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siaseeks

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Posted: 17 April 2010 at 7:34am | IP Logged
In the last four months i read as many stories i can read in this forum. reading all those
i think i am impressed and shockingly thought why dont i start one ff.
so i started to think of writing one so that in the meanwhile i can divert my mind from
waiting for the other stories to move forward.

before u start reading let me first tell u i ma a good reader but not a writer .
but i intiated thinking chalo ek kahani likh detehai phir dekthe hai. it will prove my
writing skills even good or bad. right?

if u dint like the ff let me apolize on before hand


                                          EHSAAS ( Feeling Of Love )


PART 1


There lay a girl in her early twenties in the pool of blood. she had a severe accident
and blood is flowing from her body nonstop. she cannot keep her eyes open to know
what is happening to her.before going into a unconcious state she saw a man looking
at her worriedly.his face shows several expressions like worry, concern, feared,hope.
he is speaking to her, telling something but she cant hear anything the man said. the
man who is looking at her was the last thing she remembered and she slipped into
unconcious state.


JEEVAN hospital, Delhi
(Two weeks later)

she doesnt know where she was. it looks to her that there is no escape for her form
the place. fear gripped her heart.she stared running blindly not knowing where
she is heading. as she was about to fall from a cliff a hand came from behind and
pulled her back. before seeing who hand it is she. she looses her conciousness

(ICU)
the girl opened her eyes with a jerk. her whole body seemed to tense. she tried to
calm herself from the dreadful dream. after sometime she found herself relaxed and
started observing the surroundings.when she did she cant place where she is.she
strained her eyes to know where she is but she cannot recognise the surroundings
in which she is. she had a slight pain in her head which she found was bandaged.
she cannot understand where she was, why she was there. she tried to getup from
her sleeping position but herbody didnt support her due to lack of strength. so she
adjusted herself into a sitting position.

just then the door to the room in which she was there opened and a woman in her
early fiftees who is dressed in an nurse attire entered the room. the nurse looked at
the girl who is sitting on the bed looking at her with a confusion on her face.
the nurse is shocked at first to see the girl who is in coma for the the last two weeks
is woken up and is sitting in the bed. she smiled at the girl warmly and hurriedly left
the room to inform the doctor about the patient being woken up from coma

few minutes later the nurse along with two other doctors came to the room. the doctors
examined the girl asked her how she is feeling. the girl just stares at them as she
didnt understand why she is in the hospital and what the doctor is asking about.

among the two doctors one who is in his late fiftees asked her
doc: how r u feeling young lady?
girl: i am fine. but why r u asking? what happened to me? why i am here?"
doc: dont u remember u had a severe accident two weeks ago.
the girl shakes her head in a no
the doctor looks at the girl and told her
" you had an accident two weeks ago and was admitted in the hospital in the state of
   unconciousness.after the operation u slipped into coma.u ar in coma for two long
   weeks."
   
the girl listens to the doctors words carefully and she suddenly holds her head with
her right hand as she feels a slight pain there.the girl looked at the doctor with a
questioning eyes
doc:u will be suffering slight pain in the head if u stress or strain ur brain as ur head
        got hitted to the iron pole at the time of accident. its an internal injury. so it takes
        time. and u should not stress urself

       

( outside the hospital )
A black BMW came into the halt. and a man wearing an expensive black suit who is in
his late twenties came out of the car.his handsome face shows a slight tension and
he walked hurriedly in to the hospital corridor.

Dr.Kapoor's assistant had called him half an hour before to inform him that the girl had
wokenup and asked him to be there as soon as possible.
The last two weeks had been very stressfull for him. among many reasons for his stress
this girl is one reason.

As he enters the room he hears the doctor asking the girl her name
doc: "now do u remember how do u got into an accident?"
the girl just stares back at the doctor
girl: "no. i dint rememeber anything"

the doctor frowns on hearing this. he with hope asks her
doc: what is your name?
girl: mera naam?
the girl just stares at the doc blankly
doc: haan thumara naam?
girl: mujhe yaad nahi.

the man at the door shocked hearing her response. he thinks
"how come she didnt remember her name?"

doc: beta try to think hard about
        your name, ur family , ur place tell me anything if u remember anything

by now tears start flowing through her eyes. she cant remember anything. and she
stats crying. In between sobs she told the doc that she cant remember anything.

The doctor looks at the girl with a worried expression on his face she continues crying
and in between murmurs she didnt remeber anything

just then the man at the door barges in and shouts at her making her jerk up from her
seat
"how couldn't u remember ur name or anything? kuch tho yaad hoga na ? think hard!"

the girl seems mortified by his shouting. just then the doc interferes
"Mr.Walia please calm down. "
the doctor turns to the girl and asks her
" beta do u remember him?"
the girl looks at the man and then the doctor and shakes her head in negative
doc: try to remember beta. how can u forget him he is your husband."
the man looks at the doctor with a horrified expression at being
introduced as the girls husband





Edited by siaseeks - 09 August 2010 at 5:54am

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Rockyy_

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Posted: 17 April 2010 at 9:01am | IP Logged

Hey I'm quite impress, just an awesome beginning.

Update real soon with the next chapter.

Take care and happy writing.

janam

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Posted: 17 April 2010 at 9:54am | IP Logged
Nice start. Please continue soon.

kooliio

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Posted: 17 April 2010 at 5:27pm | IP Logged
awesome start...
cant wait for the next part...
plz cont.soon...

soumiya

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Posted: 17 April 2010 at 9:36pm | IP Logged
Nice start....
Why did the doctor intorduce him as her husband?????
 
Waiting eagerly for the next part

chander992

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Posted: 17 April 2010 at 9:40pm | IP Logged
a very big misunderstanding b/w the doc and jai and bani as well...lets see how it unfolds...
cont soon =)

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Posted: 17 April 2010 at 10:23pm | IP Logged
great start.
plz cont.soon.

kuttu

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Posted: 18 April 2010 at 3:25am | IP Logged
Hi
So Bani has met with an accident. Is it by the hands of Jai. And why did the doctor address Jai as her husband.
Is he or is he not. Surely you have tired to create an air of mystery around yoour characters. Sow aiting to see hhow it progresses.
Bye

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