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Posted: 17 October 2010 at 11:44am | IP Logged
Here comes part 2 ...

Part 2:

Khanak: main kyun dukhii hoon. Kyun main sagai waley din say lay kar aaj tak atni dukhii hoon. Kyun main shantanu ko Natasha ji kay saath nain dekh sakti .. kyun mujey un doono ko saath dekhkar dard hota kyun. Kyun…kept crying while looking at the moon.

Shantanu: nahi dude tu ais tara haar nahi maan sakta and wiped his tear… kuch to bahana bana kar khanak ko rokna hoo ga.  Kyunke main nay khanak kee ankhon main kuch tu dekha hai .. wo engagement waley din say buhat door door rahtii hai mujsay … kuch tu hai khanak kay dil main mere layee..our yeh baat main khanak kee zuban per la kay rahoon ga. Our khanak madam.. Shantanu Khandelwal say kio pyaar na karay yeh namumkin hai (with attitude). With that he smiled from his heart. Ab shaan beta hooja shuroo with mission khanak and make her fall for u.

Lakin ais say pheley Natasha ko sach batana hoo ga.  wo mere buhat achii friend hai and I can't hurt her like this . Main subha hee au say baat karoon ga. Smiling and whistling shaan went towards his room. Khanak heard his whistle and quickly wiped her tears.

Shantanu: arey khanak tum abhi tak saooi nain … kya baat hai kya soch rahii hoo, kuch preshan lagrahi hoo. Sab theek to hai na .

Khanak: (in mind) shantanu ketney khush hain ..mujey apne dost kay laye khush hoona chaiyee.

Shantanu: (waves his hand in front of her face) khanak… helloooo  khanak

Khanak: han han… main theek hoon .. kuch nain bas need nain ai rahi thi. Aap soo jayii main thori der baad so jaioon gee.   

Shantanu turned feeling sad again looking at khanak like this killed him. He entered washroom and came back wearing black vest. Khanak and shantanu looked into each other's eyes.. khanak quickly looked away. Shantanu went towards his sofa…

Shantanu: (in his mind) khanak main janta hoon kay tum roo rahii thi.. itna to main tumey jaan gaya hoon. Tum mujsey kab tak apna dard hide karoo gee.  LAkin I promise that I will fix everything..

Khanak went and sat on her bed and kept staring at shantanu slowly closed her eyes to forget her pain in her sleep.

Next day:

Khanak in kitchen: ab main shantanu kay saat theek say behave karoon gee. Agar main asey burthal kee taran rotii rahee to unko mujpar shak ho jaiiga or fir taran taran kay sawal karain ge…  ab say no rona dona khanak..shirf apne dost kay laye khush

Shantanu coming down the stairs and turned and looked at khanak working in kitchen  a smiled played on his lips… shantanu: main wada karta hoon kay tum hamesha ais kitchen main mere liye cooking karoo gi … our woo bhi apne puri life….tuned and walked to dining table. Khanak saw him walking and came with food to serve him smiling.

Shantanu: (saw khanak and smirked) acha dad aaj main office thora late aioon ga … mujey Natasha ko milney jana hai (looking at khanak for her reaction). Khanak closed her fist and eyes to control her emotions. But her hands were shaking while serving which was noticed by shantanu…khanak ran back to kitchen after serving him. After a while shantanu excused himself and goes to kitchen to check on khanak.

Shantanu: (at kitchen door) hmm to ab madam mere pass aney sey gabratiii hai… nice..thats a good sign…but then he saw her tears and felt pain in his heart…. Closed his fist with anger…… main janta hoo yeh ansoo aik dost keliye nain ho saktee.. kyun key yeh ansoo keseee apne ho khooney key dard key ansoo hai .. main bhi yeh dard mehsoos karta hoo ….khanak main janta hoon tum bhi mere liye tarap rahii hoo.. merey paas anay kay liye meri bahoon main aney kay liye …. Lakin main ais tarap ko itna berha doon ga kay tum khud door ker mari bahoon main mere gale lagoo gii…that is a gentle man's promise to himself..smiles

 

I know its sad at the moment …but I promise It will get rocking in coming up parts. ….just trying to show khanak's tarap for shantanu and then romance hi romance ……

soooo enjoy annndd plzzzzzzz guysss give me some comments...ur comments encourage me to write more ......

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 loved it sooooooooo much superbly written i know the next scenes r gonna b superb tooo...... omg its really lovely n i just love the dialoguesThumbs Up

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congos on ur first ff!!...
and continue soon shai!

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Bohut Khoob! Kya Baat hai!!!Clap

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Hey Shai!!
I've just read both the chapters. It's a really good start...you have my 100% attention hun!!
Looking forward to the update....Smile

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Thank you guys....it was a long day at uni.. but anyways  here is part 3

Natasha's house:

Shantanu: Natasha mujey tum say kuch baat karnee hi ….

Natasha: main jantee hoon tumey kya baat karnee hai ( shantanu looked at her) tum hamari shadi ko ley kay preshan hoo right? Main jantii hoon kay tum muj sey shadi nahi karna chatey ..yahee kehna chatey ho right..

Shantanu was dumbstruck and shocked kept looking at Natasha…

Natasha: shaan main to sagai wali din hee samj gaii thi… kyun kay us din tum khush nain thay… tumharii ankhian kesiii hor koo talash rahii thii.. m I right shaan…

Shantanu( with tears) I m sorry Natasha  main ney nahi socha kay yeh sab kuch hoo jaii ga … main to hemesha sey tum sey shadi karna chatha …lakin shayad jo hum sochtay hai ya chateyy hain wesa nahi hoota… nahi janata kay kab meri khanak kay liye nafrat dostii main badal gii..nahii janta kab us ke har baat mujey ache lagney lagii.. nahi janta kab us ka mujey taang karna mujey burthul kehna acah lagney laga …nahi janata kay kab us kee motii motii ankhan mujey apne taraf kechney lagii… kuch nain janta main kuch nain … lakin haan itna janta hoo kay ..khanak key ansoo mujey dard detey hain … us kee odasi mujey udass kardethi hai… us ki hasii main aik shakoon hai… bas inta janta hoon kay khanak hee ab meri zindgi ha… sirf khanak…. He looked at Natasha who was also in tears… he walked to her and held her shoulder …Natasha I m sorry..im really very sorry … lakin Natasha pyaar tu bas hoo jata hai..na chatey howey bhi ho gaya … kab howa kyun howa nahii janta …covering his face with his hand sits on sofa…Natasha walks up to him and kneels at his knees..

Natasha : nahi shaan tum ney kuch galt nahi kiya ..i know pyaar tu bas hoo jata hai…. Kesii sey pochey kesiii koo batiye bina … don't worry shaan .. main theek hoon.. han main tumsey  buhat naraz hoti agar tum mujey yeh sab kuch nain batatey to…

Shantanu: Natasha tum buhat achii hoo main buhat lucky hoon kay tum mere dost hoo.. thanks for understanding… lakin pata nain khanak yeh kab samjey giii kay hum dono ka mila hai likha ta upper wale ne…abb to bas khanak kay liye jeena chata hoon , sab kuch us kay liye karna chata hoon bus khanak kay liye ..meri khanak ke liye…

Jantii hoo khanak ney mujay responsible banaya … khanak kee waja sey i want to be a nice human being.. jisey dekh kar khanak ko proud feel hoo…us ney mujey apne mistakes koo except karna sekhya … shaan turns and looks at Natasha who is smiling with tears…

Natasha: jantey ho aaj mujey meray samney mere shaan nahiii khanak ka shantanu dek raha hai .. jo apni responsibilities ko samjta hai ..apni mistakes ko except karta hai … who wants everyone to be happy …mera shaan tu us din hee khoo gaya tha jab tum khanak ko dubara ghar lekar aiyee thee. Tab sey mujay shif shantanu dekta tha mera shaan nain….mere shaan tu stupid tha… irresponsible jo sirf pjs crack karna janta tha …tu fir main khanak kay shantanu ko apna kasey man loon …. acha shaan kya tum ney khanak koo bataya kay tum us say pyaar kartey hoo…

Shantanu: nahi abhii nahii.. lakin main janta hoo kay wo bhi muj sey buhat pyaar karti hai.. main ney us kee ankioon main dekha hai apne liye kuch dosti se zayada… chot mujey lagtii hai lakin dard mujey khanak kee ankhoon main nazar ata hai … pagal hai meri khanak .. shayad dartii hai kay us kee khusiyan fir sey us sey door na hoo jayian… acha Natasha abb main chalta hoon werna dadd muj per gussa kareyn gee… turns to leave…. But again turns toward Natasha and hugs her…and says thanks Natasha for understating….

Natasha breaks down after shaan leaves…

Shantanu on his way to office … it feels good… ab mujey khanak koo rokna hoo ga … hmm think dude think….idea….dad… with huge grin on his face… at lunch time both shantanu  n his dad come home for food …
Sunil: khanak beta mere baat sunoo… tum ais ghar sey nahii ja skatteee beta ….

Khanak: nahi ada mujey ais ghar sey buhat pehley chaley jana chayeee tha… agar pheley chalee jateee tu itna dard nain hota…shantanu looks up at khanak …

Shantanu:(in his mind) hmmm dard ..to madam ko bhi dard hota hai … mujey bhi dard howa tha jab tumney mere feeling ko reject kiya ( khanak doesn't know about letter switching…she thinks shantanu wanted her to be there for him at his engagement) …. Abb to main gin gin kay bedlay loonga just wait and watch miss musibat …..

Sunil: beta abhi tak tum dono ko divorce nain howa abhi do month bakii hai … tu beta ais waja say tum nain ja sakteee….

Khanak: theek hai … adda main ruk jatii hoo agley do maheney kay liye … and she left and goes to her room … sunil shows thumbs up to  shantanu … and he mouths thank you dad… and both leave for office

Khanak in her room  thinking about shantanu's behavior … talking to herself … abhi kuch din peley tu buhat udass udass tey …ab achanak kya ho gaya hai ..mujey aik bar bhi rokney ko nain khaha .. burdthal …main hee un kay baray main sochtee hoo wo to kisieee kay baray main soch bhi nain sektey … kudgarz insaan … to theek hai agar wo hustey han to main bhi theek sey behave karoon gii main bhi unkay samney khush rahoon giii……

At dinner time, everyone's present at the table even Natasha came over for dinner …. Khanak saw her and feels something in her heart… jealous hehe..shantanu looks at her and smiles

Shantanu: mom dad… mujey kuch jelney kee smell ai rahii hai … kya app ko ai rahii hai…smiles with tongue in his cheek.

M& D: nain beta ….yahan tu sab theek hai …

Khanak:( talking to herself in low tone) kasey sab theek hai … yahan mere dil jal rahaa our sab theek hai…

Shantanu: khanak tumney kuch kaha..

Khanak : nahi nahi main ney tu kuch nain kaha …. Acah main abii roti ley kar aitiii hoon

After dinner, everyone in the living room is talking..khanak see them from upstairs... Holding tight on to the railing and her eyes are on only two people natasha and shantanu….  Natasha gets up to leave …shantanu hugs her …khanak runs to her room with tears (btw she's still in shaan's room)... goes towards the window and see Natasha and shantanu talking and laughing and Natasha left after hugging shantanu once again.. shantanu turns to come in..He sees khanak at the window and smirks …. Pulls his collar, good job shaan beta…so far so good …lagee rahooo 

In their room: shantanu:  acha howa khanak tum abhi tak soii nain mujey tum say baatian karnee hai Natasha kay baray main… Khanak: (in her mind) mujey laga kuch hamarey baray main baat karnee hai ….but quickly goes to her bed..nain mujey buhat need ai rahee .mujey kio baat nain karnee…. Shantanu laughs and lie down on the sofa to get some sleep

Next morning:

Shantanu getting ready to go to the office…selecting some shirt to wear and  finally decides to wear white shirt… after getting ready once check himself in the mirror and winks at the reflections…. Turns to leave but bammm collides with khanak who came to the room to call him for breakfast. Khanak tum theek to hoo.. tumey lagi to nain …

Khanak: nain main theek hoon …wo wo aap ko nashtey keliye bolney ai thii..

Shantanu: han acha main ata hoon … bas ready hoo rahtha… turns toward dressing table to get his watch and wallet …and khanak turns to go downstairs… they both feel being pulled towards each other and quickly turn to look what just happened …khanak's dupatta was stuck to shaan's shirt and the turning force caused his shirt to open up… he was standing in front of khanak with his shirt open …khanak felt sudden urge in her heart to get close to him and close the buttons. But suddenly blushed away to run from there… shantanu smirked at her reaction…and held her arm to stop her from leaving …

Khanak: shantanu choriyee mujey nechay jana hai …

Shantanu walks towards her and gets really close to her and whisper in her ear… tumharee waja say meri shirt open hoo gayee hai… our abbb tumm and paused … khanak looked at him … tum merii shirt kay button band karoo gii … and jab tak tum meri baat nahi manoo gee main tumey nechy nahiii janay doon ga …

Khanak: shantanu yeh kya baat hoiee ..hatiye mujey jana hai ..

Shantanu moved and closed the door and faced khanak; theek hai main tumey nechey nain janay doon ga or fir dadi tumey upper bulanay aian geee ….tu firrrr tum kya kahoo geee un sey ..han bolo bolo… shantanu pulled her towards him and said tum itna dartee kyun hoo merey kareeb aney sey … khanak kept looking at him in the eyes and slowly her hands start reaching his chest ….she moved her hands on his chest with love….he staring at her pouty lips ….closed his hand to control his feelings…  khanak slowly closed his shirt's button and left his upper two buttons open … slowly started to move her face near his chest …shantanu felt her warm breath on his chest ….he started moving his hand on her arms …..

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awesome part 3 i am sure something is gonna happen and their little romance will get disturbed lolz but i was lost in it good writing Clap keep up Big smile

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omg omg omg omg omg the shirt scene supppppperb.........killer awesome i was just so into it.................i could so imagine it....... awesome writing sampar ur extremely good wid the dialogues........loveedit sooooooo much
 pls pls pls continue soon dying 2 read the next part

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