CID

   

Aditya Sir Ka Sabase Bada Fan POEM Result (Page 3)

Post Reply New Post

Page 3 of 13

sunnyp1414

IF-Dazzler

sunnyp1414

Joined: 22 November 2009

Posts: 3085

Posted: 19 July 2010 at 7:01pm | IP Logged
They way I am feeling frankly after reading I am writing that way. If someone felt hurt I am sorry. Do tell me I will change it whenever come online. Every participant did excellent job.

Poem 1--  Since its the first one I read so excellent very good. There were some lines I liked and bahut hi dil se duwayin mangi hai.Loved focus was on Aditya sir career as a whole not only Abhijeet. Writer is anonymous here . ye ek ladki jo Aditya sir ki smile pe fida hai ye main nahi vo khud keh rahi hai.

Poem 2-- Kya rhyming hai. excellent. what a poem.  for me jitna bolo kam hai.

Poem 3-- full life of Sr. Inspector Abhijeet, expressed here. Just loved poem, spacing could have been given. from this poem loved this line alot
Mujrimo ke aage hoti hardum inki jeet hai
Isliye to inka naam Sr. Inspector Abhijeet hai.

Poem 4-- along with rhyming kya emotions aur kya likha hai. Wondeful. ye safar sach mein bahut suhana hai. Read twice I am like what a poem.

Poem 5-- loved it. very well written. this poem covered every aspect of Aditya sir as well as Fans wishes. good job. Just loved all the points mentioned and covered in poem.

Poem 6-- small one. loved it.  length could be increased.

Poem 7-- Although in start of poem I couldn't rhyme but in second half I could rhyme easily.  so I find rhyming problem in first four lines. enjoyed reading second half of poem.

Poem 8-- This is also very good attempt. couldn't rhyme at few places but thought was nice loved it.  (Means normal lines if read not thinking its poem).

Poem 9- I got feeling of type of shero-shyari esp last 2 lines just loved it.  Very good rhyming at some points. Somewhere for this I felt keep on. I was enjoying reading aur kahatam hogaya.







Edited by sunnyp1414 - 20 July 2010 at 3:17am

The following 1 member(s) liked the above post:

bhinder.thind

Dear Guest, Being an unregistered member you are missing out on participating in the lively discussions happening on the topic "Aditya Sir Ka Sabase Bada Fan POEM Result (Page 3)" in CID forum. In addition you lose out on the fun interactions with fellow members and other member exclusive features that India-Forums has to offer. Join India's most popular discussion portal on Indian Entertainment. It's FREE and registration is effortless so JOIN NOW!

bhinder.thind

IF-Dazzler

bhinder.thind

Joined: 03 April 2010

Posts: 4010

Posted: 20 July 2010 at 12:08am | IP Logged
This thread should be on page one because tomorrow is result and everyone should get fair chance to read and give feedbacks with respect to fact that It Is Not Sticky Topic Yet

Edited by bhinder.kamboj - 20 July 2010 at 12:09am

bhinder.thind

IF-Dazzler

bhinder.thind

Joined: 03 April 2010

Posts: 4010

Posted: 20 July 2010 at 1:07am | IP Logged
Ok Here is My Review i am going to write it in very frank way Please don't Mind ---

Poem 1 It was a very well written Poem... Poet use all personal likings about Actor and Character in a poem and this is what making is well presented... But just felt bit dragging and rhythm Problem quite a few times... Moreover, Instead of Daya and ACP, agar Dayanand aur Satam Sir ki baat hoti jyada, It would be much better... Because it is about Aditiya.. Baki not saying much It Was a Fantastic try and I liked it ... Love the title Clap Clap Kudos to Poet to use feelings as a Poem Clap

Poem 2 I liked the title.. very well doing justice to Poem... Loved your Rhythm...First part for personality of Aditiya and second about wishes.. very well planned Work... Very well used of some Urdu words ..I liked it ....Keep Up This Work   Clap Clap Kudos to Poet for arrange everything with rhythm and for well presented work

Poem 3 It is beautiful and so cute one..I would loved it agar yeh Abhijeet nahi Aditiya Sir ke bare main hoti.. I think Poet might mistaken by Actor and Character ... Nowhere discussed about Aditiya As it is his Birthday... Liked the poem but concept was wrong (personally felt) .. respect to fact Poet tried to write and wrote in a beautiful way, Kudos to Poet ..Liked it.. Would have Loved it agar Abhijeet Sir ka Birthday hota but still a Superb Work.. Clap Clap


Poem 4 This one is Rhythmic a bit emotional one for me... described some really good facts.. Very well planned in two parts and full justice with both parts.. Poets presented some personal feelings as well..agar yar app aise Frayad kroge, Bhagwaan will for sure bless Aditiya Sir with all happinesses in life.. Loved that You used Dayanand Shetty instead of Daya.. Good thinking .. felt great that you also thought about his family and covered all the personals and professional areas with duya's ...Very well done.. Keep it up..Kudos to writer to mentioned all the factors in emotional way about personal and professional Life of Aditiya Sir Clap Clap

Poem 5 Hmmm Poem in English ... Very well Explained all the factors personal and professional.. I was trying to translate this poem in hindi LOL and it comes out in beautiful way....felt rhythm problem on some occasion but it is really a good work hehe Abhi-Daya together yaha wishes main bhi dil ki baat keh he di Poet ne...Nice presented personal emotions.. very well done kudos to writer Clap Clap

Poem 6 I liked the Title ... rhythm was good... I loved 1st stanza So true it is!!! but agar 2-3 aur stanza hote ton kya baat thi!! never the less Kudos to this Poet Clap Clap

I have tried to be bit open up and frank to poets with my review please koi bhi bura mat manana.. if anyone has felt that i said something wrong somewhere mujhe PM karna ..I will clear my point.. But kehna padhega it is really a superb work and judges will have to do work hard in order to choose winners .. Everyone is a winner here.. Clap Clap

Moreover, it was review about more than 1 stanza poems .i.e Big Ones .. will come later with smaller and cuter ones .. Would love to See Other Reviews


Edited by bhinder.kamboj - 20 July 2010 at 3:11am

The following 4 member(s) liked the above post:

DemonStarsneh.sunnyp1414Shagnika

CAHAT320

Senior Member

CAHAT320

Joined: 22 June 2010

Posts: 449

Posted: 20 July 2010 at 3:04am | IP Logged
sneha di i lov your all poems but the 3 one was best.....

sneh.

Goldie

sneh.

Joined: 11 October 2009

Posts: 1293

Posted: 20 July 2010 at 3:17am | IP Logged
hey these are not my poems dear, its just I have posted them. This is poem competition do read the poems and pm me or jiya the rating by tonite ok

bhinder.thind

IF-Dazzler

bhinder.thind

Joined: 03 April 2010

Posts: 4010

Posted: 20 July 2010 at 3:18am | IP Logged
Originally posted by sneha_fighter

hey these are not my poems dear, its just I have posted them. This is poem competition do read the poems and pm me or jiya the rating by tonite ok


Can Participants rate??

sneh.

Goldie

sneh.

Joined: 11 October 2009

Posts: 1293

Posted: 20 July 2010 at 3:22am | IP Logged
Participants can rate for the poems avoiding their own poems. Make it by tonite

DemonStar

Coolbie

DemonStar

Joined: 16 March 2006

Posts: 12845

Posted: 20 July 2010 at 3:22am | IP Logged
Great poems everyone, amazing work! Clap Big smile


Edited by DemonStar - 20 July 2010 at 3:23am

The following 1 member(s) liked the above post:

bhinder.thind

Post Reply New Post

Go to top

Related Topics

  Topics Topic Starter Replies Views Last Post
ADITYA SRIVASTAV Ka ART competition RESULTS

2 3 4 5 6 7 8

Bhavanab 62 6178 01 January 2011 at 3:58am
By Mayapapaya
HAPPY BIRTHDAY ADITYA SIR

2 3 4

bhinder.thind 27 3173 21 July 2010 at 9:53pm
By sakshya
CID POEM poojakrg 2 403 19 July 2010 at 11:15am
By sunnyp1414
Little Personal-POEM on Pg 26(19th July)

2 3 4 5 6 7 ... 27 28

Shagnika 216 11784 19 July 2010 at 11:02am
By sunnyp1414
Aditya Sir Ka Sabase Bada Fan Result ..comig soon

2 3 4 5 6 7 ... 13 14

jiya. 104 4711 19 July 2010 at 9:22am
By Shagnika

Forum Quick Jump

Forum Category

Active Forums

CID Topic Index

Limit search to this Forum only.

 

Disclaimer: All Logos and Pictures of various Channels, Shows, Artistes, Media Houses, Companies, Brands etc. belong to their respective owners, and are used to merely visually identify the Channels, Shows, Companies, Brands, etc. to the viewer. Incase of any issue please contact the webmaster.