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Posted: 12 February 2010 at 10:28pm | IP Logged
Hello Friends, Smile Smile Smile

Aap sab meri entry no. 10 Vaada already padh chuke honge RN FF contest me. Par mere friend Shiropa ne kaha ki mai is ko yahan i mean FF section me bhi post kar doongi jis se ki aap sab ko apne views share karne ka chance mil jaaye aur un logon ko bhi ye OS padhne ka chance mile jo vahan is ko nahi padh paaye the.

So for all of you , here comes my OS Vaada
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Vaada


"Ye hum kahan aaye hain Raj?" she asked.


"Jahan tum humesha se aana chahti thi Naina." He said.


"Par tum ne to humesha………………."she became silent when he placed a finger on her lips.


"Ab kuch nahi kehna hai Naina, bus mai tum aur ye tanhaai. Aaj mai sab kuch bhool k bus kho jaana chahta hoon in waadiyon me in hawaon me tumhare saath."


"Raj……tum aaj ye kaise baatein kar rahe ho?" she was blushing without knowing.


"Kyoun, mai aisa kuch keh nahi sakta kya?" he asked looking straight into her eyes.


"Haan keh sakte ho par aaj tak kabhi tum ne kuch kaha nahi kabhi…"


"Kaise kehta Naina, kab kehta? Kabhi waqt ne to kabhi kismet ne mauka nahi diya tumahre saath aur tumhare pass aane ka. Pata hai mai humesha se sochta tha ki tum se kuch khass baatein kuch khaas anadaz me kahoonga, par kabhi mauka nahi mil paaya. Aaj saari pareshaniyaan kahatm ho chuki hain ab bus mai aur tum humesha k liye ek saath rahenge aur mai vaada karta hoon Naina ki ab koi bhi dukh aur pareshaani nahi aane doonga tumhare zindagi me." He promised her and may be to himself too that he will never let Naina cry because of him or because of any other reason.


"But y Raj?" she asked.


"Because I care for u and I can never see u crying." he said.


"That's what I am asking Raj why?" she asked again.


Before Raj could reply anything it started raining heavily. "Naina, chalo yahan se."


"No I want to enjoy the rain." She said.


"Naina, u will caught cold." He tried to reason.


"So?"


"Please Naina listen me, ye bin mausam ki barsaat hai chalo yahan se." he tried to pull her hand but she denied.


"No Captain I want to wash away all my bad feelings in this, I want to start a fresh life now onwards."


Raj smiled at her childish behavior and said, "Ok mam as u wish."


"Not like that Captain, u must enjoy rain with me." She pulled him.


"No way."


"Why?" she asked.


"Naina if I will be ill so who is going to take care of u."


"No ways, aap jaante hain mai aise nahi mane waali hoon." She winked.


"I know Lft. Ahluwalia, but I know ki kaise manate hain aap ko." And with in a fraction of second he picked her up in his arms and rushed inside.


"Not fair Raj, mujhe neeche utaro." She was behaving like a school kid.


"No way Naina, it's an order." He retorted.


Naina went silent. They were in a small cottage; no one was there at that time. Raj noticed Naina's silence for some moment when he tried to make a fire for both of them.


"Naina…." He called her name but got no response from her.


"Naina…….." he called again when Naina jerked from her chain of thoughts.


She gave a look to Raj meaning what and he understood, "Tumhare kapde bahut geele hain jaao change kar lo."


"But how?" she asked curtly.


Raj noticed the roughness in her voice but being sweet he replied," ye lo," giving a bed sheet to her because in that small room there was not much useable things. He found only sheets to cover themselves and a pair of towel for them.


She went inside the another room which seems like a store room, she was thinking about her and Raj's relationship which has changed a lot in theses years when she joined KMA to now. She never thought that she can get a man like him in her life who will be always ready to stand by her side in her life, whenever she needs him. Thinking and smiling at her destiny she was about to change when she saw something n cried like hell, she rushed outside crying badly.


"Kya hua Naina sab theek to hai na?" Raj asked when she ran to him and hugged him hard.


"Vo……….vo vah….vahan…….",


"Kya hai vahan Naina?"


"Vo……….vahan………." she was unable to speak more so Raj tried to check the store room and tried to know the reason y was she frightened so much.


"Relax Naina, mai dekhta hoon." He tried.


"No, don't go, mujhe dar lag raha hai." She clutched him hard.


"Let me check mam, phir mai dekhoon ki kya hai jo meri cadet, ah…ha Lft. Ko dara raha hai." He teased and went inside in search of Naina's fear but the thing he saw made him laugh like hell and he couldn't control himself and started laughing. "Naina…………ye………..ye tum….." us ki hassi band hi nahi hone ka naam le rahi thi.


Naina got irritated, "Haan haan uda lo mera mazak."


"Naina I can't believe that ur afraid of a cat." Raj abhi bhi hass raha tha Naina k upper. "Naina u r a soldier, agar tum is tarah se ek cat se darti rahogi to socha hai ki log kya kahenge tumhare liye."


"Kehne do jis ko jo kehna hai mujhe aap se baat nahi karni hai jaaiye, humesha mera mazak banate rehte hain." She said making a face.


"Ok baba sorry, extremely sorry ab nahi hoga ok. " he tried to calm Naina.


"I don't care, leave me." She said irritated but agle hi pal jab Naina ki najar Raj pe padi to she was stunned. He was standing bare body and a towel was wrapped around his waist only. She couldn't take her eyes off from his well built muscular body and continuously gazing him. He was looking extremely hot and desirable in that sultry look and Naina was feeling her heart loosing once again on it. Her gaze was so much intense so anyone can understand about her feelings for him.


Raj pehle samajh nahi paaya ki why all of a sudden Naina became quite and she was gazing him like this but soon he realized that in which state he was standing. Actually when Naina cried he had just took out his clothes and wore that towel. He felt embarrassed by her intense gaze and became uncomfortable. He quickly took his wet clothes and was about to enter inside the same store room to wear them when Naina came close to him and said in his ear, "U look hot like this Captain."


Pata nahi kyoun par Raj ko accha laga Naina ka aise kehna, jab Naina ne ehsaas kiya ki us ne kya keh diya to sharmaa k bhaagne hi waali thi vo jab Raj ne us ka haath pakad k jaane se rok liya, "Accha itna hot lagta hoon mai?"


Naina blushed n lowered her gaze, Raj smiled, "Naina, aaj pehli baar tum ne kuch aisa kaha hai mere liye jis ko sun ne ka intezaar kab se tha mujhe. Mai bhi kuch kehna chahta hoon tum se."


Naina looked at his face which showed her pure sincerity," kya?"


"Ek vaada aur ek sach batana chahta hoon tumhe aaj."


Naina still was lost in magic of his eyes which were making her go week.


"Mai ek vaada karta hoon tum se humesha saath nibhane ka. Jab tak is seene me dhadkan hai aur is sharer me jaan hai mai har pal tum se pyaar karoonga aur tumhe itna pyaar doonga ki shayad ye zindagi bhi kam pad jaayegi. Mai itne khushiyaan aur chain bhar doonga tumhari zindagi me ki tum ek bhi pal mujh se door ho k nahi jee sakogi. Itne aadat daal doonga tumhe apni ki kabhi door jaane ki soch bhi nahi paaogi aur itna saath nibhaoonga tumhara ki maut bhi kabhi hume juda nahi kar paayegi."


Naina was looking at his face without blinking her eyes, us ko Raj ki feelings ki deepness pata thi par itna jyada deep ye nahi pata tha.


"Sach ye hai, ki mai tum se bepanah mohhabat karta hoon. Itne mohhabbat jitney shayad kabhi kisi ne nahi ki hogi kisi se. "Raj concluded finally which made Naina's eyes teary and she hugged him instantly.


"Mai bhi aap se bahut pyaar karti hoon Raj." She said closing her eyes on his chest.


"Jaanta hoon Naina. Par aaj tum ne keh k mujhe duniya ki sab se badi khushi de di hai." He said hugging her with all his love in him. After ten minutes Naina tried to came out of his hug but he denied to let her go, "Tum ne abhi kaha tha ki I look hot so I think I should get something for this." He winked her.


"No Raj kuch nahi." She tried to make again herself free but failed.


"Bus ek." He pleaded.


She looked at his mischievous eyes and said," ok," and placed a kiss on his right cheek but he said, "bus?"


"Now what?"


"One more."


She again gave a kiss to his left cheek and one after another his whole face got the shower of kisses. "Bus ab ek hi jagah baaki hai."


She looked at his with questioning look and he indicated towards his lips, "yahan."


"No Raj hatiye aap bahut naughty ho rahe hain." She pushed him but he again pulled her to him n this time without waiting for her approval he placed his lips on hers for a passionate encounter. Soon the heat dwelted b/w their bodies, her hands started craving his body n his hers. They didn't know when this sweet kiss ended with a passionate love making.


Vaada Tumse Hai Vaada, Hooo Vaada Tumse Hai Vaada
Janmon Ka Pyar Ka Dard Ka…..Saathiya Hooo…
Vaada Tumse Hai Vaada, Hooo Vaada Tumse Hai Vaada
Janmon Ka Pyar Ka Dard Ka…..Saathiya Hooo…


After an hour:-

"I promise Naina kabhi bhi tum ko ek pal k liye bhi chod k nahi jaaonga." He said.


"Mai jaane bhi nahi doongi samjhe." She hide her face in his embrace smiling.


"Tum ko kya lagta hai tum ko chod k mai kabhi bhi chain se kahin reh sakta hoon." he smiled.


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Posted: 12 February 2010 at 11:12pm | IP Logged
hi vertika ! Big smile
 
It was one amazing shot !
 
 i really liked the plot and how the things proceed in this...
 
No confusion and messing of feelings...only love!
 
Though both knew that they loved each other , but still has not confessed it....
 
Waise even I'm scared of cats, but I take this opportunity to thank her ! LOL LOL Kahin na kahin wahi madam responsible for making the confession happen...and ofcourse the towel !
 
I really liked those lines...." Ek vaada aur ek sach..."...superb ! Clap
 
And so finally happy ending !!! Big smile
 
once again congrats for the award....you deserved it !!! Big smile

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Posted: 12 February 2010 at 11:39pm | IP Logged
awesome dear,
Mai soch rahi thi ki is fic ko tum yahan post karo aur dekho tum ne meri baat maan li aur kar bhi diya.
Superb, ek baat mujhe is OS ki sab se acchi lagi ki tum ne is me bus Raj n Naina k pyaar aur love acceptence ko hi dikhaya hai na kuch unnecessary liya hai na hi story bekaar me drag ki hai. Dono ek doosre ko chahte hain aur pyaar karte hain but ab jaa k accept kar paaye hain.
Finally ek cat ne vo kaam kar dikhaya jo koi aur nahi kar paaya. Raj ne bhi jabardasti Naina ko barish se bahar liya varna sach me madam bemmar padna chahti thi.

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Posted: 13 February 2010 at 12:09am | IP Logged

Congratulations on winning the award!!!!!!Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap

You deserved it and I had guessed it was written by you!!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap

Raj has brought Naina where she had always wanted to come!!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile

This song from Veer-Zaara would have been apt for this situation!!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile

Lahraati Hui Raahein,
Khole Hue Hain Baanhein
Yeh Hum Aa Gaye Hain Kahaan
Palkon Pe Gahre Halke,
Hai Reshmi Dhundhlake Ke
Yeh Hum Aa Gaye Hain Kahaan... Smile

Woh sab kuch bhool ke kho jaana chahta hai in waadiyon mein Naina ke saath!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed

Abhi tak jo Raj ne nahi kaha tha ab woh sab kuch Raj Naina se kehna chahta hai!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Thumbs Up Thumbs Up Thumbs Up Thumbs Up

Usne apni feelings ko bahut dino tak chupaya hai magar ab koi bandhan nahi hai!!!!!Tongue Tongue Tongue Tongue Smile Smile Smile Smile

Raj Naina ko apne pyaar ka ehsaas karwana chahta hai!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Heart Heart Heart Heart

He promised her that he will never let Naina cry because of him or because of any other reason as he cares for her!!!!!Approve Approve Approve Approve Smile Smile Smile Smile

It started raining heavily making the atmosphere more romantic!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed

Naina bheegna chahti thi and also wanted Raj to enjoy the rain with her!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Dancing Dancing Dancing Dancing

But Raj did not let her and carried her inside a small cottage!!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile

Naina went inside the other room to change but got scared and rushed outside into Raj's arms!!!!!!Tongue Tongue Tongue Tongue Hug Hug Hug Hug

Naina is scared of a cat and Raj is making fun of her!!!!!LOL LOL LOL LOL LOL

True how can the brave Naina be scared of a cat??Tongue Tongue Tongue Tongue

Naina couldn't take her eyes off Raj in that towel and found him too hot to resist!!!!!!Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing Day Dreaming Day Dreaming Day Dreaming Day Dreaming

Raj felt embarrassed by Naina's intense gaze!!!!!Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed

Naina said suddenly that he looks hot like this and Raj liked Naina saying it!!!!!!Wink Wink Wink Wink Wink Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing

This confession was just the trigger that Raj needed to speak out his emotions!!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Thumbs Up Thumbs Up Thumbs Up Thumbs Up

The line Raj said ek vaada aur ek sach batana chahta hoon tumhe aaj was too good!!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap

Raj vaada karta hai Naina ko ke woh Naina ka saath kabhi nahi chodega aur usse hamesha khush rakhega!!!!!Approve Approve Approve Approve Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile

He confessed ke woh Naina se bepanah mohabat karta hai!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed

Naina also said that she loves him very much and Raj is very happy to hear that and hugged her!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Hug Hug Hug Hug

They are both made for each other!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap

Raj is really a gem and Naina is too lucky to have him as her life partner!!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed

Thanks to the cat and of course the towel finally Raj and Naina confessed their love for each other!!!!!Wink Wink Wink Wink LOL LOL LOL LOL LOL LOL

Kyunki agar Naina cat se darr ke nahi chillati toh itna sunehra nazara kaise dekh paati!!!!!!Wink Wink Wink Wink Tongue Tongue Tongue Tongue

Raj is too naughty and is not letting Naina go and said he should get something!!!!!Wink Wink Wink Wink Wink Smile Smile Smile Smile

Naina showered his face with kisses but Raj indicated his lips!!!!!!Tongue Tongue Tongue Tongue Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed

Raj kissed Naina passionately and this sweet kiss ended with a passionate love making!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing

Raj and Naina are soo romantic and passionate!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing Blushing

Finally they became one!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap

The song is very nice and perfect for them!!!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile

God has showered them with His blessings and they are finally together!!!!!Tongue Tongue Tongue Tongue Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile

Raj promised Naina ke woh usse ek pal ke liye bhi chhod ke nahi jayega!!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed

I loved it when Naina said ke woh jaane bhi nahi degi!!!!!Wink Wink Wink Wink Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile

So finally happy ending!!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap

It was beautifully written and very enchanting and romantic!!!!!!Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap


 



Edited by Shaina_b - 02 September 2010 at 4:01pm

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Posted: 13 February 2010 at 12:59am | IP Logged
Wow.....Vertika That was reallllllllllllllllyyyyy lovely!!! I loved it when Raj was confessing his love....I loved the depth of his love...EmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassed

And Naina said suddenly....that he looked hot...Embarrassed...how cute!! Achha hua Naina darr ke chillane lagi....warna wo ek sunehra nazara miss kar deti na....LOLLOLLOL

But I really loved the way u put it Vertika....awesum job!!! It was really very enchanting n romantic as well!!Wink

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Posted: 13 February 2010 at 3:11am | IP Logged
Vertika sweety...congrats for winnng...!!!!

I just loveeedd your OS...!!! It is soo sweet...!!!!

So Raj has not confessed his love to Naina yet...!!!! And now the moment is here..!!!

So Naina is scared of a cat...!!!

Naina ne usko hot kaha...???? ShockedShocked Aur iske badle me raj ne ek vaada  de diya...!!! EmbarrassedEmbarrassed

Lekin Raj ne itniiii naughtiness dikhayi ke they finally became one...!!!!


Keep it up Vertika...!! ClapClapClap


Edited by Dhara_s - 13 February 2010 at 10:17am

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Posted: 13 February 2010 at 3:21am | IP Logged
Hi Verika
How r u??
 
This fiction was really gud..ClapClap
Raj n Naina really compliment each other a lot..Abhi tak jo ankaha tha woh sab kuch Raj Naina se kehna chahta tha..
Usne apni feelings ko bahut dino tak chhupa hai but ab koi bandhan nahin hai.
Raj Naina ko apne pyaar ka ehsaas karana chahta hai..Smile..
baarish ne mausam aur bhi romantic kar diya ..Naina bheegna chahti thi but Raj ne usko aisa nahin karne diya..
Naina was scared  n Raj was making fun of her..LOLLOL even I'm too scared of cats..
 
Naina ko Raj towel mein kitna hot lag raha tha..Bechara Raj bhi uske aise dekhne se uncomfortable ho gaya thaWinkEmbarrassed
This line was too gud.
 
"Ek vaada aur ek sach batana chahta hoon tumhe aaj."
 
Raj is too naughty.But he is really a gem..naina is too lucky to have him as her life -partner.Tongue 
 
God has showered them with his blessings n they r too fortunate to b with the one they loveTongue
 
"A dream to become real
A memory I can feel
I look into her eyes to see
In her arms is where I'll be

The dream, a never fading happiness
Spreads through my heart
Faster and faster it beats
As the memories begin to start

A dream to become real
A memory I can feel
I look into her eyes to see
In her arms is where I'll be

The memories, ones I'll never forget
I'll make sure to go at a slow pace
All I ever wanted was to wake up
I open my eyes to see your face

A dream to become real
A memory I can feel
I look into her eyes to see
In her arms is where I'll be

I take a look into your eyes
The unbearable flame of pain welcomes your rain
It's an amazing feeling
To hold you once again

A dream to become real
A memory I can feel
I look into her eyes to see
In her arms is where I'll be

Your arms like tress, cover over me
Protect me from all the fears
A day, week, month passes
You will always be mine for years

We wait for that time to come
Dreams we make shadow the nightmare to overcome
Memories that will never fade for eternity
Beautiful eyes that are worth every moment to see

A dream to become real
A memory I can feel
I look into her eyes to see
In her arms is where I'll always be."
 
Congratulations for winningClapClap
Bye

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Posted: 13 February 2010 at 10:41pm | IP Logged
simply amazing.......Clap

totally beautiful ...luved d lines of raj der...tooo romantic....Clap

glad d at u posted it here....Smile

thnx...
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