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Posted: 28 June 2010 at 2:03pm | IP Logged
wow new ff
 
con soon
 
i like ur writing

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Posted: 28 June 2010 at 10:14pm | IP Logged
Hi Shreya... Nice concept, add me in and post first part soon. Big smile

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nice start
plz cont soon

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hey shreya
Concept and CS is amazing
 
Please continue soon
 and i am in ofcourse

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Posted: 03 July 2010 at 3:27am | IP Logged

Hey friends... I am happy you liked the concept.

Thanks to all who liked and commented on it...

 

So here I start it...

 

                                                                          PART 1:

 

 

Nupur was packing her bag. It was hard to tell by her emotions what she was thinking.

 

Flashback in her mind:

 

N: Papa, mere 86% aye. Me bahot bahot..... BAHOT khush hu. Laiye meri gift?

 

ND: (Tears shining in his eyes) Me bhi bahot khush hu, beta. Bas isi tarah se apne khandan ka naam roshan karna. Aur ab tumhari gift... Ye rahi.

 

N: Wow.... Ye to wohi wrist watch he jo mujhe pasand ayi thi.

 

ND: Haan, aur expensive thi is liye tumne mana kiya tha kharidne se. He na?

 

N: Ji. Papa.

 

ND: Ab mujhe promise karo beta, tum jee laga ke padhai karogi. Tabhi to tumhe...

 

N: Haan, haan, janti hu, tabhi to mujhe EXCEL me admission milega, He na?

 

ND: Ha, beta.

 

Nupur hugged her dad. "Me promise karti hu papa, I will try my best to score best."

 

ND: Nahi, beta. Sab kuchh marks pe depend nahi karta he. You have to learn properly and nicely. Result to uske baad ayege hi. Right?

 

N: As usual.

 

ND: Ok, ab chalo. Dinner ka time ho gaya.

 

Bach to Present:

N: Papa, aaj Morena se jaa rahi hu. Excel me admission mil gaya he. Magar aap to? aap to kab ke mujhe chhod ke chale gae. Kyun?

Just then Ratna bui entered her room. "Ro mat Nupur. Ab aur kitna yaad karegi Bhaiya ko?"

N: Aap ko to pata he na Bui ki mere liya papa kitne important he?

B: Haan, Nupur, janti hu. Magar honi ko kaun taal sakta he?  

N: Aap sahi keh rahi ho, Bui. Me taiyar ho ke aati hu. 1 ghante baad ki train he.

B: Beta, agar tu yaha par hi college join kar le to jyada achha rahega.

N: Nahi, Bui. Papa hamesha e chahte the ki me EXCEL me padhu. Aur ye hi unki last wish thi.

B: (Murmuring) Akeli ladki Mumbai jayegi. Mene Shashi se pehle hi kaha tha ki isko control me rakho, magar meri to baat koi sune tab na?

N: Bui, Me bilkul thik hogi. Aur vaha uncle ka ghar bhi to he. Gunjan aur Suhani bhi mere best friends he.

B: Mana ki Gunjan ke dad tere papa ke best friend the, magar tu unke ghar rahe ye achha to nahi lagega na?

N: Bui. Uncle mujhe marege, agar me unke yaha nahi ruki to.

B: Thik he, ab tujhe kaun rok sakta he?

And Bui went out.

N: Me janti hu, Bui ki me aap ka dil dukha rahi hu. Magar papa ki last wish ye hi thi. To me is me kuchh bhi compromise nahi kar sakti.

 

At the same time in Mumbai:

 

Gunjan and Suhani are sitting together in Gunjan's room and looking at some albums. In almost each album, there are 2 or 3 girls playing and giggling.

G: Ye photo dekh, Sush. Is me Nupur ne kesa muh banaya he na?

Su: Oh yes? Tumne use chup ke se karela khila diya tha, aur mene photo lit hi.

G: Aur is me tum kitni moti lag rahi ho?

Su: Gunji, I will kill you. Tumne mujhe moti kaha?

G: Aur nahi to kya?

Su: Hmm.. Aur isphoto me rotlu sakal kisne bana rakhi he?

G: Oops? Ye to me hu.

Su: Yes. Ma'am.

G: Kya din the na vo, Sush?

Su: Ha, Gunji. Bachpan to sab se achha tha.

G: Aur kal Nupsi Mumbai aa rahi he.

Su: Hmmm? Hamare sath ollege me bhi to he.

G: Ha? I am damn curious for that, Sush.

S: Hum tino phir se sath me, matlab pure college ki to?

G: Chhutti.

Uday entered the room.

U: Hey girls?

G: Uday, tum jaldi ghar aa gaye?

U: Yes, sis.

G: Kyun, Kya hua? Tumnare FRIENDS Samrat, Adhiraj aur Mayank ne jaldi ghar bhej diya, kya?

Suhani giggled.

U: Nahi to, mene unhe kaha ki mujhe Gunjan ke liye pizza le jane he, to me nahi beth sakuga.

G: To?

U: To kya?

Su: To mera aur Gunji ka Pizza kaha he, Uday?

U: Vo to mene kha liya.

G: Uday, I will kill you.

And Gunjan starts running behind him. And Suhani leaves for her house, which was just adjacent to Gunjan's house.

 

After reaching her house?

Su: Benji!

B: Yes, Suhani?

Su: Me sone jaa rahi hu. Mom dad aye to bol dena ki me mene unka bahot intezar kiya. Ok?

B: Bachpan se mujh se jooth bolwati ho. Not fair, yaar.

Su: Oye, tujhe apni pocket money kam karwani he, kya?

B: Ok, ok. Bol dunga. Ab ye financial blackmail karna bandh bhi karo.

Su: That's like my sweet and innocent brother. Good night.

B: Sweet dreams.

 

Here at Samrat, Mayank and Adhiraj's home:

 

Samrat, Mayank and Adhiraj were sitting in lawn.

S: Hey, dude. Ab college start ho raha he 2 din me. College ka pehla din kesa hoga ? He na?

A: Ha, yaar, I am really excited for that.

S: Hey, Mayank, tum kuchh bol kyun nahi rahe ho?

M: Me soch raha tha Samrat.

S: Fees aur baki sare expenses ke bare me na?

M: Hmm.

S: Look, champ. Me, tum aur Adhiraj hum tino cousins he. Ab agar uncle aunty nahi he, to kya hua? Mere papa aur Adhiraj ke papa dono ne tum se kaha ki vo fees de dege. Tum kyu mana kar rahe the?

M: I want to be on my own, Samrat.

A: I can understand Mayank. But abhi tum kya karoge?

M: Koi part time job. Pichhle saal papa aur mom ka accident hua, tab to mene uncle ki help le li kyuki 12th standard ki preparation aur earnings sath me nahi ho pati. Magar ab aur nahi.

A: To college ke timing ke sath office to adjust hogi nahi!

M: Tutions?

S: Hmmph? College me tuitions. Sab exam time pe help lene ayege. Vo bhi free me. Koi tuitions nahi karega. To be frank, me bhi nahi.

And Samrat and Adhiraj burst out in laughter.

M: Stop it guys. Mujhe ideas dene ki vajah tum log masti kar rahe ho?

A: Sorry. Hey, 9:00. Chalo andar. Nach Baliye start hoga.

M: Start ho gaya inka TV session!

S: Nahi Adhiraj. Ek to un Krina aur Avinash ki pair to kitni bakwas he.. (Totally imaginary name as I didn't watch any episode of Nach Baliye? So please don't get offended. I am not insulting the show or anyone in particular? I hope you understand.. Sorry if I hurt anyone unintentionally?) Esa lagta he jese ek jagah par hilte rehte he. Aur vo Manoj aur Shikha, unhone to kabhi is se pehle dance kiya hi nahi hoga.

M: Idea. (Snaps his finger)

S & A: Kya?

M: Part time job. My own dance class.

S: Brilliant thought man.

M: Thank you.

A: Haa, yaar ye hum ne pehle kyun nahi socha? Tum to dancing champion ho. AndI promise, Maths sikhne me tumhare paas aau ya nahi, magar Dance sikhne jaroor aauga.

S: Count me in, too.

M: I know. Ab chale aap ka Nach Baliye dekne. Me jaa ke uncles ki permission leta hu. Mere decision se un dono ko dukh nahi hona chahiye.

S: Chalo. Sab thik hoga.

A: Haan. Chalo.

And the trio goes to Samrat and Adhiraj's dad. They both were just chitchatting after having their dinner. And they were in good mood. They said YES on onecondition. That if Mayank needed any help, any time, he would ask them without hesitating.

And Mayank accepted it.

Then they went to their rooms.

 

So that was it. Just intro to the characters and their lives. Still some haracters are there. Will be introduced in college. So wait for next update. How was the start? Tell me through comments

Hit the LIKE button if you liked it.

Criticism is most welcome.

Love,

$hrey@

P.S.: Friends... I edited my username to ..Shreyu.. Just for a change.... Edited after sending you PM, so couldn't tell in that. So please don't forget to send me PM of your updates and don't get confused about my username...Sorry to bother you...Ouch
Bye, Take care...Wink


Edited by ..Shreyu.. - 03 July 2010 at 4:14am

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Posted: 03 July 2010 at 4:40am | IP Logged
Awesome........
Amazing....
Lovely.........
It is too good.........
Continue soon..........
And thnks for the pm........

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Posted: 03 July 2010 at 4:41am | IP Logged

mindblowing start lov

cont soon
thnx 4 d pm

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wonderful start Shreyu! cont. soon....

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