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Posted: 10 February 2010 at 5:10am | IP Logged
Originally posted by 090909as

Cool, nice story, although you have only posted three parts, but i must say you write well, and i guess she's the normal, average teenage girl, i guess i find it.. amazing, awe-insipiring , how you can manage to write something normal like that into not a boring manner, usually when people try to write the whole ordianary normal beginning it's quite boring, but you don't it greatly, hats off!
 
Thankyou so much! I'm really glad you think that way :)) Looking forward to your comments in future :D
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Posted: 10 February 2010 at 5:13am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Prasanthi

Hey Aparajita!
 
Good to see you writing here. Lizi, thanks for the pm hun!
 
Coming to your writing, well all I can say for now is the flow is good and slow n steady. The character Naina is so relatable, almost every one of us do relate her in some way or other. RIght? All said and done, would love to read more as the parts come along. Count me in for further reads.
 
 
 
Hey Prasanthi :) yes, i think the best part abt this character is that it's relatable :D thanks for the compliment!! Big smile
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PART 4
 
 
The day was going by fine until our class teacher, who is also our Physics teacher, came inside. I love physics, really, I do, but this woman makes it hard to sustain that love. In the simplest words, she sucks.


She walked inside carrying the same demeanor of anger, like always. Why she was perennially pissed is still a mystery for all of us, but for now, we have to put up with her. I sweetly call her 'Angry old woman'. She is a short woman, with plump cheeks and a medium built. She has short legs, so when she walks it looks as though a rabbit is hopping from one place to the other.


She sits down and lightly dumps her hand bag and register on the table. Putting on her glasses, she quickly opens the attendance register and starts calling out names. But ofcourse, as always, no one's really interested in listening. This infuriates the already miffed teacher and she starts yelling at the top of her voice, "Enough is enough class! Stop talking now or else I'll go call the principal!"


Her outburst calms the beasts down a bit. Everyone qiuets down, fearing that she might rip her hair apart or god forbid, the students'. She takes a deep breath and starts calling out names again.


When the attendance got over, I started taking out my physics book and register, but before I could keep them on my desk, our teacher said, "I'm going to be changing your seats today..", and this statement invokes a unananimous reaction of discontent from the entire class.


"Shit!"


"****"


"Kya yaar...not again!"


As if she had plugged cotton balls into her ears, she paid no heed to the complaints and started shuffling all of us. Nandita made a face when she was made to get up and sit next to a guy named Abhishek. I gave her a 'thumbs up' sign and a smirk as she walked away, frowning at me.


Thankfully, I wasn't made to get up. Instead, someone named Ayush was asked to sit beside me. I don't understand this school. They discourage relationships between girls and boys, and yet thrust the whole idea of 'boys-and-girls-should-mingle-since-we're-a-coed-school" down our throats. It's like saying that you want a baby but you don't want to have sex because apparently it's 'not right'.


Anyway, I say 'Hi' and he says 'Hi' and that's the end of it. Our classes continue, and there really is no interaction between us. However, I do know that all this drama is only meant for today. Tomorrow, everyone will simply go back to their preferred seats. They'll simply change seats during physics class, and that's pretty much about it.


Our last class, i.e economics, turned out to be a substitution class with none other than our class teacher, Ms. Grumpy. So we had no choice but to stay put with our new partners. Thank god she didn't start teaching physics. By the end of the day, my brain cell are really dead.


We read our newspapers instead. Suddenly I hear a chuckle from beside me. I look at Ayush and he grins at me while pointing towards an article that apparently made him laugh. I look at the article, it's basically about how a bunch of rabid fangirls chased a guy when he said that he didn't like Zac Efron, the guy from High School Musical.


"You know, no offense, but I have to say that girls can be extremely dumb at times", he said in an amused voice. I shrug and nod, "They're always dumb"


He stares at me with his eyes wide and an eyebrow arched, "What ?" A little pause. "You agree that girls are dumb ?"

"Yup. They are"

He grins again, "And does that apply to you aswell ?"


"Nope"


"And why is that ?"


"Because I've got a brain", I said, pointing towards my head, "And I use it"


He nods, that stupid grin still plastered on his face. I don't understand why it is so difficult for men to accept that not all girls are alike. Bloody losers. He continues, "You have to be the first one to accept the fact that girls are dumb"

"Teenage girls, to be precise. Actually, what I like about men is that they never let their heart overpower their brain. Whether it is a relationship or a financial matter, they always use the thing called brain. Unfortunately the same cannot be said for girls", I finish with a straight face.


I'm guessing he's over the shock by now, as the grin has been wiped off his face and has been replaced by a smile, "Yeah, and when we say the same thing to other girls, they say we're being chauvinistic"


And before we know it, we're both laughing at that statement. It's rather wierd actually, because I've never really thought that I could laugh with a guy from my class. When we're done laughing, I glance at my watch to check the time. The bell rings even before I can look up. Suddenly, the class springs to life. Everyone starts hustling around and there's alot of commotion. I get up, stuff my things into my bag, swing it on my back, say bye to Ayush and start walking towards Nandita.
 
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Direct link to blog: deviant-chronicles.blogspot.com/2010/02/part-4.html (Please comment there aswell! Big smile)





Edited by scratches-head - 10 February 2010 at 5:42am

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Posted: 10 February 2010 at 5:28am | IP Logged
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ba back at night.
 
EDIT:
 
Hey Aparajita!
 
This part is a little fiunny too. She enjoying the small chat with her benchmate is really good and accepting the fact that teenage girls are dumb unanimously is so enjoyable. Do continue soon.


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Posted: 10 February 2010 at 5:35am | IP Logged
Omg, I totally LOVE this story!! I was just surfing around randomly and came accross it, and I'm so glad I did!
It's brilliantly written Star  I really felt drawn into the world of the story, and am soooooooo looking forward to reading more! Big smile Big smile Big smile
Excellent work, really! Clap
Do PM me when you update.

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Posted: 10 February 2010 at 8:22pm | IP Logged
Brilliant work!

Parts are quite short, but that is okay, since you have first posted this on the blog. The character relates at some point or other (truth be told, I hate my college i.e. 11th 12th classes :) ) The story is well written, but we have absolutely no idea of who the narrator, Naina is, apart from the fact that she attends school, and hates it. I hope we will know more about her as the story progresses. The coarse humor provokes a grin, and it is in the flow of the story, so i really liked that.

Waiting for more!

 


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Posted: 11 February 2010 at 12:31pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by Prasanthi

reserved
 
ba back at night.
 
EDIT:
 
Hey Aparajita!
 
This part is a little fiunny too. She enjoying the small chat with her benchmate is really good and accepting the fact that teenage girls are dumb unanimously is so enjoyable. Do continue soon.
 
Hey Prasanthi! :) Thanks for commenting! Big smile
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Posted: 11 February 2010 at 12:32pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by _.serendipity._

Omg, I totally LOVE this story!! I was just surfing around randomly and came accross it, and I'm so glad I did!
It's brilliantly written Star  I really felt drawn into the world of the story, and am soooooooo looking forward to reading more! Big smile Big smile Big smile
Excellent work, really! Clap
Do PM me when you update.
 
Hi, thanks a ton! I'm glad you like the story, looking forward to reading your comments in future :) I shall pm you :)

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