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Mirage: (AR)-*NOTE PAGE 26* (Page 6)

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Posted: 21 December 2009 at 12:43pm | IP Logged
Hi Kiran,
 
Sounds really good but please... no long waits....Evil Smile
 
Love,
Ambryn

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Posted: 22 December 2009 at 3:38am | IP Logged
Heyyyyyyyyya kiran !!...
 
finally finished reading both the parts today.... they were as always fantastically written... an intense love story huh???..interesting... and the title is really beautiful... i loved it !! :)
 
the introduction part was penned in beautifully... so riddhima has a painful past... a failed love?..wonder who was her man...? hope his identity get disclosed soooon :) her pain at remembering those moments again was penned in really well...and armaan, a sad love life as well.?. his frustration, anger, pain at the way his life has turned out now was beautifully penned... there's a lot more to be said...
nikki and abhi, happily married... thats nice... and nikki being the talkative, hyper active of the two... and his thoughts abt how life had changed in the past 3 years here... and damini, sounds like a nice human being...
riddhima stuck in one of her disastrous blind-dates... aww.. poor girl.. when she has friends like this, she can do nothing abt it... but she is soo lucky to have friends who'll do all that they can for her happiness... she is really very lucky !!..
 
now, Part 1 :
riddhima remembering her meeting with her lawyer armaan mallik... hmm.. her thoughts abt his personality were written well... and then her convo with nikki, the slight teasing and joking between the two buddies was really nice... and then the other call, for which she needed God's support...hmmm..wonder who that could be????...
Nostalgia gripping abhi and him reminiscing all those moments from his college years and him thinking abt his only love nikki jabbering away with damini and then his surprise, then happiness at seeing his best friend after three long years... the light moment between the four was penned extremely well... loved that bit a lot :D
and then ridzi's arrival, followed by nikki's scream and then both the girls hugging each other , ignoring the chill... girls will remain girls... !!.. :) AR meeting again... n riddhima's shock at knowing that armaan was married !!... woah, married to damini.. boy .. that was a shocker... never thought of it.. and 8 years..thats a long time... but oh well, coming back.. the others teasing ridzi and then the armaan n riddhima's moment together... i just loved that part... he is one charming man !! :)
 
abhi's firm resolutoin to find what's going on in armaan's life... what's turned soo drastically wrong... and then riddhima and armaan coming up with a deal abt who's staying where... loved nikki's expressions there... she looked adorable... riddhima's thoughts abt armaan.. he has intrigued me loads as well !!... waiting to know more abt him and his life now...
 
those were awesome parts kiran !!. liking the story already...
thanks a ton for the pm...
continue sooooooooooooon :) !!...
*hugs*
 


Edited by SunainaTM007 - 22 December 2009 at 3:43am
AbhiNikiLuver IF-Dazzler
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Posted: 22 December 2009 at 8:10am | IP Logged
okaaaaaaaaaaaaay, now here I am to banter you!!!!!!!!
Update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! LOL
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Posted: 22 December 2009 at 8:27am | IP Logged
Originally posted by AbhiNikiLuver

okaaaaaaaaaaaaay, now here I am to banter you!!!!!!!!
Update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! LOL


:D you are first supposed to COMMENT :P then you rightfully get to banter *winks*
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Posted: 24 December 2009 at 12:22am | IP Logged
edited my comment on pg 4. :)
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Posted: 24 December 2009 at 1:44am | IP Logged
Gee, I love extra-marital stuff :D

n I LUUURRRRVVVVVV Armaan :D


baaqi baad mein...bye~!!

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Posted: 05 January 2010 at 10:13pm | IP Logged
Okay just caught up with this one. It's definitely intrigued me, and I seriously can't wait till you develop the plot further..and see what you have in store :)
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Posted: 06 January 2010 at 10:26pm | IP Logged
I am here! Finally.

Okay, here is the reason why I don't like to read anything which is work in progress. I don't like waiting and I think various scenarios how things will play out next. And you, cartoon, are damn late!!!

Anyway, back to the part. I liked the flow and the pace. I read your old works and I find that there is a huge transition from the way you wrote before to the way you are writing now. Very mature writing Kiran which is so different from the punk I know :D

I liked Abhi-Nikki interaction. They are this classic couple, the friends-couple who we have in our lives. They are pretty cool (till now) and Damini is more intriguing for me than Armaan. Of course everyone has tons of secrets by seeing the way they are interacting.

I think that was very clever - the way you don't spell out that there are secrets but work on their expressions enough to get reader intrigued. Nice Kiz!

I really, really liked the way the story is being written. There is no hurry nor their is an urgency of getting it finished. I am really looking forward for reading the next parts. Update soon punk!

Here is an interesting thing which happened. I have this very old draft lying around with a storyline - Armaan married with kid to someone else. Riddhima and he have common friends. I was so surprised to see almost similar thing to be written here.

Waiting for more Kiran. Now you can start treating me nicely. :D

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