guys i hope yu have liked the story?!

Thoda time do yaar...haven't yet found the leisure time to sit and read a whole story. Busy with my work....but will read it by this weekend and let you know.

good not bad story

nice story but will take time to digest about someone entering abhi's life otherwise story especially asha's part was good

It's going to take me long to read. As I had mentioned somewhere it's very difficult for me to read multiple long posts. A word doc would have made it a little easier. If I can be honest and you don't feel offended, I want to give a feedback of what I have read so far

 

You kind of lost me close to where Asha was to tell her story. Before that there is too much confusion, there are too many sub-plots with too many people coming in with too many people knowing each other already. I got completely confused there. I was mid-way into the 3rd post and still did not get a hang of the plot.

 

One of the major reasons is this. Maybe its because I am not into chatting or forum posting but I am not able to understand the Hindi dialogs. I have to read each dialog 5-6 times and still not able to get it but I moved on leading to more confusion. If I may ask, are you more comfortable in Hindi or English? It would be nice if you wrote your stories in English, including the dialogs.

 

Edited by prabhanarayan - 30 March 2010 at 11:19pm

Oh my god! How many twists and subplots yaar. according to this story, all the members of Daya's Abhijeet's and Asha's family are working in CID . On the whole I liked your story and you were able to show the unity and brotherhood in the team very well.

There are lot of twists and turns in story. Just read half only. will read it completely on Sunday and tell you.

Ya am not very comfortable in hindi and u are probably used to hindi of those who are good in it or maybe my way of writing hindi was confusing... anyway i will keep this in mind to try and keep the length short and d dialogues less confusing...
and thanx!!