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Posted: 14 February 2010 at 2:17am | IP Logged
Originally posted by _.serendipity._

Hey, cool update! Big smile I'm starting to really like this character! I love her sense of humour, because it's pretty obvious she's "got a brain." And I find her outlook on life very endearing. It's not very common in literature and makes for a very refreshing read. I also like your story because you re-think and think beyond cliches, which is not as easy as it may seem. So, well done for that!! Clap 

Oh and I loved the part with the mother. Reminded of my days at secondary school. I was always getting into trouble, and my dad would laugh, and my mum would try to be strict but it was so obvious that she was struggling not to smile Tongue
 
Thankyou so much! I'm glad you find Naina's character endearing. I'm trying to keep it as realistic as possible. Many more shades about her character will be revealed in the later parts :)

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Posted: 14 February 2010 at 2:18am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Prasanthi

Hey!!
 
Aparajitha. that was a cool one. This one reminds me so much of my own school days. Glad to read it. Thanks for the pm!
 
Thanks Prasanthi! Big smile

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Posted: 14 February 2010 at 2:20am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Pooj@

I liked the part very much...

There is a hint of financial problems at the start, but well, we are left in a mystery. Hoping that it will be revealed soon. I like Naina's sense of humor,(esp the comment about balika vadhu..I share that outlook!)


 
Yes, that will be unfolded in the later parts :) Glad to know that you like her sense of humour :) Thanks for commenting!

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Posted: 14 February 2010 at 10:33am | IP Logged
PART 6
 
 
As soon as the first period got over, everyone shuffled back to their original seats. Nandita came and sat beside me. I was in the process of finishing a few notes when she said, "You're quite enjoying yourself with Ayush"


Something odd about her tone struck me, but I waved it off and said, "What do you mean ?"


She suddenly became excited (No, not in the typical girly way), and snapped her fingers infront me, "Hey, hey look at me", I sighed and reluctantly looked towards her. She continued, "Look, you're a bloody loner.." I started to protest but she cut me off, "Shut up. You're a loner, you have no friend except of me. Which, sweetheart, is not healthy. I have friends too. They're not as close as you are, but there are a few. Oh and not to mention, I had an almost-boyfriend last year too" I rolled my eyes as that as she continued, "But YOU are something else man. No friends, no boyfriends. You're an alien."

She waited for my response, but getting none, she mellowed down and bit and said, "Maybe you can be friends with this Ayush yaar", before she could say anything else, I raised my palms up and said, "No no no. I know where you're going with this. It's not gonna work. Drop it. Forget it. Screw it, okay ?"


She sighed and shook her head, I knew that she was probably annoyed at my 'anti-social' behaviour, but I she needs to understand how difficult it is for me to let someone in my boundaries. I let her in, because over the time I realized that she's someone I can identify with, but not anyone. Yes, I laughed a bit with Ayush but that doesn't imply that we're on the verge of becoming friends. And knowing Nandita, I'm pretty sure she would have already linked us in her mind. This is something that I really don't like about her. It makes her seem like one of those typical teens.


Rest of the classes dragged. With Nandita annoyed at me, there was hardly any talking. At one point of time I was on the verge of apologizing, but my ego came in the middle and I dropped the idea. The last class got over and the bell rang. Nandita picked up her bag and walked out of the class without saying 'Bye' to me. I will have to sort this out with her, later. I slowly picked my bag up and walked out of the class.

 


"No mom, I had lunch, seriously", I spoke into the phone. Mom can be such a mom at times. She calls me up everyday at exactly 2:40 pm to know whether I had lunch or not. She's made me so independent, and yet she gets worked up even if I don't have lunch on time. I finally hear silence which means that she has believed me. "Okay", she said, and hung up.

I leaned back in my chair and looked up at the computer desktop. There really was nothing much to do today, except homework ofcourse. But I'm going to procrastinate. For now, I want to do something creative. Instantly, I grabbed hold of my mouse and hovered over the 'Sony Vegas' icon. Video Editing is something that I learnt last year during the holidays before board exams. I love editing, It really brings out the creative side of me.


I hardly watch TV, but I really enjoy watching 'Bones' and 'Hustle', that air on Star World and BBC Entertainment respectively. I had downloaded a few clips last month, and without further ado, I imported 'Hustle' clips into the project and began working my mind.



The bell rang at 9:30 pm. I walked upto the main door and opened it. Mom was home. As usual, I hugged her and fetched her a glass of water. She kept her things (Neatly - she's a cleanliness freak) in their respective places and went inside the washroom. We're going to rant and whine till 10:30 pm, I'm sure about that. We always sit down at the end of the day and whine.


As predicted, we did talk till 10:30. My mom's an entrepreneur, she has her own software company. But 'enterpreneurship' and 'women' do not go in the same sentence in India. It's been a tough ride for her, it still is. I'm trying my best to support her in every which way possible. Infact, I'm so involved with the activities in the firm that she takes my advice alot of times before venturing into something new.

We dissected every aspect of the day's activities before having dinner. There's a little financial crisis going on. Payments are delayed, and we don't have enough projects in hand to keep the cycle running smoothly. But we are the kind of people who have learnt how to live on hope. Each day begins with hope and ends with hope.


"I've mailed a few venture capitalists, let's see if they respond soon", I told her as I put the dishes in the wash basin. She nodded and said, "That's good. Forward me the mail if they reply. I'll follow it up"


"Okay, I'll do that"
 



At exactly 11:00 pm, My mom's eyelids start getting droopy. Her entire system has programmed itself in such a way that her body reacts to a certain function at the right time. I know I'm making her sound like a robot, but she's not. She's just a disciplined person who is dead tired by the end of the day.




Nandita is still miffed with me. I sighed and sat down next to her.


"Listen, will you just let that go ?", I asked, with a hint of impatience in my voice. She didn't reply. God, this girl can be such a pain. I shook my head and started speaking, "Nandu, you know it's not easy for me to just make friends. I'm a little anti-social and you know it, so why push me ? Ayush is nice but we're not even close to becoming -", I couldn't complete the rest of the sentence as the teacher entered.


I decided to save the talking for some other time. If we're caught by our maths teacher, then we're screwed. We opened our books and waited for her to start teaching. Our maths teacher is another item. When she speaks, it seems as though someone has attached a mike to her kurta. Her voice literally booms. Students avoid sitting on the front bench in her class. They might get deaf.


She wears those huge, old, 60's kinda glasses. You know, the type that look bigger than your face. And she's huge. Gorilla type huge.


"You all have to submit a group project to me by the end of next month. It carries 10 marks", she said as she stood infront of the class, "You can make your own groups, with 4 students in each group. We have a double period so you can decide and let me know now"

Everyone started chattering about who was going to be in whose group. It was obvious that Nandita and me would be together, but we needed 2 more people. She called one of her guy-friends named Vivek to join the group. Everyone else seemed to have formed their groups so we decided that we'll have to make do with 3 people.


"Okay, now I want each person from one group to say the names of all members of your group. I need to note it down", said our teacher.

"Ma'am, we just have 3 people in our group. Is that okay ?", enquired Nandita.

"Hmm", our teacher looked around the room and spotted a group that had 5 members, "Surbhi, you have 5 members in your group. Maybe one of you all can join Nandita's", she said.


Nandita's next line took me by surprise. No, 'shock' would be the better word as she did it deliberately. "Ayush, why don't you join us ?". My head jerked towards her, "What ?", I whispered. She simply gave me a smirk and winked at me.
 
 


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Posted: 14 February 2010 at 11:05am | IP Logged
Ummm.... friends are always there for some really good times and do pop-up at some really odd times :P. Anyway, enjoyed reading the part. You are pretty quick dear.

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Posted: 15 February 2010 at 8:34am | IP Logged
Aha, me likes the Ayush angle!! Wink And I'm continuing to like Naina more and more, the more I read. I guess it's because I'm a bit of a loner myself, although maybe of a different kind. I don't talk that much to anyone, and far too often avoid meeting the few friends that I have, to go on a solitary walk and talk to squirrels. Anyway, nice update, Aparajita!! And I love the fact that you update so frequently! Eeeeeeeeeagerly looking forward to more Big smile

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Posted: 15 February 2010 at 9:02am | IP Logged
The best part is the quick updates, of course :P Love the story, pretty much usual :)..I liked the part about the mother, it also explained the financial crises... Naina is really cool character..However, there is an abrupt change of scene - where she comes down and sits next to Nandita...Nandita, Naina and Ayush in the same project! Whhooopiie! Expecting fireworks and more!
Update soon? :)

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Posted: 15 February 2010 at 10:25am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Prasanthi

Ummm.... friends are always there for some really good times and do pop-up at some really odd times :P. Anyway, enjoyed reading the part. You are pretty quick dear.
 
That's quite true hah Wink Thanks Prasanthi! :) Yup, I update pretty quickly (Totally unlike Neeta, who I've heard, moves at a snail's pace LOL)
 
Thanks again! :)

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