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yasharan.love

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Posted: 09 June 2010 at 4:39am | IP Logged

well ... im not new but hve been a silent member of india-forums for quite sometime. I'm writing this FF coz well shan and khanak's story is complicated and i would like to tell my version of how these two should fall in love... plz give ur feedback as to if my ff is even good or not...

 
my ff starts after Khanak sees tashu and shan in tashu's room... now this is just a sample plz tell me if u guys like it or not the i'll cont...Smile
 

 

 
 
 KHANAK AND SHANTANU... IT'S COMPLICATED

 
 
Khanak is standing outside tashu's bedroom door, she is smiling seeing tashu and shan together, they remind her of herself and her suraj. her smile gave way to tears as she recalled Suraj's dead body on the floor of her house.

'arrey Khanak beta, tum abhi bhi yahi ho, jaao jaa kar doodh shan ko jaldi se de do, achi neend aayegi use doodh pi kar.'

she wiped her tears, 'ji dadi'

'beta kya hua? Kisi ne kuch kaha?'

khanak shook her head, ' nahi, woh aankh mein kuch chala gaya tha, mein jati hoon ab.'

'isse kya hua?'

'shan stop it!'

'tum ne mujhe maaf kiya ya nahi?'

' yeh natasha ke kamre mein shan! Abh pata chala Khanak udas kyu thi. Mujhe hi kuch karna padhega!'

dadi marches to tashu's room and opens the door, ' kya ho raha hai yaha!?'

 

'Dadi, woh natasha dukhi thi, isliye...'

'isliye kya shan?! Bhulo maat Khanak tumhari patni hai, natasha nahi ! poore din bechari Khanak ko tumhari maa bate sunati hai, uski bezati karti hai! par tumhe khanak ke dukh ki koi fikr nahi! '

 

' dadi khanak ko mein apni patni nahi manta! Mein sirf natasha se pyaar karta hoon.'

'pyaar karna naa karna door ki baat hai shan, tum kya use insaan jaise bhi baat karte ho, wo bechari poore din tumhare liye kitna kuch karti hai, aur tum? Tum raat ko natasha ke saath! Roo rahi thi woh darwaze ke bahar...'

 

' acha to aap ko usne bheja hai, mein use baat karta hoon.'

 

'shan ruko, khanak ko kuch kahene ki zaroorat nahi.'

' nahi natasha, paani sar ke upar se jaae use se pehle mein khanak ko aaj once and for all samajha dena chahata hoon, ki woh yeh patni dharm ka naatak bandh karde.'

 

'shan, shan!!'

'natasha shan ko jaana do, yeh baat pati patni ke beech ki hai, kisi doosre ko isme padhne ka koi haak nahi.'

'dadi mujhe haak hai, shan aur mein ek doosre se pyaar karte hai, sacha pyaar.'

 

'sacha pyaar?' dadi smirks ' natasha agar tum doono ke beech sacha pyaar hota to tum yaha nahi hoti. Tumhe shan aur apne pyaar pe poora bharosa hota. Bharosa hota ki Khanak chahe kuch bhi kare shan tumse pyaar karta rahe ga. Par tum yaha ho, Khanak se apne aap ko behtar saabit karne ki koshish kar rahi ho. Shan ko yeh dikha kar kya saabit karna chahati ho?'

 

'dadi aap ka maatlab kya hai? Mein Khanak se jalti nahi, aur mein yaha shan ke liye hoon.'

'natasha tum yaha shan ke liye nahi apne liye ho. Agar tumhare aur shantanu ke beech sacha pyaar hota to tum yaha shan aur khanak pe nazar rakhne rehne nahi aati. Aur naa hi tum dinner bana ne ki koshish karti ye jaane ke baad ki Khanak ka bheja hua lunch shan ko bahut pasand aaya hai. Tum apne aap se kuch bhi kehlo natasha par sachai yehi rahe gi ki tum darti ho ke aagar shan aur khanak ko waqt mila to woh ek doosre se pyaar karne lagege.'

 

with that dadi left the room leaving behind an angry and insulted natasha.

 

 

****

 

Khanak is in her room crying, recalling her moments with her Suraj, recalling the way he always cared for her, loved her. 'Suraj, kash tum aaj mere saat, mere paas hote. Kash tum us din factory naa jate, kash mein tumhe rok paati, toh aaj hum saath hote dhulwadi mein, aur yaha natasha aur Shantanu ki bhi shaadi ho jati... Subh khush hote.

She is weeping recalling suraj, unknown to her Shantanu is coming towards their room, his blood boiling with anger.

'how dare she complain to dadi, how dare she send dadi to scold me! I'll show her today, I make sure she understands that she doesn't mean anything, that she has no right.'

he reached his room and violently opened the door, Khanak was shocked as she saw him menacingly staring at her'

 

Sorry if i hve voilated forum rules Smile
 
here are the chapter and the pg number they r on.Smile
Chap 1- pg 1

Chap 2- pg 2

Chap 3 ' pg 3

Chap 4 ' pg 4

Chap 5 ' pg 6

Chap 6 ' pg 7

Chap 7 ' pg 10

Chap 8 ' pg 13

Chap 9 - pg 15

Chap 10 - pg 18

Chap 11- pg 21

Chap 12 - pg 24

Chap 13 - pg 26

Chap 14 - pg29

Chap 15 - pg 32

Chap 16 - pg 34

Chap 17- pg 36
Chap 18 - pg 40
Chap 19- pg 42
Chap 20- pg 46
Chap 20 Part2- pg 48
Chap 21- Pg 51
Chap 22- Pg 53
chap 23- pg 57
Chap 24 part 1- pg 60
Chap 24 part2- pg 66
Chap 25- pg 70
Chap 26 -Pg 74


Edited by yasharan.love - 26 June 2011 at 8:37am

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Posted: 09 June 2010 at 4:49am | IP Logged
it's really nice fashion, please continue soonSmile i'd like to see your version of how shan falls or khanak though i'm hoping its not as complicated LOL

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Posted: 09 June 2010 at 4:54am | IP Logged
Gr88888888 starting.Looking forward to next part.
 
 
 
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Posted: 09 June 2010 at 5:09am | IP Logged
nice start....do continue please....

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Posted: 09 June 2010 at 5:36am | IP Logged
Well written, please continue. Clap

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Posted: 09 June 2010 at 7:47am | IP Logged
gr8 start.. continue soon... an PM me for sure..

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Posted: 10 June 2010 at 4:35am | IP Logged
do continue dear
please i juts loved it
thanks
bye sumi

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its cute , do wrtie ...................

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