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Posted: 21 February 2010 at 12:59pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by 090909as

Okay i loved those two parts, Poor Nain, anyway i wonder how Nandita's plan will work out. Ayush & Naina, this is getting really interesting.
 
Thanks! :) Yup, let's see how her plan works out, but naina's a smart chick, she won't fall for it so easily Wink Tongue
 
thanks for commenting! :)

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PART 8

 
 
"And so I said no to them. Theek hai yaar, tumhe kaam nahi karwana toh humaare paas bhi faaltu time nahi hai. It's supposed to be a goddamned business deal, and they're behaving like we're trying to buy aloo-pyaaz here. First they asked us to cut down the price of the project by almost 40 %, and now they don't want to give us any advance payment. Tell you what, they can go to hell", Mom fumed as she paced the room.

 

"Did the right thing. The last thing we want them to know is that we're desperate. If you let a shark smell blood, then you're doomed", I replied.

 

She was talking about a client who had approached us last week. They wanted comprehensive GIS software made which would be used in the mining Industry, to locate the prospective ores etc. Mom told me that even though we could do it, it was a pretty complicated project. After calculating the approximate price of the contract, we sent them a financial and technical proposal, clearly stating that we would require some amount of advance to get the project started. Although they liked the technical part, they felt that the quoted price was too high. We re-evaluated and cut down the price by 40 %, and sent it back to them. After taking their sweet time to 'consider' the proposal, they replied after 2 weeks stating that they wouldn't be able to give us any advance.

 

Tension was already running high with the already low funds, expenses were being incurred, outstanding salaries continued to pile up, and the receivable payments were nowhere in sight. And yet, we could not show that we were desperate for money. Because this very mistake had cost us a lot of money (that could have been saved) in the past. Vulnerability. Desperation. Need. Want. These emotions (if expressed) can only cause you damage in the corporate world. Infact, any emotion can cause you damage in the corporate world. Because boss, there is no room for emotions in business. Only money.

 

Mom stopped pacing and sat down on the bed. When was the last time I had seen her smiling? Maybe last month. This month has been a ride through hell for her. I hugged her and she hugged me back. We sat like that for a while before she said, "How's school?"

 

I let go of her and said, "That's not important. What's important is that you need to be fed, bathed and tucked into bed. School can be discussed later"

 

She gave me a 'I'm-your-mom-you're-not-my-mom' look. But I had seen it too many times to react. Infact, it only strengthened my 'Shut-up-and-listen-to-your-daughter' attitude at times. I dragged her to the dining table and made her sit down. The least I can do is make sure she eats well. Trying to be cool, I wore the big chef's hat and tied the apron around my waist.

 

"Presenting...The craptastic chef - Nainaaaaaaa Sharma Aggrawal!", I exclaimed in an exaggerated voice. To make things even more filmy, I turned on the radio and tuned into the channel that usually played old songs at this time. I turned up the volume and an old hindi song burst through the speakers.

 

Hey Jai Jai Shiv Shankar Kaanta Lage Na Kankar

Ke Pyala Tere Naam Ka Piya

 

Ho O O Gir Jaoongi Main Mar Jaoongi

Jo Tune Mujhe Thaam Na Liya

O Sau Rabadi

I started dancing around the kitchen like a maniac. While the food was being warmed up in the microwave, I was trying out various silly antics infront of mom to lighten her mood. As the song came to an end, her face was adorned with a smile. And I knew that everything was going to be okay.

 

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"So where do we start from?" I asked. We, Nandita, Vivek, Ayush and me, were at Nandita's place. We had decided to meet outside school to get the project started because all of us knew that school was the last place to get anything 'done'.

 

"Hmm I did a little research and came up with this. Wikipedia was, obviously, a great help. But there is information from other sources aswell", Vivek said while handing the file to me. He continued, "As of now, we need to decide as to how many mathematicians we're going to include. I say we include only Indian mathematicians. It sort of gives the impression that we're trying to highlight India's greatness. What say?"

 

And then Ayush and I said something at the same time. I said, "I agree", and he said, "I disagree"

 

I looked at him in a 'what-the-hell' kind of way and said, "Why not ? He has a point. Besides, the world owes alot to India for it's contribution to mathematics. I think we should focus on India"

 

He sighed and said, "Yeah okay, India's great, but millions of presentations solely based on Indian scientists, mathematicians, astrologers etc etc have already been made in the past. I think we should increase our scope by including mathematicians from all over the world. I mean, when was the last time someone included an african mathematician?"

 

Nandita chipped in and said, "He's right. It's the age of globalization anyway", and before she could even complete her sentence, she realized what she had just said had no connection to the discussion, whatsoever.

 

"Yeah, right. What has globalization got to do with any of this ?", replied Vivek. I looked at him and said, "Yup. I don't see the connection"

 

Ayush spoke up, again, "As a matter of fact, I do. Everything in today's world, right from the food we eat to the airplanes we travel in, have some or the other international shade. The number of multi-cuisine restaurants in Delhi is equivalent to the number of Punjabi dhabas. Our clothes are being mixed and matched every season to cover every country's apparel. Hindi Cinema is opening up to hollywood and vice versa. Multinational companies are trading with India. Our cars are german, clothers are french, gadgets are chinese etc"

 

"Yeah Ayush, we know what globalization is", I interrupted as Vivek and I chuckled.

 

He didn't seem to pay attention to the interruption as he continued, "So my point is - what's wrong in acknowledging International mathematicians?"

 

"Well the point is that amidst the blitz to cope up with 'globalization', I think we've forgotten India's indivisual development along the way. I think blending our culture with other cultures is a wonderful thing, but what's going wrong is that in the process, we've started demeaning our own culture. Given our background as slaves, it is in our genes to always uphold the western culture higher than our own. Right from cricket to english, both our given more importance than hockey and hindi", I said, now completely in my 'nerd' persona.

 

And in no time, the project was completely forgotten. Ayush and I were now absorbed in a heated argument about 'US sucks or not', with me taking the 'It sucks' stand, and him taking the 'It doesn't' stand. How we went from Globalization to this topic is unknown, but it seemed to happen spontaneously without either of us realizing it. Nandita and Vivek were reduced to being the audience witness to this verbal war. In the middle, they kept saying "I agree", and that's about it. Vivek was with me and Nandita was with Ayush. It seemed like one of those episodes of "Seedhi Baat" that aired on Aaj Tak.

 

Our debate was brought to a halt when Nandita's mom knocked on the door and said, "You guys need to keep it low. I can't even hear what my friend is saying over the phone"

 

Vivek and Nandita burst into laughter and Ayush and I stared at eachother sheepishly. Finally, we both seemed to agree on one thing - If Vivek and Nandita didn't stop laughing now, we would pounce on them and sew their lips permanently.

 
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Long part :P

Blog link: http://deviant-chronicles.blogspot.com/2010/02/part-8.html

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Posted: 22 February 2010 at 3:22am | IP Logged
both the parts were very well written...........
nandita is a great soul , trying to hook up naina with ayush LOL
her matter-of-fact -way of trying to make naina ayush ki gf was really funny and i think it stumped out naina  as wellClapClap
 
really liked naina 's responsible side trying to cheer her mom up , with her antics......
 
naina and ayush are as such always ek dusre ke anti......
 
 
greatly writtenClapClap

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Posted: 22 February 2010 at 3:43am | IP Logged
ClapI liked Naina's attitude, and her antics to cheer her mother up...Finacial problems seem to be on the riseUnhappy hoing something would solve them soon!

Ayush and Naina's banter was awesome...Waiting for more!

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Posted: 22 February 2010 at 6:06am | IP Logged
I love the relationship she and her mother share, it's so bonding and beauitful, but i have to say Nandita's plan is working out pretty badly.. They agreed when they weren't in the same group, and now that they are they disagree over everything! I think it's fun! I love your story, and do update soon.

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Posted: 22 February 2010 at 2:28pm | IP Logged
Hey Aparajita, nice update :) :) :) Evoked mixed feelings. It was sweet, touching, sad, fun and hilarious at the same time. It's amazing how you juggle through these different instances and unify them so beautifully. The nice mix you've got there makes your story very real and life-like. 

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Posted: 24 February 2010 at 10:59pm | IP Logged
hello aparajita.....
wonderful story , hats off to u......
i loved the way u shaped up naina 's persona.......she is a real character!!!! and lovd the way u potrayed whole of the atmosphere of the school.......it rocked........
and teachers shuffling up the students.... to make girls sit with boys......it used to happen in our skool too...........................
loved nandita tooo.....a real friend and ayush naina part too is interesting......

ur story is very fresh ........update soon

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Posted: 25 February 2010 at 2:20am | IP Logged
Originally posted by pinkorblack

both the parts were very well written...........
nandita is a great soul , trying to hook up naina with ayush LOL
her matter-of-fact -way of trying to make naina ayush ki gf was really funny and i think it stumped out naina  as wellClapClap
 
really liked naina 's responsible side trying to cheer her mom up , with her antics......
 
naina and ayush are as such always ek dusre ke anti......
 
 
greatly writtenClapClap
 
Hey! Thanks a ton! Nandita is a really great soul, she's fun-loving, sweet and caring :) lol let's see if she succeeds in her plan to bring naina and ayush together Big smile
 
yeah naina's relationship with her mom is one of the most important aspects of the story :)
 
naina and ayush...kab tak ek doosre ke anti rahenge ? Wink

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