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Posted: 11 February 2010 at 12:34pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by Pooj@

Brilliant work!

Parts are quite short, but that is okay, since you have first posted this on the blog. The character relates at some point or other (truth be told, I hate my college i.e. 11th 12th classes :) ) The story is well written, but we have absolutely no idea of who the narrator, Naina is, apart from the fact that she attends school, and hates it. I hope we will know more about her as the story progresses. The coarse humor provokes a grin, and it is in the flow of the story, so i really liked that.

Waiting for more!

 


 
Hey! I'll try to make the parts longer Smile I'm glad you can relate to the character, because I'm trying my level best to keep it as realistic as possible. We will get to know more about Naina as the story unfolds. Thanks again! Big smile

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Posted: 11 February 2010 at 12:37pm | IP Logged
**Posted on behalf of Aparajita, because she can't post links here :) lol, we're signing in and out of our accounts :P
 
 
PART 5
 
"Are bhaiyya, tez chalao na! ye koi bailgaadi hai kya ?", I holler at the autowala. I am on my way to the market to buy some stuff for the house. And as always, I am running on a pretty tight schedule. This goddamned autowala is moving at a snail's pace. The traffic isn't as thick as it generally is at this time, and yet he's taking his sweet time to hit that blasted accelerator.


"Madam ji, tez hi to chala rahe hain, aur kitna tez chalaoon ?", he replied in a nonchalant way in a tone that implied I-don't-give-a-shit.


I frown and say, "Haan tum toh humein uda kar le jaa rahe ho na ? Ab tez chalao, mujhe late ho raha hai"


He mumbles something to himself and doesn't reply. I cross my arms and look outside. Should have taken the car, but then remembered that there was no petrol in it. And considering how we're counting every penny these days, I didn't have 300 bucks for petrol at this moment. Sighing, I shake my head and continue to look outside.

When we finally reach the market, I quickly hop out and pay the autowala. Running inside the market, I fish out the 'To-do list' from my jhola and quickly read through it. Time to get into action..


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My mom is really a fun person to be with provided that she's in a good mood. She's watching some old english film on TV and I'm sitting with her, hoping that she'd change the channel soon. It's sunday, so she doesn't have to work. I'm not demanding because today is the only day she gets time to relax. During the weekdays, she's just too tired to turn the television on and watch some saas-bahu saga. Plus, she's not the one to watch that crap. (Something that I'm immensely proud of. We tried watching Balika Vadhu once, but ended up in splits)
 

"Mom, what's this film about ? We've been sitting here since the past 1 hour but nothing's really gone into my head", I remark.
 

"It's classic! How can you not like it ? To hell and back is one of the finest films made on World War II", she replies in an excited voice.
 

I roll my eyes and sigh. Generation gap. Jeez.
 

"School's not been treating me well. Got stuck with Ms. Grumpy for not completing physics assignment", I say, casually.
 

She nods, "I'm proud of you"
 

I can't help but smile at her 'Let-school-go-to-hell' attitude. I can't express in words how relieving it is to know that atleast my mom doesn't pressurize me.
 

"Yeah, but I'm screwed"
 

"You're getting there, sweetheart"
 

I grin and shake my head. Mustering up my will power, I turn my head towards the TV screen again.


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"What the...??", before I can help myself, these words come out of my mouth. We're having a class teacher's period today, which means we will have to put up with our new partners for another 1 hour. Although I don't mind Ayush, I'm kind of missing having Nandita by my side.
 

I scowl a little and flop down into my seat. And yet again, we exchange 'Hi's' and 'Hellos'. He goes back to his math homework, which reminds me, I need to get that done too. I take out my register and take a quick glance at what Ayush is copying from.
 

"Do you mind if I share that..um, Varun's register ?", I ask. He shrugs in approval and continues doing his work. Varun is the geek of our class, and since the release of 3 Idiots, he's been labelled as 'Silencer'. I feel that's an insult to Chatur's character, or perhaps I'm being biased because I loved that guy.
 

I silently get to work. There are about 10 sums that need to be done. I haven't even done one. I hate this. I don't see the point in doing homework. If you can't 'educate' us enough in 6 hours, then I don't see how another hour at home will make things any better.
 

When 15 minutes were left for the bell to ring, I let out a breath and close the register. Glancing sideways, I see that Ayush is still writing. Wow I like his speed, I think to myself. But it doesn't take long for him to close his own register.
 

"What's the first class ?", he asked.
 

"Physics"
 

"Darn. I hate that woman. She makes physics so hard to understand", he replies. And the floodgates open. In no time, we're dissing Ms. Grumpy in whichever way possible. Right from cheap jokes to hindi gaalis, we're indulging in hardcore bitching. It seriously feels good, because I love bitching about that woman. Any time. Any day.
 

The bell rings and we reluctantly stop laughing like maniacs. Trying my level best to wipe the grin off my face, I purse my lips together and stand up as she walked into the class.
 
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Posted: 11 February 2010 at 12:43pm | IP Logged
thanks neeta :) I'll send out the pms in a while :)

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Posted: 12 February 2010 at 3:01am | IP Logged
I like the ending, and i love that part with her mom, especially when you said we tried watching Balika Vadhu but ended up in spilts, Glad to know there is someone else who thinks that the show is hilarious, Update soon.

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Posted: 12 February 2010 at 4:27am | IP Logged

Hey, cool update! Big smile I'm starting to really like this character! I love her sense of humour, because it's pretty obvious she's "got a brain." And I find her outlook on life very endearing. It's not very common in literature and makes for a very refreshing read. I also like your story because you re-think and think beyond cliches, which is not as easy as it may seem. So, well done for that!! Clap 

Oh and I loved the part with the mother. Reminded of my days at secondary school. I was always getting into trouble, and my dad would laugh, and my mum would try to be strict but it was so obvious that she was struggling not to smile Tongue


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Posted: 12 February 2010 at 4:59am | IP Logged
Hey!!
 
Aparajitha. that was a cool one. This one reminds me so much of my own school days. Glad to read it. Thanks for the pm!

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Posted: 12 February 2010 at 6:16am | IP Logged
I liked the part very much...

There is a hint of financial problems at the start, but well, we are left in a mystery. Hoping that it will be revealed soon. I like Naina's sense of humor,(esp the comment about balika vadhu..I share that outlook!)


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Posted: 14 February 2010 at 2:16am | IP Logged
Originally posted by 090909as

I like the ending, and i love that part with her mom, especially when you said we tried watching Balika Vadhu but ended up in spilts, Glad to know there is someone else who thinks that the show is hilarious, Update soon.
 
Thanks! haha yeah, that actually happened :P We tried watching Balika Vadhu, and started laughing LOL

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