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Breathless ~1~...*Note - Page 143* (Page 144)

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Posted: 04 December 2010 at 1:30pm | IP Logged
And I'm back to answer your questions.Embarrassed

Honestly, first let me just say that this is the only FF where I love every character of the whole story. I love the different relationships each of them share with each other...insanely different from DMG, yet similarly appealing. The group's bonding and connectivity is the soul of this FF. Please do keep that going.

Something  I really adore about your writing is the wittiness in your characters. The humor and banter makes all the parts so very lively and engaging. Also, I'm usually not able to connect with an FF if the dialogues are in Hindi...so I was definitely the most  happiest when you decided to switch to English.

Like I said, I love all the characters and am interested in all of their stories. But AR have a special place obviously. They are the reason I started reading the FF in the first  place. I love the chemistry and awkwardness between them. Just their relationship in this FF is very unique and beautiful. So I really look forward to having lots more of them in your next part.

I noticed that every time I re-read your FF, sometimes I would just skip to the parts where Armaan was thinking or feeling something for Ridhima.

Shit,,,she said my name. Her sweet yet drained voice whispered and he had to control his body to not show his emotions. What the hell dude? Are you 5 years old again? SNAP OUT OF IT.

"Riddhima kitna khoobsurat naam hai, aur tum Ms Woman Driver,,," He lied through his teeth and saw her eyes widen and her mouth open in to an offended gasp. What?! I've been ogling you for the past 15 minutes. If my face isn't telling you how incredibly attractive I find you, my mouth is CERTAINLY not. 

Armaan knew that one more minute of his unashamed staring would get his bhabhi more suspicious than she already was. Plus he needed to know for his sanity whether he was physically capable of tearing his eyes away from her beautiful face.

Holy shit I think my heart just stopped. Armaan sat back down at his place before his knees collapsed underneath him. Snap the f**k out of it dude '.cardiac arrest is never a turn on for girls'.


Armaan was slightly offended but had learnt his lesson from the morning. Plus he just didn't have the strength in him to fight her anymore; he'd lost all of it the minute she stepped in front of him in that black dress.

Armaan lay on his bed with his hands behind his head, his eyes followed her around his bedroom as he enjoyed the fact that she took some sort of interest in him. However miniscule it may be'.

Getting up off of his bed slowly, he surrendered to the magnetic pull he had been fighting all night and walked slowly towards her. He ran his eyes along her form and drew in a deep breath, he wondered if the thought of watching her sleep was in any way disturbing but just as logic and reason had seeped in to his consciousness, they had abandoned him just as quickly as his ache to touch her became more and more captivating. She was absolutely breathtaking.

These are just some moments. But their beautiful. I love how attracted Armaan is to her and keeps underestimating his effect on her. These small ramblings are definitely the essence of your FF.

I was an FF writer myself. And I can totally relate to what your saying about not knowing whether you'll be able to start off again. But believe me, being a reader...I have understood that no matter how much we convince ourselves of not getting it right...the readers love it and declare the right verdict. And in your case, we say your a brilliant writer and this story demands to be written.

I really hope that you continue. And best of luck for your exams. Even my winter break starts on Dec 20. So I hope that I have a treat waiting for me after those stressful days.


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Posted: 04 December 2010 at 2:34pm | IP Logged
gorgeous, give me time to work out my favourite part... but its good to hear from you!
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Posted: 05 December 2010 at 6:40am | IP Logged
Shrinziiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii you're backkkkkkk! :) Missed you loads!



Ummmm..... probably the bonfire part with the Truth and Dare  games..... Bestestest part EVER!
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Posted: 05 December 2010 at 7:04am | IP Logged
@...Aphrodite...

I read ur FF yesterday...or I shud say finally I cud complete reading ur fic after leaving it in middle twice..LOLL....it was fun reading it ..to b honest I was little disappointed knowing that it is not AR FF and DMG FF.....I m a hardcore AR fan ...its not that I don't like other characters ..I luv AA RM AN tooo....and ...u r amazing writer..I njoyed all the chapters alottttttTongue

gud to know that u will b updating new part soon ...

update sooonnnn


Edited by sjain - 05 December 2010 at 7:06am

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Posted: 05 December 2010 at 7:27am | IP Logged
hey i m glad that u r back
plz update soon dear......
waiting from such a long time........
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Posted: 05 December 2010 at 1:03pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by ...Aphrodite...

Slowly but Surely...

Hey guys...
First of all a hugggeeeeee thank you to all the love I've got for this ff. I haven't updated in 7 months and I still get sooo much appreciation. It's melts my heart!

I hope some of you will be happy to know that I'm in the middle of the next chapter!!

Yay!

Problem: I've lost touch with writing big...time!

I say it all the time....but 7 months is a lot of time to lose sync. So instead of staring intently at my computer screen wanting to rip my hair out, I thought I'd ask for help from the real bosses...you guys. You guys give amazing critique and every time i posted a chapter up your comments gave me ideas and inspiration into the next chapter.

So this isn't orthodox...and I'm sure FF writers don't do this but heck...I don't follow the rules.

My question: What has been your favorite part(s) of Breathless so far?

It can be a chapter, a scene, a sentence...whatever you want.

I need to know what I'm doing right...be as specific as you possibly can. This is your chance (probably the one and only) to tell me exactly what you like and what you want!

The next chapter will be up after my finals which end on 17th Dec...and if i haven't shot myself dead after them, I should have a chapter up the following week. I'm excited!

I've finally set a date so if I don't fulfill it...feel free to abuse me!

Love you guys!

...Aphrodite...




OMGG its so great to hear from u ! i'm sooo excited about u updating !!
i dont think i really have a favourite part i've loved all ur scenes-- i think i just love ur style of writing-- it keeps me laughing and gets me all giggly (and then whoever is with me in the room thinks i'm crazy :P    but yea if i had to make a scene suggestion-- i would either suggest a filler epi-- wherein we kinda get a back-to-the-basics lesson about all the characters and their camaraderie and all or make something really shocking happen that gives the story a 360 degree turn or at least a twist !!

anyway-- just excited about the update so will be waiting for it impatiently but till then good luck on ur finals !!!!!

take care =)

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Posted: 05 December 2010 at 2:09pm | IP Logged
finally ur updating ur ff......... my fav part in this ff has to be the truth and dare betwteen the gang....and   when AR  meet each other for the first time  .......i think u shld add a twist that wld shock us all but i wouldn't change a bit in this ff....by the way i love ur writing style....n gd luck with ur exams
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Posted: 08 December 2010 at 12:57pm | IP Logged
Hii.... I've been a silent reader till now. Just wanted to tell u tht ur writing js ammmmazing!!!! The waybu potray veach person in d gang. D armaan rids exchanges and ofcourse ur titles r to die for!!!! I hope u update soon. :D
lots of love lyk d feeling u get wen u see comments on ur FF. :P
(hope u didn't mind tht)

Edited by cutiedevil1 - 08 December 2010 at 12:59pm

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