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And I am back after having thought this one over :D
Hey girl!
Firstly a big pat on the back for posting something on a
subject as mature and tough as alcoholism! 
Knowing it was you who had done it I was sure it wouldn't edge on being dramatic; something easily possible with the subject and the history of how our films tend to portray it.
Its quite a serious issue in itself and I loved the sensitivity you have shown towards it.
I think the strength of it lay in it being simple and subtle. The interplay between the narrator's past and experience of the other member was something unique; haven't read anything like that and no, you didn't confuse me. The nave hopes of the teenager have been aptly and beautifully articulated. The eventual realization of the hard-hitting reality serving only as an impetus to change the direction of hope, hope remains nevertheless! That I feel is the reality of growing up, hopes tend to find a rationale.
A special mention for bringing out that being an alcoholic has nothing to do with one being essentially good or bad. Like any other individual he/she is a victim of an addiction. To an extent its like saying that 'Old habits die hard!'
The sense of relief and contentment were all realistic and humane. It stems from an assurance that you aren't the only one at the receiving end of the misery. A sense of kinship and security is but natural!
I happen to love the prayer you chose to include; in a way its similar what I have stated earlier about the change in the direction of hope.
All in all a wonderful attempt at the unconventional, a good way of conveying that the first step to solving a problem is the acceptance that there is a problem!
Love
Smriti
P.s. I happen to love the Gulab Jamun and Vanilla ice cream
combo
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Glad you liked it
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