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Posted: 07 November 2010 at 11:35am | IP Logged
Ouchoch same with me...tomarrow I will read the stoy and commet chinya.

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Posted: 07 November 2010 at 11:51am | IP Logged

@ chinnu -  the second Part to be read was worth to wait for so long ... Clap thanks for your Birthday treat Smile

 
I liked the way you brought up Sana's character ..   Day Dreaming thanks a ton for exiting her without any further contuation.. Wink
 
u know what I mean LOLLOL

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Posted: 07 November 2010 at 9:55pm | IP Logged
shagee, jiya di and sunny....will wait for your reply.

dear twinkle i dont want her to continue, i dont like even that look from her Wink

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Posted: 07 November 2010 at 11:23pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by chinnu_manikyam

dear twinkle i dont want her to continue, i dont like even that look from her Wink
 
ahem ahem... I know that Wink

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Posted: 07 November 2010 at 11:37pm | IP Logged

Your discription of the story and scene as marvallos but when   write some crime story u  must concentrate on main clprit as visrom said i agreed with her.Yes you ned to add some action in chasing sanghmitra.That part is rushed and some how ignored.But like discription very much.You  have mastery on worlds which is the majore point of writing and another thing is you can dipict the emotions very well and the amibiance we can feel the scene.This is the sign of Professional write rather than gr8 writer.stil I say whenever you write decteive story u must gave maximm imortanat to investigation procedure,clu,action of CID offciers.Even in our story we have lack so many areas.still have time to improve ....I must say I am you fan becase of our lanaguage your way of writting and story ideas hatts of to you still I wanted you should give attention to investigation part.



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Posted: 08 November 2010 at 12:09am | IP Logged
I noticed it today and then read it. Nice story ,Chinnu. 
Keep it up. We want more from you.

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Posted: 08 November 2010 at 1:54am | IP Logged
thanks m.

jiya di...loved your post, i will take care of that next time. good to see your inspiration. thank you so much.

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Posted: 08 November 2010 at 6:25pm | IP Logged
Finally read it. description was excellent but as everyone already mentioned action was missing. I missed suspense but yes girl (Sana) is not Mitra there was twist but still I missed suspense may be because in your story focus was towards something else and I was focusing on something else I don't know.

they way you give description its awesome and plot was very good. How minister tries to make fool of CID poor guy  wrong choice. Very good story Thumbs Up

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