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Posted: 09 June 2010 at 12:32am | IP Logged
Originally posted by ronojoy_ria

bohot he sweet haai story
loved it
 
 
Thanxxx a lot Ria...Big smile
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Posted: 09 June 2010 at 12:42am | IP Logged
Originally posted by fanatic 21

soooooooooooo  beautiful.................ClapClapClapClap
loved it completely........ClapClap 
d way it began and till d end same tempo was der.......loved it.....ClapClap


awesome way of presenting suman and raj and also der parts in diff ways.....Clap thanxxxx...thanxxxx...thanxxxxx a lottttt LipiBig smile Big smile Big smile Big smile Big smile Big smile


as usual ur dialogue part is always ur plus point.....aur haan bichme aapki kuch lines jaise yeh

(mujhe pata hai ki aap sab kya soch rahe honge...RAJ...border par jo gaya tha...matlab kuch BAHT BURA...LOL!!! come on guys...dis is Priya...bura toh kuch ho hi nahi sakta...aur agar kuch hua bhi toh main hun na...use thik karne k liye...)

 adds to the flavour......WinkSmile ha ha ha...yeh mera plus point nahi...mere paas dimag ki kaami hai...yeh baat aap sab ko yaad dilati hai...LOL LOL LOL

was it poem or song dnt know..(sry for datOuch)...but it was beautiful...ClapClapClap first one 's a Gazal by Jagjeet singh n second one s a song...jise maine apne aunty k poem dairy  me padha tha...Big smile


also kindly post ur unedited version as well....TongueSmile use main kisi aur fic me add kar dungi...okayBig smileBig smile


keep posting such beautiful and wonderful creations by u.....SmileSmileSmileTongue sure...par us se pahle aap soch lo...ki kya aap sach me PAKNA chahti ho inhe padh kar...LOL LOL LOL

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Posted: 09 June 2010 at 12:46am | IP Logged
Originally posted by guglu088

Originally posted by Gauri_s

very very very...angry with u di.....Angry Angry Angry 
 
tune is shot ka romantic part EDIT kyoun kiya...Angry Angry Angry
 
tu bahat buri hai...Angry Angry Angry
 
ab main tujh se kabhiiiiiiiiii baat nahi karungi...kattiiiiiii Angry Angry Angry


Oye Priya...mai to yahan comment karne ja rahi thi...par ye kya baat hui...kya edit kiya tune...unedited version post kar...jaldi...
rahne de meri Maa...'jo chala gaya use bhul ja' (yeh maine nahi singer Mukesh ne gaya haiLOL)...main use kisi aur fic me add kar lungi na...!!! tu use rahne de...aur yeh bata ki yeh BAKWAAS(OS)kitna bura tha...LOL LOL LOL
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Posted: 09 June 2010 at 12:53am | IP Logged
Originally posted by princessyogitha

Hiiii Priya.... Hiiiiiii YogiBig smile

 Fabulous os dear Clap Clap  Clap   Clap   Clap   Clap  Clap  Clap  Clap  Clap  Clap   Clap   Clap  Clap dhanyavaad maamBig smile Big smile  Big smile Big smile Big smile Big smile Big smile Big smile Big smile Big smile Big smile Big smile Big smile Big smile Big smile

tune itni wonderful os likhi aur hum sab se chupayi...too bad ..thanks to guari ....because of  her kasam  u posted this os arre us ka toh Dimag hi kharab tha...aur mera bhi..... jo maine use yeh promise kar diya...varna...??? jane de yaar...Ouch

 mujhe iski title bahut accha laga  yaar .. thanxxxx...last moment par yeh title mere dimag me aaya tha...Big smile

 
aur  Suman n  raj ki love story  bhi bahut beautiful  n sweet hain   ....their feelings, pain  every thing u described so beautifully...I loved all the scenes in this os....their first meet is so cute ...the song is so lovely,thank god raj sahi time pe suman ki father  se baat kiya  ..aur sab kuch tikh hogaya aise kaise thik nahi hota...??? akhir writer koun hai...tujhe kya yaad dilana padega...??? chahe mere lyf me kuch bhi thik na ho...par mere fics me sab kuch hamesha thik hi hoga...!!! itna bharosha rakh sakti hai tu...Big smile Big smile Big smile
 
mujhe sab se jyada kya accha laga is os main pata hain...raj saying to suman in the last part  "main  tumhe apne se alag nahi karnewala aur jinhe bhi tumhari yaad aaye"...wo khudh aajaye...awesome yaar ...shukriya maam...Big smile Big smile Big smile
 
i think tum meri is comment ke baadh samajgayi hogi ki mujhe ye os kitna accha laga...to  i hope tum  jaldi se another os post karke hum ko bore karogi nahi...mujhe samajh me nahi aaya ki tumhe kitna achha laga...Confused!!! jara pyar se samjhayogi toh aa jayega...matlab tumhare style me...LOL LOL LOL
 
love
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Posted: 10 June 2010 at 12:02am | IP Logged
Originally posted by sumaiya wahid

Firstly.....sabse mast hai iss topic ka title...."Lamhein wid Rajeev"....haiii!! shukriya Sumi jeeBig smile
 
Main to dekh kar hi khush go gayi thi Priya....lekin padhke mujhe bada gussa aa raha tha....I mean Bhagwan ne zuban diya hai....kuch to utilize karo....par nahi....baba adam k zamane se the dono....khat likhte rahe!! "I love you"....teen simple se shabd hai....inhe kehne k bajai....kya kya likhte rahe....haath dard nahi kiya kya?? ha ha ha...LOL LOL LOL...actally hua yun tha ki meri czn sis ne 'letter' k upar likhne ko kaha tha...!!! aur tumhe toh pata hi hai ki aaj kal 'letters' koun likhta hai yaar...!!! par maine last year ise likha tha...pata nahi use kya achha laga us ne mujhe apne B'day par promise le liya...ki main ise yahan par post karun...!!! aur aage ki kahani tum toh janti hi ho...!!! aur rahi baat Raj aur suman ki...toh agar voh dono pahle se hi sab kuch bata dete...toh meri yeh OS itni lambi-chaudi kaise hoti...LOL LOL LOL

Anyways....inpe gussa karke kya fayda?? Inhone wahi kiya jo aap ne unse karwaya madam!! haan...yeh baat toh sau fishadi sahi kaha hai tum ne...LOL LOL LOL
 
Ek to itna gloomy start kiya fic ki....mera to dil dhak dhak kar raha tha....in anticipation....i thought ye Priya ne kuch gadbad to nahi kar dii...one shot likhte likhte!! But however I was glad ki u r still the lioness....and they had got sum brains knocked into them!! Achha hua Raj me mohabbat ka jazba aa gaya tha....warna ghor anarth ho jata!! kuch nahi hota...!!! yaar...fic padhne se pahle apne DIMAGLESS dimag se soch liya karo ki fic ko akhir likha kis ne hai....??? PRIYA ne...jis k paas khud ka DIMAG bilkul bhi nahi hai...jo DDPA ki member bhi hai tum sab k sath...toh voh kaise kuch bura kar sakti hai ...hai na...LOL LOL LOL

Waise I loved the way their story were portrayed....like how they came to knw each other....and how they grew fond of each other!! Wo song wala portion badhiya tha....it was veryyyy unique Priya!! I must admire u for that!! sachhiiiiTongue Tongue Tongue...chalo is khushi me ek drink ho jaye...!!! oye...main NARIYAL PANI ki baat karr rahi hun...itni garmi jo hai...LOL LOL LOL
 
And then wo towel wala chhotu sa scene.....do I even need to say wat I was reminded of while reading that?? ha ha ha...LOL LOL LOL nahi...main samajh sakti hun...

Khair...anth bhala to sab bhala....btw I liked Raj saying....jisko milna hai wo yaha aa jaye....tumhe jaane nahi dunga....now thats like the perfect husband!! Rajeev har taraf se perfect hi hai...Wink
 
Bas tum Raj ko thodi chhuttiya bhi dila dena....bechare se kitna kaam karwate hai....apni shaadi me bhi usse waqt nahi mila....hehe. Honeymoon pe bhej dena....pls....hehe. lo tumhari baat maan li aur use chuttiyan bhi mil gayi...ab voh aaram se DHAKA me hai...!!! mile tumhe toh plz...kahna ki jaldi se aa jaye...mujhe next fic post karna hai...LOL LOL LOL

Chalo....ab next shot bhi post karo....and hamein thoda aur bore karo....bye...take care!! tumhe bore hone ki badi padi hai...thik hai...koi baat nahi...main jaldi hi tumhe phir se bore karungi...Tongue Tongue Tongue
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Posted: 10 June 2010 at 12:07am | IP Logged
Originally posted by sumaiya wahid

Edit????? Shocked Shocked Shocked nahi....koi mujhe bachaooo...sabhi meri dhulai karna cahahte hain...LOL!!! (@ Gauri....teri wajah se hi yeh sab kuch ho raha hai...tujhe toh main chodungi nahiAngry)

Madam....aap ne iss shot ko edit kiya??? meri dimag ka dhakkan band ho gaya tha... jo maine aisa kiya...!!!Ouch
 
Ek to tumne arse baad....gauri ki kasam ki wajah se....ye shot post karne ki zehmat uthayi....we so appreciate u for this...ab isme editing ki dikkat kyun uthayi yaar??? Itna jab bore hue hum....to thoda aur ho jate....AngryAngry....huh!! Me very gussa...Dead ab tumhare khubshrat se chehre par na gusse wala xpression kuch achha nahi lagta...tum mushkurati hui kitni achhi lagti ho...tumhe pata hai...LOL??? chalo ab kaan pakdoLOL...matlab main kaan pakadti hun ki aage se aisi gushtakhi nahi hogi...LOLBig smile
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Posted: 10 June 2010 at 12:12am | IP Logged
Originally posted by sumaiya wahid

Originally posted by Lion_Priya

 
ab maaf bhi kar do...main us scene ko kisi aur SHOT me add kar dungi...agar aap log abhi bhi bore hona chahte hoge toh...!!!


Hmm....the last lines sounded better!! Kisi aur shot me.....hmm....I think it will do for me.... ab yeh bhi koi puchnewali baat hai...ofcourse for u...n sabhi...jo bhi tumhare sath mil kar mujhe galiyan de rahe hain...Big smile
 
waise agar tumne cut kiya hai.....may be it was for better!! Ek writer sabse zyada achhese samajhti hai na? arre yaar...voh part agar maine EDIT nahi kiya hota toh yeh OS hi nahi rahta...matlab is fic k 2 parts ho jate...Smile
 
Anyways....main na likhna bhul gayi thi.....wo poems/songs.....jo bhi the....they were beautiful!!!ClapClap Wink 1st one's a gazal by Jagjeet singh...n 2nd one...ek poem hai...jo maine apne Aunty k dairy me padha tha...Big smile Big smile Big smile
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Posted: 10 June 2010 at 12:15am | IP Logged
Originally posted by suhana_dixit

Originally posted by Lion_Priya

@...Gauri, Suri, Suhana, Lipi, Guglu, Yogi, Rakhi, Sumi n all (jo bhi mujhe galiyaan dene k mood me hainLOL)

 
mujhe maaf karo yaar...!!! maine kuch parts is ka EDIT kiya hai...!!! actually aaj kal phones aur e-mail k zamane me koi kisi ko khat likhta hai kya...??? par Gauri ne mujhe ek Task diya tha...ki main is par ek SHOT likhun...!!! aur meri kahani ki suruwat toh rajeev se hi hoti hai...aur usi par khatam bhi...toh maine Rajeev par likhna suru kiya aur maine bakwaas likhna suru kar diya...hala ki natiza baht bura tha...mujhe saar peetne ka mann karr raha tha ise padhne k baad...!!!ab yeh sach hai ki is SHOT me ek romantic part tha...par mujhe laga ki kahin yeh kuch jyada na ho jaye...!!! mera dimag kuch jyada chalta hai...yeh toh aap sab jante hi hoge...isiliye...!!!
 
ab maaf bhi kar do...main us scene ko kisi aur SHOT me add kar dungi...agar aap log abhi bhi bore hona chahte hoge toh...!!!
Hi Priya Hiii Suhana...Big smile
Mujhe tumhe maarne ka mann nahin kar raha hai..u know main hinsa mein vishwaas nahin rakhti to shanti se edited part kabhi kissi doosre shot mein post kar denaBig smile wow.... tum sach me Gandhi jee k adarsh se inspire lagti ho...!!! is ka matlab pata hai...??? is ka matlab yeh hai ki main kuch bhi karun...kam se kam tumhare taraf se toh safe hun...LOL
jaisa sumi ne kaha u r the best one to decide whether to keep or edit the scene in your fiction thanxxxxx a lot....ab main kafi relaxed feel karr rahi hun...Big smile
 
ByeSmile

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