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Posted: 22 September 2009 at 10:38am | IP Logged
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I m not good at poetries or verses or any thing of that kind but just as I wanted to write something this thing stuck my head. It is an old episode of dmg which I tried to write as a poem..i hope it will sound like one. Any ways here you go. You can guess which episode.
 
Dejected,insulted,harassed and continious percecute
My heart was screaming in  for you in that  depressing solitude.
 
The whole night I stayed up in the dark chamber wide awake.
Shattered was I why you din't trust me and blamed it was my mistake.
 
You stood against me in Haste and uncertainity
Who was she yours that you trusted her over Me.
 
But it was too late when you tried for it to rectify
I was so  gravely hurt and  never gave you a chance to pacify.
 
How could you ask for me to forgive you?
When it was you who risked my Life and Career too.
 
You came to me uninvited  dressed looking like a Princess
But, I injured your pride blaming you turned my life in a mess.
 
You left from there Hurt and Heart-broken
I too felt bad for how rudely I had spoken.
 
You cried your heart out and fell in a deep trouble
As I saw you on my way, My anger left me and I worried double.
 
Turning to save you from your misery  I tried as much as possible
I could see you were so afraid and much more vulnerable.
 
God's grace I managed to get you out of the fiscle
But it was not the end but the beginning ? a Renewal.
 
 *@*@*@*@*@*@*@*@*@*@*@*@*@*@*
Mods- If you find this is unnecessary and not applicable in the ff section you may close the topic.
Thank u.


Edited by ammy-ridz - 02 October 2009 at 1:25am

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Posted: 22 September 2009 at 11:12am | IP Logged
its a lovely poem.....too good
loved it...its related to the time when armaan went back to kasauli after the misunderstandings...u describeed it very well 4m the point of view of armaan

love
debadrita



Edited by Debadrita Saha - 22 September 2009 at 11:23am

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Posted: 22 September 2009 at 11:40am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Debadrita Saha

its a lovely poem.....too good
loved it...its related to the time when armaan went back to kasauli after the misunderstandings...u describeed it very well 4m the point of view of armaan

love
debadrita

Thanx soooooo much debadrita.  I kno it is not that good not even average..but thank u so much for encouraging me and appreciating it.
Umm..the part is not kasuli part..but the one where Ridz gives a statement against Armaan and he is in the jail and then Party and Vivek fisaco...But it was too close..i myself got confused when i read it again.
Once again THANK u.
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Posted: 22 September 2009 at 11:52am | IP Logged
Originally posted by ammy-ridz

Originally posted by Debadrita Saha

its a lovely poem.....too good
loved it...its related to the time when armaan went back to kasauli after the misunderstandings...u describeed it very well 4m the point of view of armaan

love
debadrita

Thanx soooooo much debadrita.  I kno it is not that good not even average..but thank u so much for encouraging me and appreciating it.
Umm..the part is not kasuli part..but the one where Ridz gives a statement against Armaan and he is in the jail and then Party and Vivek fisaco...But it was too close..i myself got confused when i read it again.
Once again THANK u.




ya i read it again....actually first i thougt the she is muskan.....but now after telling it i realized it...actually i got confused because he wasn't in love with riddhima during the vivek's incident...but its really good....everyone has its first time...n u shud be proud of yourself to try one...n its really very nice...better than average

love
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Posted: 22 September 2009 at 11:54am | IP Logged

I like how you've formed the lines...interlacing reactions and responses..!!

good stuff!..you should rite more..:)

nijaL



Edited by missypatel - 22 September 2009 at 11:56am

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Posted: 23 September 2009 at 2:26am | IP Logged
Originally posted by missypatel


I like how you've formed the lines...interlacing reactions and responses..!!

good stuff!..you should rite more..:)

nijaL

  Thanxx ninjaL. I m really glad you appreciate my work.
Will definitely try to write more in future.
Thank u  :)
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Posted: 02 October 2009 at 1:24am | IP Logged
 
here I come again with my thought. I had planned a one shot along with this ..but decided against it. So this is like Riddhima's emotions,her life and her  Desire(Armaan)-his significance in her life.. hope you do like it. Plz comment/criticise.
 
With me always
 
Walking down so aimless was I,
Hot furnace of the sun made me painful and  cry.
When Rosted roads made this smooth,soft  skin wince,
You suddenly lifted me in your arms like my charming prince.
 
 
Lost on a secluded Island,
Running and cribbing I buried my head in sand.
Violent waves splashed and left my clothes in stain,
I looked up and found you there acending the Air-plane.
 
 
My happiness and pleasure suddenly turned into a sorrow,
No more was the man I was destined to marry tommorow.
Martyr was he trying to save the lives of innocent civilian,
Shadows of accuses disappeared with a pinch of your hand filled vermillion.
 
 
Today the whole world is beside me,
With you by my side I don't need worry.
Your Love has healed all my scars,
I know with you beside me I can win all the Wars.
*@*@*@*@*@*@*@*

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Posted: 02 October 2009 at 1:27am | IP Logged
hey
both the pems r gr8 absolutly loved it
do writ more
nruti

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