Dark shadow FF climax

jasminerahul IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 28 October 2010 at 1:11pm | IP Logged
I wrote it 4 another couple long ago
Part 1
Ranveer who is a professional killer sees a lady coming to his mansion.She is a tall slim fair lady who has worn a simple saree.Her straught hair is shining.Her tiny lips are like a plum..
He is surprised as no other young lady has entered his place before.
R:Please sit Madam.
She sits with a smile.
She:Hi..I'm Pratigya.
R:Nice to meet you.Tell can i help you?
P:I want you to kill someone.
He is shocked.
He thinks:For the first time a beautiful young lady is approaching me to kill someone.
She gives him Krishna's photo.
Ranveer looks at the photo.Krishna looks very innocent and cute.
R:Why do you want to kill him?
Her anger destroys the beauty of her face.

A scene comes into her mind.
Pratigya is sitting on the bed as a bride.Her husband Swayam enters the room and sits besides her.He looks at her with romantic eyes.Suddenly somebody knocks at the door.
Swayam gets irritated:Who has come to desturb us?
He opens the door.That was Krishna.Swayam and pratigya  are shocked.
S:Krishna?Why are you here?
Krishna beats him heavily.Heer cries loudly.Blood is hugging Swayam's body.

Pratigya's eyes get filled up with tears.
P:But Swayam did'nt die.But he got paralysed.Krishna killed my sister Meher also.
Ranveer is shocked.
R:Krishna looks so innocent.He does't look like a killer.
P:There is a devil hidden behind his innocent look.
R:Why did Krishna kill Meher?

Edited by jasminerahul - 02 November 2010 at 5:30am

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mushiroxx IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 28 October 2010 at 10:23pm | IP Logged
nice ff..........surprising start.......waiting for the next part........Smile
shahbara Senior Member

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Posted: 28 October 2010 at 11:29pm | IP Logged

Not bad! .. though slightly disappointed as prat is already married to someone else! also can't imagine krishna as a murderer! But looking forward to the next part.....Thanks Jasmine!

jasminerahul IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 29 October 2010 at 2:44am | IP Logged

Dark shadow Part 2

A horrible scene attacks Pratigya's eyes and mind.
She enters Meher's room:Meher!
She is shocked to see Meher lying down bathed with blood.Her stomach has been stabbed with knife by someone.
She screams:Meher!
She touches Meher's face:Meher..
Meher breaths.That was her last breath.Pratigya sees a chain with small pendant lying near Meher.
Pratigya is shocked:Oh!This is the chain which i gave Krishna.That means Krishna did this.
Heer cries.

Pratigya weeps:Krishna killed Meher..because he wanted to drive her away from his life.Only if Krishna dies i will get peace of mind.
Ranveer thinks:So strange!There is some mystery behind the whole story.

Pratigya is resting at home.She sheds tears thinking about the past.

Pratigya is dressing up.She wears a yellow salwar.She brushes hair and ties it.She makes her eyes beautiful by putting kajal.She wears earrings.She searches for bangles.Meher enters the room.
M:Are you not ready yet?
P:I'm searchiing for my yellow bangles.
M:Oh!You are going to college to study.
P:I know.Though you are my twin sister you behave like an elderly woman.I'm going to college for the first time.It's a chance to dress up.I'm already fed up of wearing school uniforms for many years.
Meher laughs.
Pratigya finds the yellow bangles in the cupboard:Wow!Got it.
She wears it.She looks at the clock.
P:Oh!It's late.
She rushes to the college.

While climbing steps,she hits a guy who was climbing the steps in a hurry.Thus they both slip and roll down the steps together.He is on top of her.He moves away.
He:I'm sorry.
H:I'm sorry.It's my mistake.I only hit you i guess.
He:No.It's my mistake.I climbed the steps in a hurry as it's becoming late.Luckily there is no injury.By the way what is your name?New admission?
P:I'm Pratigya.New admission. Krishna.
They shake hands.Without their knowledge their eyes get stuck up to each other.

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shahbara Senior Member

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Posted: 29 October 2010 at 3:18am | IP Logged

Interesting! Nice to know Prat has a twin sister! Big smile but i'm sure Krishna did not kill Meher! Now looks like krish and prat were either good friends or in love back in college!!!! Shocked Hope to see a kriya scene in the next part! Until then Bye!  

mushiroxx IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 29 October 2010 at 3:22am | IP Logged
awesome chap jasmine........ClapClapClap
a new twist in tale...........kriya were friends in clg.........n meher was pratz twin sis..........i like it.......Tongue
waiting for the next update......Big smile
shruthiR IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 29 October 2010 at 6:43am | IP Logged

Both the chps were very well written.Pratigya had a twin sister,nice!but she was murdered,how sadOuchLooking forward to the next chpSmile

jasminerahul IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 29 October 2010 at 10:20am | IP Logged
Pratigya goes to the college canteen to have lunch.Krishna enters the canteen.Their eyes catch each other.A sweet smile is visible on both faces.Krishna sits near her.
K:Any problem if i join you?
She smiles:No,it's my pleasure.
K:So you like my company?
She is shy:I'm alone.So i would like to have a company.
He smiles:I will be with you always,you won't be alone.
They both are looking at each other.
She thinks:I just met Krishna yesterday.Then why do i feel that there is some other meaning in his sentence?
K:How is college?
K:What have you ordered?
P:nothing actually.
K:Shall we order noodles?Here the noodles is very tasty.
He orders noodles for them.They eat noodles.
They both finish lunch and eave the canteen.
She:Ok...nice to have your company.Let us go back to our classes.
She turns back and walks one step forward.Her shawl blows of her shoulders in the wind.Krishna catches it.She can't move.He is conscious now.So he leaves the shawl and walks away.She looks at him walk away.

Krish is looking at the moon at night.Suddenly Pratigya appears before him.She has worn a beautiful white salwar kameez which has embroidary work on it.Her narrow dangling bead earring matches her salwar kameez.Her white salwar kameez is shining like a moon.

He can't believe his eyes:Pratigya!
Suddenly she disappears.
K:Oh!It was my stupid dream.But this dream tells me a lot.

Pratigya is at home.
K:Oh!I hope this weekend gets over fast.Missing the college very badly.time is moving very slow.
Meher:Missing the college or missing someone?
She is embarassed.
P:What nonsense are you saying Meher?On monday there is a music show for the seniors in the college.Senior students are singing.I'm waiting for that.

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