Sia coming to know truth about Ammaji plan

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Snce the CVs again seem to be faltering on the story line i am putting my suggestions of how the show should go.

For 1 week they can show Raghav trying to woo Sia but her avoiding him by giving silly reasons. Also they can have a parallel track of Santosh and Joginder fight  and Ammaji planning her stupid games. Meanwhile Sheela Chachi(the most clever of the ladies in Sanwan Khandan) starts observing Sia avoiding Raghav. Raghav has still not started suspecting why Sia is avoiding him and feels that she is just getting used to him and needs some  time. He also thinks he must apologise to Sia's dad for his bad behaviour.
 
Sheela discusses with Sia if anything is wrong and why she is avoiding Rags. Sia avoids the matter saying there is no difference between her and Rags. After this Sheela again observes Sia avoiding Rags and sending Jhumar to do his errands. Meanwhile Santosh has another fight with Joginder which Raghav overhears it. Sheela decides something must be done about Sia and calls Jhumar aside and tells her something.
 
Rags is planning to go on his morning walk and goes to kitchen to ask Sia to accompany him. Sia refuses and Jhumar asks him whether she can come along since she also wants to go to mandir. Rags says yes and both leave for the walk in the village. Both Jhumar and Rags go to the mandir and Jhumar acts as if she is praying. Rags prays to GOD that Sia forgive him and accept him. Jhumar waits for him to finish praying. Then while going back she asks him whether he remembers the Mela that used to take place once in 5 years at a nearby village which they both frequented as kids. Rags says yes he remembers and remembers how once he saw that all kids were sitting on their dads shoulder and seeing the mela. He had got upset and cried and Joginder had taken him around the mela on his shoulder to pacify him. Rags asks whether Jhumar wants to again to the mela with him. She says yes and he promises her that he will take her to the mela after 2 days. Jhumar comes back and tells Sheela all that had happened excitedly.
 
Rags asks Sia whether she will also join him and his sister but she tries to avoid him.
Rags goes and invites Sheela, Santosh and Chanda and Dheeraj to join him and Jhumar. He also tells Jhumar to convince Sia to join them. The ladies are thrilled but are scared to ask Ammaji. Rags himself goes and ask Ammaji's permission. She gets angry hearing that Sia is going but when he says all the other ladies are also joining she gives permission. She meanwhile calls her body gaurds and tell them something.
 
The next day early morning Sheela, Santosh, Chanda, Sia, Jhumar and Rags leave for Mela. Rags asks the body gaurds not to come as he can take care. All of them reach the Mela at around 11am. Sia meanwhile is acting really wierd and avoiding Rags. All observe it. Jhumar says she wants to go on the wheel. Meanwhile Rags and Sia are left alone by the others in the mela and they all go to other shops. Rags and Sia go to the temple nearby and they do a Puja and tie thread to a sacred tree so that their relationship lasts for ever because the pandit tells them. On the way Rags sees that a crowd has gathered around a vaidya who is selling medicine so that only boys are born. He argues with that vaidya that he is not God to decide what gender baby is in womb and not fool innocent villagers. Vaidya asks him that he is only selling medicine but in some villages like Veerpur girl babies are put in ilk and killed after birth. Rags is upset on hearing this and goes off from there. Sia also sees all this.
 
Rags tries to woo Sia but she says that she wants to go and join the others. Meanwhile Rags has a feeling that someone is following them. He goes behind Sia and they join the others. Sia selects a shawl similar to her color and gives it to Chanda. Jhumar insists on going in the cart wheel. Dheeraj and Jhumar sit on  the cart wheel and Raghav asks Sia to join him. She says she is scared. So he takes Santosh with him on the wheel. He asks Santosh that he had heard Joginder and her fight when he passed their room and whether anything is wrong. Santosh avoids speaking. Raghav tells her that she is more of a mother to him than a bhabhi because of their age difference and she can be open with her son. Here he goes to flash back that he was just 6-7 years when she had come to his house as daughter in law and how she used to take care of him when he was unwell etc.  Santosh starts crying very badly and Rags consoles her and tells her that he knows people speak badly to her because she does not have a child. He futher adds she need not get upset and he will do everything to make her and Joginder happy and that from now on he will not allow anyone in the house or outside to pass comments on her.  
 
Then he takes Chanda and Dheeraj takes Jhumar a second time on the cart wheel. Rags asks Chanda forgiveness for he was unable to stop Avataar's wedding to Rangeeli. The wheel stops and dheeraj calls Sheela for the ride and Rags looks at Sia. Sheela tells Sia that she must go on the ride. Sia joins Rags and they go on the ride. Rags tells her that he is truly sorry if he has hurt her and he truly has changed. He says he understands she needs time to accept him and he is ready to wait for the entire life time for her acceptance. Sia starts crying hearing this and because she is majboor to not tell him anything. Meanwhile santosh who is with Chanda turns back and sees a man about to hit Chanda with a knife and screams. She tries to stop him and gets hurt.
The attacker runs off. The wheel stops and all rush to her. Rags takes her to the car and takes her to the hospital. The wound is not very bad and doctor bandages and tells them to take care.
Meanwhile on the way back Rags is upset and keeps thinking of the incident. He looks at Jhumar who is busy laughing away with Sia and Santosh.
 
He remembers a  incident in his childhood. Rags had been sitting and reading books from school while Jhumar comes and asks him to teach her also. He gives her one of his note book to draw and write and Ammaji walks in and says that girls need not study. She also says that servants should not dream about reading ........ She calls Jhumars mother and tells her to take her inside and not allow Jhumar to distract Rags while he is studying. Rags gets upset but does not say anything. Later on he goes and gives Jhumar some of his notes book and pencils. Rags decides something.
 
Meanwhile they reach the house and all gather around Santosh and ask her how the incident happens. Ammaji also gets upset about the incident. Jhumar, Sia and rags go and leave Santosh in her room and they all see the seperate beds. Sia and Jhumar tell her to call them for anything through the night and they will come and see her now and then and leave. Rags meanwhile goes and meets Joginder(who is going out in night on some work) and asks him to take care of Santosh Bhabhi since she is hurt and will require help. He says that he will complete whatever work Joginder was supposed to do and leaves. Joginder returns to his room and asks Santosh why she had to get hurt and come in between. Santosh is shocked.
 
Meanwhile Sheela is discussing with Chanda and Jhumar that she has shown both Kundali of Sia and Raghav in the mela and there is no problem in their Kundali. She feels Ammaji has played some trick because of which Sia is staying aloof from Rags. She wants to speak to Sia and goes to her room after dinner but Sia is not there. She finds Rags and she speaks to him and says she is observing Sia avoiding him. She asks him not to loose patience and she will speak to Sia and correct this issue.
 
Next day Rags tells his mom he is going to city for some work and he leaves. In the evening he returns and tells Jhumar to call all to the living room as he wants to tell them something. When everyone has gathered he shows some forms and tells them that he went and brought books for the 10th std private for Jhumar since he wants her to be educated. Ammaji stares at him angrily and tells him that she is finding difficult to get Jhumar married and if she is educated where she will get groom etc. Rags pacifies her saying that Jhumar is his responsibility from now and she can trust him. He tells her if Jhumar is educated they will not have to face the humiliation that they faced when her marriage was fixed last time etc. Ammaji says all are marji ke malik and they can do whatever they want. All the bad family leaves. Jhumar is scared of what Ammaji thinks but Rags says he wants her to study and he knows she also likes to study and its never late to follow our heart. Dheeraj is very Happy and Jhumar takes the books and leaves.
 
Rags goes to his room and starts writing something. Sia comes and keeps staring at him with respect in her eyes. Rags looks at her and says he knows what she is thinking. He says that she is thinking how a bad human can change so much but he assures her he is truly changed.He also asks her help to teach Jhumar. Sia says she will get him milk and leaves. Dheeraj meanwhile comes and meets Rags and praises him for his stand. Rags tells that he always wanted to do this for Jhumar but got trapped in personal problens ever since he returned from London. Now he has realised how important his families happiness is above his happiness and he has learnt it from Sia. Dheeraj still remains there is hesitant to speak and Rags understands it and asks him to help him make a study plan for Jhumar so that he passes her 10th this year. Dheeraj promises to do it and leaves.
 
Meanwhile Sheela confronts Sia in the kitchen alone and asks her what is wrong with her. Sia tries to avoid but Sheela continues saying she knows Ammaji must have told her something. She says she showed both her and Rgas Kundali to Pandit in mela and there was no dosh. Sia is shocked and says chachi whether its correct. Sheela says if she has doubt tommorow Sheela and Sia go to Pandit and check again. Sia  agrees. Next day both go to Pandit and Sia asks him whether Rags will die in next 2 months if he and his wife live together. Pandit checks and tells its wrong. Sia still cannot believe and Sheela takes to another Pandit and there also they say the same thing. Sheela tells her to tell correctly on what Ammaji had told her. Sia tells Sheela everything and Sheela chides her for believing Ammaji and ignoring rags for so long. On the way back Sia remembers all the moments when she ignored Rags and starts crying.
 
She goes back to the house and seraches for Rags but comes to know that he has gone out from Jhumar on work. She prepares his fav dish. Rags does not return even after dinner. Sia keeps waiting on the roof top and finally goes to the dinning table and sleeps waiting for him. Rags returns late in the night and sees Sia asleep on the table and wakes her up. She gets his thali and serves him and stands near by. Rags tells her to sit and eat with him. Sia is suprised that he knows she has not eaten and has tears in her eyes. Rags feeds her and then they return to their room. Rags is shocked looking at his room filled with flowers like wedding day. Rags is hesitant but Sia holds his hand and says till today i have stopped you but today i am only coming to you. Sia says she wants a son like rags but Rags cuts her short and says he always wanted a girl like Sia and jhumar with whom he can play like a doll and also wants her to become a doctor and save girls and change the customs in veerpur.
 
From here the story can be set right again
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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Posted: 14 years ago
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OMG!!! I am at a loss for words...😛

Believe me, u should be one of the cv's of this show. The trp's would go skyrocketing. A very well imagined, detailed and logical storyline described by u.👏 And i loved the fact that u put in various issues like jhoomar's education, the Santosh-joginder marriage, etc. But knowing the creatives, they are gonna take months to resolve all these issues!

Hope the cv's take a tip from ur storyline! Simply fabulous.
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Edited by AMRUTHANAG - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Thanks for sharing...very well written dear..I hope CV's take some brain from u n use it in the serial!😆👏
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Its very good Prem but I don't think creatives work like this.

Only if we could have seen a  time bound story

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Posted: 14 years ago
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 I am just speechless ............👏👏 . well analyzed  , thoughtful story...........  hope something like this happen .......😍 u r simply great writer ....👏👏
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Posted: 14 years ago
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WOW! You are great a job beautiful edit written. I love it! 😉😉😉Edited by Raghav-Sia - 14 years ago