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Posted: 19 April 2010 at 2:35am | IP Logged
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And also welcome to the club of writers... humare saath ek aur bhi aa gayi... sahi kaha guglu...ab hum sabb mil kar is ka voh halat karenge ki ise jaldi hamare club ke member ka card mil jayega...LOL LOL LOL LOL  LOL LOL
 
ab bas tumhari fics se ye judge karna baaki hai ki iss writer ko DDPA ki membership kab den...maine sahi kaha na Mana aur Priya...matlab itne elite club ki membership hai jiska president Raj hai...to fir test to hona hi chahiye na...LOL yaar prolouge se toh lagta hi hai ki abhi abhi dimagless bani haiLOL...par dont worry hum sab hain na...is ka dimag pura khaali karne k liye...LOL!!! aur is k liye humain jyada mehnat bhi karni nahi padegi...bass hamare comments se use pakana hai bass....kaam 'KHALASH"...LOL!!! jiss din Siri bina wajah k pure 30 min tak hassegi...us din humain pata chal jayega ki ab is k dimag me kuch bhi nahi bacha hai...aur ise life tym membership ka card mil jayega...LOL LOL LOL LOL LOL LOL


yaar priya saare ke saare sirf hasne waale emoticons ....tum log mere expense pe has rahe ho na..........chalo has lo abhi ke liye..........jis din mera dimaag ghoom gaya aur jaise tu ne kaha tha waise hi bina kisi wajah poore 30 min tak hassungi na uss din dikhaaungi tumhe main kya kar sakthi hu............tab tak ke liye tum log hasthe raho....................

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Posted: 19 April 2010 at 2:39am | IP Logged
Originally posted by rajeev_myfriend

hey esha very nice concept yaar tumne bohot baria fic likha haai
the characters are also perfect aur sab se aacha yeh haai ke raj ke shaadi ho gaye naina jee se veryyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy nice
but yeh raj ko aapne wedding night pe he aapne biwi ko chor ke jaana par raha haai sad
 
i hope ke woh jald se jald wapis aa jaaye
 
plz cont soon esha me waiting and thanks for the pm

Thanks Rani for ur comments............I'm glad tumhe concept achcha lagaa..................Tongue

Haa Raj ki shaadi hui hai par maine aisa kab kahaa ki Naina se hui hai shaadi??????????ConfusedConfusedConfusedConfusedConfusedConfused

Hmm....Raj ek fauji hai aur uss keliye sab se pehle apna desh aur duty jyaada maaine rakthe hai......


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Posted: 19 April 2010 at 2:58am | IP Logged
Originally posted by esha143

Originally posted by Lion_Priya

Originally posted by guglu088

And also welcome to the club of writers... humare saath ek aur bhi aa gayi... sahi kaha guglu...ab hum sabb mil kar is ka voh halat karenge ki ise jaldi hamare club ke member ka card mil jayega...LOL LOL LOL LOL  LOL LOL
 
ab bas tumhari fics se ye judge karna baaki hai ki iss writer ko DDPA ki membership kab den...maine sahi kaha na Mana aur Priya...matlab itne elite club ki membership hai jiska president Raj hai...to fir test to hona hi chahiye na...LOL yaar prolouge se toh lagta hi hai ki abhi abhi dimagless bani haiLOL...par dont worry hum sab hain na...is ka dimag pura khaali karne k liye...LOL!!! aur is k liye humain jyada mehnat bhi karni nahi padegi...bass hamare comments se use pakana hai bass....kaam 'KHALASH"...LOL!!! jiss din Siri bina wajah k pure 30 min tak hassegi...us din humain pata chal jayega ki ab is k dimag me kuch bhi nahi bacha hai...aur ise life tym membership ka card mil jayega...LOL LOL LOL LOL LOL LOL


yaar priya saare ke saare sirf hasne waale emoticons ....tum log mere expense pe has rahe ho na..........chalo has lo abhi ke liye..........jis din mera dimaag ghoom gaya aur jaise tu ne kaha tha waise hi bina kisi wajah poore 30 min tak hassungi na uss din dikhaaungi tumhe main kya kar sakthi hu............tab tak ke liye tum log hasthe raho....................
hello Maam...aap ka dimag ghum gaya se kya matlab...Confused??? matlab aap k paas dimag hai kya...Ouch??? DDPA k member k paas Dimag allowed nahi hai...samjhi...LOL??? voh sirf achhe achhe UDS likh sakte hainBig smile...jaise ki tune abhi start kiya haiClap...par DIMAG ishtemal nahi karr sakteLOL... yeh strictly banned hai...Tongue!!! aur maine hassnewale emoticon isiliye post kiye hain kyoun ki DIMAGLESS club k member sirf hasste hi rahte hainLOL...sukh me bhi aur dukh me....LOL!!! aur agar kisi ko encourged karna ho na toh jyada hasste hain...code word hai yaar....!!!LOL

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STATUTORY WARNING !!!!Wink

Attention Readers.........Ouch

From here begins the actual story,purely my imagination.so,I would like to tell you at this point that there may occur some scenes or situations in the story from here onwards which may seem to be impossible to occur in real life,things that may not be applicable according to the army rules and society rules.I just want to say that this fic is purely imaginatory.Hence,I request you all to read it in that view only.As you all know,nothing is impossible while in imagination.So is this fic.

THANK YOU.......Tongue........AND BEAR WITH ME.............LOL
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PART-1

KMA.......

Kanchanjungaa Military Academy........Ambala Cantt.





     One of the best military academies in India.Aaj poore Hindustan ko iss academy pe naaz hai.Aur saath hi apne desh ki Army par bhi.Aaj logon ki nazar mein Army ke prathi izzath aur bhi badh gayi hai aur isska jyadatar shrey jaatha hai KMA ke bahaadur sipaahiyon ko.Kuch 4 mahine pehle yahaa pe ek aise sandal ka pardaa faash hua tha jisske baare mein jaan kar poora desh chaunk gaya tha....shayad poori duniyaa bhi....kyunki ye ek aisa scandal tha jo ek desh ke defence system ko hi poori tarah se khoklaa kar saktha tha......army ke nuclear triggers,arms aur ammunations ke saath saath hamaare desh ke defence system ke strategies aur technology blue prints ko bhi iss desh ke dushmanon ko bechne ka sauda.....ek tarah se dekhaa jaaye toh iss desh ko hi bechne ka sauda tha voh......par aisa ghatiyaa kaam kar kaun saktha tha........?????

LALA M.D.GEHLOT,the Dept.Defence Minister of India,has been proved a traitor in this scandal by none other than his God-Son Capt.Rajveer Singh Shekhawath.Jab ye baat sabse pehle Capt.Rajveer ke saamne aayi thi ki voh insaan jinhe voh apnaa mentor,role-model aur father-figure maantha aa rahaa hai,voh asal mein ek desh-drohi hai,ek gaddar hai aur uske dost Capt.Navin Singh Ahluwalia ke mauth ke bhi zimmedar hai toh jaise Rajveer ki duniyaa hi khatam ho gayi thi iss ek sach ke saath.Par fir bhi ussne haar nahi maani aur sabuth jutaane mein lag gaya.Par jab nuclear triggers ko shift karthe waqt spy Dr.Ritu Mishra ko giraftaar kiyaa gayaa,tab ussne Lala ke khilaaf apne paas maujood saare proofs cadet Huda ke havaale kar diye,taaki voh usse kuch naa kar sake.

Unhi proofs mein se Rajveer ko Red Box ka exact location ka bhi pataa chal gayaa.Do din baad,jab Rajveer apne cadets ke saath uss location par pahuncha toh unnka saamna Ritu se hua jo ki tab tak Huda ki qaid se bhaag chuki thi.Voh Raj aur usske cadets ko maar kar nuclear triggers ke saath saath unn saare proofs ko bhi waapas haasil karnaa chahthi thi taaki Lala ko usski iss galthi ke baare mein pataa na chale.Par Rajveer ne iss baar bina waqt gavaaye Ritu par goli chalaa di jisske impact se Ritu uss pahaadi location se khaayi mein gir gayi.

Rajveer aur usske cadets ne milkar uss Red Box ko academy pohunchaaya aur saare proofs BC ke saamne rakhe gaye.Jab Army HQ ko ye sab pata chala tab tak Lala Gehlot bhaag chuka tha.Ministry aur Army ne milkar Gehlot ko traitor karaar kar diya aur usske kuch aur politician saathiyon ko bhi giraftaar kiya gaya.Saare proofs milne ki wajah se Capt.Navin Singh Ahluwalia innocent prove ho gaye.Army ne poore Ahluwalia family se maafi maangi aur poore samman aur gaurav ke saath Capt.Naveen Singh Ahluwalia ko SHAHID declare kiya gayaa.Rajveer aur Naina ka KMA aane ka maqsad poora ho gaya.Rajveer ko apni bahaaduri,imaandaari aur desh bhakthi ke liye sammanith karthe hue Capt. se Major promote kiya gaya aur unnke 6 cadets ko KMA ke bravery awards diye gaye.Aur saath hi nuclear triggers KMA se Delhi ke Army HQ shift kar diye gaye.

Lekin inn sab ke beech jo achchaa nahi hua voh tha Lala ka faraar honaa.Army ne apni poori taaqath lagaadi par fir bhi usse dhoond nahi paaye.Lekin Lala ke faraar hone ke ek hafthe baad Rajveer ko ek letter mila tha jo ki Lala Gehlot ne bheja tha.The content of that letter is as follws:

Maj.Rajveer Singh Shekhawath.....

Congratulations!!!!!.......on becoming a Major!!!

Main jaantha hu ki ab tum apni poori koshish karoge mujhe pakadne ki.....par main itni jaldi tumhaare haath nahi aane waala hu Raj.......maine tumhaari zindagi banaayi thi aur tumne badle mein meri zindagi bhar ki mehnath ko mitti mein mila di.....mere saare sapne todh diye.....main iss baat ko kabhi nahi bhulungaa Raj..... kabhi bhi nahi....aaj meri jo haalath hai voh sirf aur sirf tumhaari wajah se hai.....ab meri zindagi ka sirf ek hi maqsadh hai.....tumhaari barbaadi.....main tumhe chain se naahi jeene dungaa aur naahi marne dungaa Rajveer......tumhaare aas-paas khushiyon ko bhatakne bhi nahi dungaa main....ye waada hai mera tumse......tumse jude har ek insaan ko main khatam kar dungaa aur fir finally tumhe bhi.......intezaar karna uss din ka Major Rajveer Singh Shekhawath.......main waapas jaroor aaungaa......sirf tumhaare liye......

LALA GEHLOT.


Rajveer ne uss letter ka zikr academy mein kisis se nahi kiya,apne cadets se bhi nahi.Uss letter ke baare mein sirf vo aur uss ke commanding officer Lt.Gen.Shakthi Chandra hi jaanthe the.Rajveer ko apni khud ki chintha toh kabhi nahi thi par ab usse apne cadets ki chintha hone lagi.Voh nahi chaahtha tha ki usski wajah se unn sab ki zindagi khatre mein pad jaaye. Lala ko pakadne ki Army ki saari koshishein naakaam hi reh gayi kyunki Intelligence ke mutaabik Lala Gehlot desh chod kar bhaag chukaa tha.

Inn sabhi incidents ke dauraan KMA mein kuch aisi baatein bhi hui jinhe iss academy ne kabhi dekha nahi hoga.....kuch aise raaz jinhe chupaane ki poori koshish ki gayi thi.Kuch gine-chune logon ko chod kar ye baatein aur kisi ko pataa nahi thi.Kahi par kuch puraane rishtey toote the toh kahi par kuch naye rishtey jud gaye........jahaa kisine apna bharosa khoya....aur kisine apna pyaar.......wahi kisi ko apne sachche pyaar ka ehsaas ho gaya..........aur saath hi ye bhi ehsaas ho gaya ki koi insaan kisi ke pyaar mein kis kadar deewana ho saktha hai.....kis hadh tak jaa saktha hai apne pyar ki khushi ke liye.Ye saari baatein kahi na kahi Rajveer aur unn 6 cadets ko jod thi hai......kuch iss tarah se ki unnki zindagiyaa aur unnki kismat aapas mein ek doosre se jud jaaye......aur shaayad unnki manzil bhi..!!!!! Inn  saare incidents ke baad unn sab ki zindagiyaan kisina kisi tarah badal gayi thi......achche ke liye ya bure ke liye.....pataa nahi......inhi sab ke beech KMA ke academic training ka ek saal poora ho gayaa......aur saath hi Major Rajveer ke wahaa se jaane ka waqt bhi aa gayaa.....

Aaj KMA mein teen hafton ke baad hulchul hai......logon ke aane jaane ka shor hai. Puraane cadets,jo ki ab seniors hai, academy waapas aakar bohuth khush hai.......aur rahi baat naye cadets ki toh voh abhi bhi apni kismat par yakeen nahi kar paa rahe hai ki unn logon ko actually KMA mein entry mil gayi hai......ye unn sab young cadets ke liye bohuth garv ki baath hai. After all KMA is the present no.1 military training academy in the country!!!!Every body is busy settling down or else finding their friends,with orderlies running around here n there.The classes will be starting after the weekend on monday, still two days left.So,most of the faculty members haven't joined as yet.Hence,there's a sort of indisciplined atmosphere at KMA right now.

Meanwhile in the mess,Suriji is shouting at an orderly at the top of his voice,"Oye khothiya!Kya kar raha hai tu ab tak?Maine tujhse kaha tha ki ye poora mess aadhe ghante mein saaf ho jaani chahiye par tu hai ki abhi tak safaai shuru bhi nahi ki?Aur ab kuch hi ghante hai lunch time ke liye...kya kar kya rahaa hai tu? Mere mess ka poora mess bana ke rakh diya oye tum logon ne,chal jaldi jaldi haath chalaa."

The orderly hurried away to complete the cleaning while he stood there shouting some more instructions at all the orderlies around there.But a voice interrupted him saying,"kyun apna talk-time iss tarah se waste kar rahe hai Suriji aur voh bhi inn missed calls pe?apni charging bachaake rakhiye, aage aapko isski bohuth jaroorath padne waali hai."

Suriji turned around and saw Pooja smiling at him along with Ali.His stern face broke in to a smile on seeing them.

Suriji asked her,"Oye puttar!kaisi hai?tum dono kab aaye?aur itni jaldi kaise?KMA ko miss kar rahe the kya?maine socha tha ki tum sab ko aate aate lunch time ho jaayega?"

"Haa Suriji,ab KMA se aisa connection jud gaya hai ki kya kare ghar par bhi jyaada din mann nahi lag rahaa tha.Mujhe toh ye soch ke bhi darr lagtha hai ki hamaare graduation ke baad humaara kya haal hogaa?"Pooja said sadly.

Pooja ko aise dekh kar Suriji usske paas aaye aur kaha,"Arre puttar!kuch nahi hoga.Graduation ke baad toh tum sab apni apni duties pe lag jaaoge na toh ye sab bhool jaaoge.Tu itna pareshaan mat ho."

Ali bhi Pooja aur Suriji ke paas jaake kehtha hai,"Haa Pooja,Suriji thik keh rahe hai.Aap tension mat leejiye.Aur Suriji, hume lagtha hai hum dono ke alaawa aur koi abhi tak nahi aaya hai.Kya aapne kisi ko dekha hai Yudi,Huda bhai,Aalekh bhai ya fir Naina?"

Suriji said,"Arre nahi Ali puttar,voh log abhi tak nahi aaye hai.Shaayad kuch der mein aajaayenge.Tum dono baitho mai abhi tumhaare liye breakfast laatha hu."

While Suriji went in to get some food for them,Pooja and Ali sat on a nearby table.Pooja looked around the mess and sighed. Seeing her sad Ali asked her,"kya baat hai Pooja,aap udaas kyun lag rahi hai?"

Turning to Ali Pooja said ,"pata hai Ali,iss academy mein aaj dobaara kadam rakhthe hi mujhe kya mehsoos hua?yaha aate hi mujhe apni shahrukh ki kami mehsoos ho rahi hai.Unnka toh ab humse aur iss academy se jaise connection hi toot gaya hai.Hay rabba,Ali,ab hum yaha kaise tik paayenge?voh mucchad Nair toh hamaare signal hi kaat degaa iss saal.Kya hoga humaara?kaun  bachaayega hume uss mucchad se?"she asked him somewhat desperately.

Before Ali could answer her queries,they heard Huda's voice from behind saying,"Oye punjaban!Tu fikar kyun karthi hai?Don't fear when Huda is here.Toh kya hua agar hamaare Capt.Sir nahi hai.Ye jatt toh yahi hai na.Hum sab milkar uss kamine mucchad ki baand bajaadenge,kyun?"

Ali and Pooja saw Huda standing with Yudi at the door of the mess.Ali went up to them and hugged both of them.Then they came to Pooja and hugged her too.Huda asked her,"kyun Pooja,sahi kahaa na maine?"

Pooja smiled at him and nodding her head said,"Haa Huda bilkul thik kahaa tu ne.Hum sab milkar uss mucchad ki baand bajaayenge.Par iss kaam ke liye toh hamaare baaki ke do missed calls ki bhi jaroorat padegi na.Kahaa hai voh dono?Pataa nahi kab tak aayenge?"

Yudi interrupted her saying,"Aalekh ke baare mein toh baat hi mat karna Pooja.Main usse bohuth naaraaz hu.Maine kitna request kiya tha usse ki holidays par mere saath mere ghar chale.Warna main apne parents ki boring baatein sun-sun kar pak jaaunga.Par nahi,usse toh Naina ke saath usske ghar jaana tha.Pata nahi kyun?Kya karne gaya hai wahaa?Aur oopar se ghar gaya toh pata chalaa Neelu bhi ghar pe nahi hai,apne kisi dost se milne Delhi gayi hai.Tum sab log bhi apne apne kaam mein busy the.Dr.Shalini se baat karne ki koshish ki toh voh bhi kisi kaam se Delhi gayi hui thi. Naina ke ghar phone lagaaya toh koi utha hi nahi raha tha.Usske cell par try kiya toh usske Mom ne uthaaya aur kahaa ki voh sab bhi Delhi main hai apne kisi rishthedaar ki shaadi ke liye gaye hai.Pata nahi sab Delhi hi kyun gaye hai?Aur main akela reh gaya apne Mom-Dad ke boring lectures sunne ke liye.Koi nahi tha mujhe bachanewala. Kisi ko meri parwaah hi nahi hai.Aur ye sab hua Aalekh ki ek naa ki wajah se.I'm very angry with him."He slumped down on a chair and started eating the breakfast that Suriji sent for them just then.

Huda sat beside him patting his back and said,"Arre Yudiye,ab gussa thuk bhi de!Dekh tu jaantha hai na apna qaidi phoolan ko kitna maantha hai.Phoolan ne hi usse apne saath ghar chalne ko kahaa tha,toh vo chala gaya.Shaayad phoolan usse apne parents se milwaana chahthi thi,bas issiliye.Ab chod bhi de iss baat ko.Voh dono bhi aate hi honge,ab shanth ho jaa yaar."

"Haa Yudi,ye jatt sahi bol rahaa hai.Tu samajhtha hai na Naina aur qaidi ke connection ko.Aur fir abhi abhi toh Naina ke bhai ko innocent prove kiya gaya hai.Iss waqt usse aur usske Maa-Baba ko Navinji ki kami aur jyaada mehsoos ho rahi hogi.  Aise mein ek Aalekh ka signal hi toh hai jo voh sab achche se catch kar paayenge. Issliye ab ye gussa chod de,"explained Pooja.

Yudi too seemed to realize the importance of Aalekh's presence to Naina and cooled down.All of them sat chatting about their holidays while having their breakfast and waiting for their friends.Suddenly Huda turned towards the door and stood up, stunned. Seeing him speechless,all the others too turned around to see Naina standing at the door and smiling at them.All her friends stood dazed seeing her..........


Edited by esha143 - 13 April 2011 at 4:36am

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wow! an awesome update............so, naina is married to rajveer,i hope. i was waiting for the update..........thanks for the pm.

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Hi Esha

How r u???
Update was really gud..Lot of things were revealed in this part...
Navin has been prooven innocent n Lala has run off to some other country...He is like a wounded animal who will surely take his revenge but I am sure Raj can take care of him..
Pooja was so nostalgic to see KMA..after all this will b their last year n den they have to leave this place..So many memories are attached to it.some gud some bad but still this is the same place which has given dem some really gud friends for a life time..
Yudi was so angry on Alekh coz he left him n went with Naina..But every1 cooled him..Why has every1 gone to Delhi..Raj was dere n den Naina n her family was dere too along with Alekh n Neelu..Something is dere which is not clear...If I am not wrong has Raj married Naina only...??
 
continue soon
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wow the up is very nice  plz dear up soon and thanks for the pm

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