasn't any good." He roughly comforted me. she cried in his arms the whole night, and began to see him in a different way. Things began to change between them. They still fought all the time, but he started to look at her differently. And she blushed and her heart beat faster when he was near. They both knew: they fell in love with each other.

Even with this knowledge, neither of them said anything. Even though they would
not be able to resist and starred each other constantly. Even though thy cared about each other's every moves. Both of them refused to admit our love.

Time flew by quickly, and it was time to face separation. she chose to study medicine, and he chose management. Yet thy still couldn't separate from each other. Thr parents worried that  thy didn't know anyone in Mumbai, so they forced them to live in the same apartment building. Once again, thy became neighbors. Thy still fought, but sometimes thy  fought into the bedroom. Alright, thy became lovers, but thy still wouldn't say thy loved each other. Thy didn't even spend Valentine's Day together until he saw her share dinner with a man one Valentine's Day. That night, he waited for her in front of her door and said that he would take her out to dinner on Valentine's Day from then on. she have to say that he was very arrogant. But she nodded and accepted his request. Since then, thy spent every Valentine's Day together. After graduation, she became an intern. He started a small computer company with some friends. Thy were busy with thr own lives and had no time for a relationship. Three years later, she became a doctor, and his business began to boom. Thy separately moved to bigger apartments and stopped being neighbors. On the surface, thy left each other. In reality, thy were still together. Thy spent every Valentine's Day together but each year became more dreary than the next because he never told her, he loved her even with all her hints.

Facing the empty in-box, she suddenly grew very angry. He wouldn't say it and wouldn't send her a card." What did he mean? Who did he think I was? I called his cell phone."

"Hello." He picked up the phone.

"I didn't receive the card." she immediately showed her displeasure.

"You didn't receive it?" He seemed really busy. "But I sent it."

He was really busy but she didn't care. "I didn't receive it. Send it again."

"Okay, I'll send you 100 times. Is that good enough??" He said with impatience. His tone further infuriated her. Is that how lovers speak to each other?

"Don't bother sending it to me. And you don't have to pick me up tonight.

I'll eat dinner by myself."

"Don't be childish, ok? I'm really busy."

"I AM childish!" she hung up the phone and tears rolled down her cheeks.

Childish?? Why didn't he consider the situation? thy've gone out for so many years and spent countless Valentine's Day together. she never received any flowers nor cards from him. Now, she just want a little e-card. Is that too much to ask for??

she unplugged the phone from the wall and turned off her cell phone. she didn't want to hear his explanations. After she returned to the hospital, she instructed the receptionist not to forward her any phone calls. she wanted to concentrate on work.

Because there were so many emergencies today, she was sweating 1 hour later and forgot about thr argument.

"Dr. geet, please take a look at that patient."

As she was collecting my equipment, the shrill sound of an ambulance sounded outside the ER. When she stepped out the door, the emergency medics hurriedly wheeled in a gurney.

"What happened to him?" she asked the 1st medic. Everyone else were trying to help put the patient on the gurney. He was covered with blood.

"Car accident." The medic replied. "Very serious. He may die."

she nodded and ran to the operating room with them. When she arrived, the nurses told me that the man had already stopped breathing and also his heartbeat also stopped.

"Prepare for shock." she calmly instructed the nurses. Saving people is thr duty. Thy can't lose thr calm.

But when she saw who laid on the operating table, she lost my calm. That person was maanCry!

"No..." she stood in shock. "NO!!!" she grabbed the paddles and continuously shocked his body. His body bounced up and down from the shocks. The scared nurses went to find another doctor, to tell him that she was crazy.

she didn't know if she was crazy or not. she just wanted to save maan. Even though thy fought all the time. Even though he never showed her his love. she still wanted to save him. He still owed her a card. He couldn't die! she threw away the paddles and began to press on his heart. she pressed with all her strength, hoping it would revive him, but he didn't wake up. He didn't even say "It hurts". He just laid there with his eyes closed, punishing her with his silence.

Dr. Dev angrily pushed her away. By that time, she couldn't see clearly anymore. she cried. she wailed. she bowled until no sounds could come out of her mouth.

"It's too late, Dr. Geet. He's already dead. I'm sorry." Dr. Dev patted her on the shoulder. They knew each other and ate together once. she introduced them.

"He can't die." I shook my head. "He can't die!!" she struggled to run to him.

"Dr.geet, control yourself!" Dr. dev slapped me. "I understand what you're going through, but you're a doctor."

"Yes, I'm a doctor, but I'm also a regular person". How can Dr. dev understand how she feel? she've loved him for so many years that it's become a habit. How can she just throw away a habit? Besides, he still owed me a card. "I want him to live! I want him to live!" she ran to him again and tried to knock the life back into his body.

"Take her away!" That day, she lost my control and her professionalism.

And that day happened to be Valentine's Day.

Afterwards, she asked his co-workers why he left work early that day.

They told her that after she hung up the phone, he tried to call her several times but couldn't reach her. Worried, he drove to the hospital to find her and got hit by a large truck on the way.

When she heard this, she froze. Her tantrum killed him. Just because of an unmailed card, he died. After that, she lost her privilege to be childish.

Like an abandoned cat, she couldn't even cry anymore. After his death, she couldn't cry anymore, regardless of how touching the plot or how tear-jerking the dialogue. They didn't affect her anymore.

Now, she's only left with a cat and a seldomly used computer. Stepping over the cat, she turned on the computer. Even though she know no one will send me a mail, she still hoped that someone will remember her on this day.

Meow, meow. she looked at Christine to see what's wrong. She finished her milk. she went into the kitchen to get her more milk then came back to look at the computer screen.

she have.... 100 emails! Who would be bored enough to send her 100 junk mail?

she was just about to delete them all when she received another mail, and this one said: "Because of system error, we could not send these until today.

We apologize for the delay." The sender was her ISP.

she looked at the 1st mail. It showed the send date is last year's Valentine's Day. Her heart began to beat fast. Could he have sent these?

With a trembling hand, she opened the mail. The first thing that popped up was a gorgeous red rose set against green leaves. Then a beautiful melody began to play.... "Mahi............". she couldn't believe it. The rose was so beautiful and the music was so dreamy. she almost thought she was in a fantasy. Most touching of all were the words underneath the rose, because the words read like a beautiful poem.


That's my name.

"Knowing you so many years, I've never sent you any flowers. Today I send you a rose."

She received it and it's so beautiful.

"You know we are always fighting. We can never really open our hearts and tell each other how we feel."

Yes, but it's all his fault for being so distant.

"I know I always make you mad by the things I say."

Good that he's admitting it.

"But today I want to say to you: I'm sorry, and I love you."

she waited so many years for those words.

"And I want to tell you a good news. I finally saved enough money."

He already have enough money. Why did he need so much?

"So geet, let's get married!! I was afraid to propose to you, because I didn't trust in my ability to give you the good life you deserve. But now I've saved enough money so we don't have to wait anymore."

Who wanted him to wait? geet:"I'm already yours."
"Today, I use this card to propose to you. Will you marry me, Geet? Will you?"

That's the content of the whole card. Like a fool, she kept reading his words and talking to him. It's like she can hear his voice and see him again.

As if it's back to 1 year ago with them constantly fighting.

The song played over and over. Repeating the heartbreaking voice.

"Mahi ve mahi mahi ve....................mahi.............................."

The lyrics of this song fits thr love so closely. When he was alive, her world was so young. Every day, she could find a something different to fight with him about. But after he left, her life is only left with memories and coldness that will never go away.

"Will you marry me?"

When she read these words, her tears unconsciously came, wetting the keyboard.

Will she? If he's in front of her, she will definitely kick him and call him a big fool. If she wasn't willing, she wouldn't have waited until today.

So she moved the cursor over the "Reply" box, and typed the response that she've already prepared for so many years - "I will."

she will - be by his side for the rest of her life. she will - fight with him forever. That is how she answered him, but the only response she got was the repeating song "Mahi......"

Nevertheless, she opened every single letter, accepted every singled rose, and typed the same response: "I will."

she replied 100 times, and "mahi...." played 100 times. In this cold Valentine's night, the line that's been broken for 1 year finally got reconnected.

she answered you. What about you?

Edited by khushi909 - 05 December 2010 at 3:26am

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-afsha- IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 05 December 2010 at 4:06am | IP Logged
That was senti
Loved their Nok jhok n love
Geet's childishness took him away
He kept his words
He did send her 100 e-cards
Jus loved his love n way of saying his feelings
I wish he culd reply her back

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