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Posted: 20 April 2010 at 10:52am | IP Logged
@sunshine: Its been ages since I saw MJHT so I wudnt be too good at Mayur stories now... :)

@bhootni: Thanks a lot! Yeah, you're right... dere are hardly any happy endings in life...guess we need to create happiness with what we have.

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Posted: 20 April 2010 at 10:55am | IP Logged
Originally posted by archieeps

Debby! OMGOSH looooong time dear :) Now, let's talk about this wonderful piece of work of yours I came across shall we?

I must say, this one-shot was one of the most captivating and poignant OSs I've read here in IF. Beautifully expressed emotions of the main protagonist coupled with the descriptions of the rain - mindblowing! The literary genius in you has struck once again :D I absolutely looooved it!

Your writing style is so gripping, I felt like I was right there, one step behind Maya as she was narrating the events, right from the beginning - and this is an extremely important talent you possess, which is why I totally admire you and your pieces of work...Please please please do continue writing some more stories like that! or actually, any way you want, I'd still love them :)

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Kainath


Hey Kainath! Its so good to hear from you after ages.... hope you're doing good!

Man, I am glad you liked the rain part. There's something that grips me abt rain and it silently creeps in everything I write. Always, without fail. LOL

I'm glad you could empathize with Maya and feel what she was going through...Plus, praise from you is praise indeed. I havent been able to keep up with your writing regularly but you know how huge a fan of it I am. :D

Thanks so much once again for the lovely comment. Made my evening you did. :)

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Posted: 20 April 2010 at 11:45am | IP Logged
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Originally posted by archieeps

Debby! OMGOSH looooong time dear :) Now, let's talk about this wonderful piece of work of yours I came across shall we?

I must say, this one-shot was one of the most captivating and poignant OSs I've read here in IF. Beautifully expressed emotions of the main protagonist coupled with the descriptions of the rain - mindblowing! The literary genius in you has struck once again :D I absolutely looooved it!

Your writing style is so gripping, I felt like I was right there, one step behind Maya as she was narrating the events, right from the beginning - and this is an extremely important talent you possess, which is why I totally admire you and your pieces of work...Please please please do continue writing some more stories like that! or actually, any way you want, I'd still love them :)

xx

Kainath


<font color="#0000ff">Hey Kainath! Its so good to hear from you after ages.... hope you're doing good!

Man, I am glad you liked the rain part. There's something that grips me abt rain and it silently creeps in everything I write. Always, without fail. LOL

I'm glad you could empathize with Maya and feel what she was going through...Plus, praise from you is praise indeed. I havent been able to keep up with your writing regularly but you know how huge a fan of it I am. :D

Thanks so much once again for the lovely comment. Made my evening you did. :)</font>


Debby Dear, Rain has always been a major symbol in your previous FF too, it's only likely you'd incorporate it into this lovely OS :) And the way you write about it, there's always an air of mystery and something mystifying about it

And not to worry, I'm sure you've been quite busy with life, Lord knows I've been almost swamped with work, but if you do get the time I'd really appreciate if you could check out my new FF I recently started - Melancholic September ;)

xx

Kainath

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Posted: 20 April 2010 at 12:47pm | IP Logged
Debbyyy...

One Word - Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful.
Your work is amazing as always. Debby, I seriously wish I could write half as good as you. This was so exciting and interesting.

I've had a long day revising for finals and this was a refreshing break.

You are exceptionally talented. This is of publishable quality, honestly.

:):):):):)

well doneee.... I loved every word of it. There's no doubt that you are the best writer IF has got.

Cant wait to read more from you. Thanks for the PM.

Also, I hope you are well. Ive been very busy with finals approaching and seleting modules for final year and such. Its hectic.. I will let u know when I update mine. :)

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Posted: 20 April 2010 at 12:50pm | IP Logged
I am gonna read it one more time. And I forgot to mention- you made me fall in love with rain again. :)

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Posted: 21 April 2010 at 10:00pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by archieeps


Debby Dear, Rain has always been a major symbol in your previous FF too, it's only likely you'd incorporate it into this lovely OS :) And the way you write about it, there's always an air of mystery and something mystifying about it

And not to worry, I'm sure you've been quite busy with life, Lord knows I've been almost swamped with work, but if you do get the time I'd really appreciate if you could check out my new FF I recently started - Melancholic September ;)

xx

Kainath


It looked like rain last night but it eventually fizzled out. LOL
You know what, swamped with work is right - its been so hard to find time for anything.
Melancholic September - wow! Amazing title and undoubtedly amazing content it will have, coming from you. I am going to read it today. Wait for my comments! :D

And thanks so much once again! Big smile

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Posted: 21 April 2010 at 10:04pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by Sunita182

Debbyyy...

One Word - Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful.
Your work is amazing as always. Debby, I seriously wish I could write half as good as you. This was so exciting and interesting.

I've had a long day revising for finals and this was a refreshing break.

You are exceptionally talented. This is of publishable quality, honestly.

:):):):):)

well doneee.... I loved every word of it. There's no doubt that you are the best writer IF has got.

Cant wait to read more from you. Thanks for the PM.

Also, I hope you are well. Ive been very busy with finals approaching and seleting modules for final year and such. Its hectic.. I will let u know when I update mine. :)

Smile


Sunita! *hugs*

You have a thing for cheering me up - I have only to see your name in the thread and I smile. You're such a sweetheart... thanks a ton for the continued support and appreciation that you give me. It makes a world of difference.

Awww. All the best for your finals. I am sure you'll rock them all. And after they're done and you have time, I Demand an Update!. I want my refreshing break as well. :)

@Rain - Glad you liked it. I adore rain. Not that that's any secret. It always slides in everything I write. =)


Lots of love. And best of luck.

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The Red Bag and the new Glass Case

Mamma had bought her the bright red bag with silver chains only a week ago. She was in love with it. It held all her books and even the extra long Maths workbook expertly. She had smiled when Mala Ma'am complimented her on it.

"What a delightful bag Debby, where did you get it from?"

"My Mamma got it for me from Lajpat Nagar." She had proudly replied.

Her bag would be spared the cruel Delhi summer for the upcoming two months. It would stay on Dada's old dining chair, where he would include it each day in his afternoon prayers. God, bless my grandchild. Bless her studies. Keep her smiling.

Mamma would arrange all the bag's contents safely on a shelf in her cupboard and take the bag away for washing. Or maybe she wouldn't this time considering it was almost new?

A sudden scream from around her lifted Debby from her thoughts. The bus was here. A crowd of kids rushed from the ice candy stall near the school gate and got into tiffs about getting window seats. Debby had no particular fascination for a window seat. In fact in the blazing May heat, all that the wind offered was more heat.

The bus chugged along the familiar route home. Debby's stop was one of the earlier ones and she stood up from her seat as the bus halted at the traffic signal.

"Happy holidays Debs!" Ankita – her best friend in school – called out.

"Same to you Anki!"

Debby gushed as she saw Mamma at her stop, smiling at her from under her umbrella. The beginning of summer holidays. Few things in life were more delightful than that.



Antenna rushed out from his place beside Ma in the kitchen. Debby giggled as she saw his upright tail and recalled how they had struck upon Antenna for a name. Pappa had been the one to coin that.

"So will it be nimboo paani or Glucon D or Frooti today?" Ma raised an eyebrow from the kitchen.

"No no, first have some aam panna. You have come straight from the hot sun."

Debby grimaced. Who had been the madman who had invented aam panna? If there was one summer drink she loathed with a vengeance, it was this. And Dada had taken up a new mission to make sure she had a glassful each afternoon.

"I am busy Dada. No time for aam." She declared as she kept the red bag in its place. "I have lots to get done!"

"But what? Your summer hols just started and you are through with the homework already…"

Debs winked at Mamma. Homework wasn't an issue. She ardently liked the scrap books, charts and models that they had been asked to make. Mamma and she had spent many laborious hours completing them all. They both took pride in winding up all the tasks before the hols started.

"Okay everyone, I am off." Flourish and flutter and the world's quickest shower later, Debs was out of sight.

Ma shook her head, getting back to the special holiday chicken she was cooking. Dada decided to use the opportunity to arrange an aam panna for himself.

"Well since no one is interested, maybe I will drink it up…"

Mamma was wondering if she should have a quick shower before lunch when noises from overhead distracted her.

"Guess we should go have a look….the shoe shelf her Dad placed there may have toppled over."

Everyone trooped upstairs, climbing the winding staircase to reach the tiny room under the terrace.

The shoe shelf had indeed toppled over. It now stood elegantly on the top stair, obstructing a by passer's way. Craning their necks to locate Debs, they spotted her with her head halfway inside the store cupboard, books sprawled around her. Her blue pajamas were now powder-dusty and her hair ran the threat of going the same way as some more books fell from the top bunk.

"No one bothers to maintain this library." Debby sighed to herself. "If it wasn't for me, cockroaches would be the only readers!"

Mamma giggled as she came out of the corner. "Would you hire new staff for cleaning Madam? I am all yours."

Debs's face lit up. "Really Mamma? Listen then, please arrange all the famous Fives in that heap over there and make sure the Secret Sevens don't tag along… they go in that pile in that corner… when you're done -"

"When you're done," Dada piped in, "we are going out to order a new glass case – your brand new library!"

With a scream that roused every hair in sleeping Antenna's white and brown skin, Debby jumped up and hugged him tight.

Ma scanned the layers of dust and cobwebs that embellished the trio's clothes.

"And when you go glass case hunting, pack in a carton or so of detergent."

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