pyari tasha hamari-pg 2

hey friends! inspired from IF poetry writers and espacially jiya me too tryed to write a poem but it is not too good as it was my first attempt.....                                     THE  GOLDEN DAYS

Kya din thy vo

jab c.i.d tha the best

mistryes hoti thi mind blasting

aur hum sab thy uske bade fan

jab c.i.d dekhkar mann nahi bharta tha

ha vahi thy c.i.d ke

the golden days

 

thi hamari favourite team

har case hota tha rocking

abhi-daya rahte thy sath

ha bhai tha hamara c.i.d rock

par ab to storyes hoti hai boring

team bhi hai bakbas

jo hamne kho diye

ha vahi thy c.i.d ke

the golden days

 

c.i.d bureau ban gaya hai love garden

sab kar rahe hai ek -dosre se flirting

salunke ne bhi chode ke forensic

apnali hai bakbas karne ki raah

ek din tha jab c.i.d banata tha world record

ha vahi thy c.i.d ke

the golden days

 

ab to sara fun gayab sa ho gaya hai

c.i.d ka charm aur suspense kho sa gaya hai

singh sir se hai hamari humble request

plz hame bapas kar do vo din

jo thy c.i.d ke the golden days

ha c.i.d ke golden days

 

so friends how was it......😕😕😕

Edited by CAHAT320 - 13 years ago

good attept...need some improvement....keep it up..

as per the first attempt ya poem is good i suggest you to keep reading and keeping writing for more poems you will definitely improve buddy. believe me but please do keep on writing. Though some rhymes were here and there I could see ya heart feeling in the poem keep it up and keep writing many more I am sure you would definitely improve

Nice one. As its you first attempt, just rhyme problem but you will improve if you keep writing. So don't stop keep writing👍🏼

hey dear, nice attempt.... i am glad you posted it finally! need to work on rhyming a bit... otherwise direct dil se 👏

jiya di, aapke wajah se we are getting more and more people coming up with their talents! 😃

It is a really a Superb Work.. Everything is just so great ..Just WOW... You have found a logical way to write a poem.. you found 2 sentences about Golden Days and relate all your work around that.. Some words been used were put of world.. Just keep on writing and give us Precious work from your CID Love filled Heart..God Bless You

good start to ur creationz career!!

thank you all so mutch for liking my poem..... and i will definetly improve my ryming......

here comes my next poem dedicated to my second favourite femail officer tasha

hey Cahat !! Sorry for replying so late was busy these days anyways good work indeed !!! both your creations are indeed very nice,this is just your beginning and I'm sure you'll do much better any help feel free to ask us !!! hoping to read many more poems and other creations of yours 👍🏼
Welcome to the CID poets group !!!