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Posted: 17 September 2009 at 12:59pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by Mahak Sinha

Hey abhi maine fic ka first part padha.
Sab se pehle to ek suggestion dena chahti hoon tujhe, may be u will not mind. Suggestion ye hai ki tune jis role me jis ko bhi imagine kiya hai us ka naam de de. I mean for the role of Asmi , vo is liye kyounki jab ye pata hota hai ki kis ko cast kiya hai to imagine karna easy ho jaata hai. Actually main khud kabhi female leads ko imagine nahi karti so it was a bit difficult for me to cast any1 like that....so I gave the liberty to the readers to imagine whoever they like.....as far as I knw u r an RN fan so Asmi might be Priyanka for u......well, I am glad that u suggested this to me n I surely didnt mind.....but kyunki maine pehle hi apne readers ko female lead khud imagine karne ki liberty di hai....I cant change my words now as I knw it will definitely hurt their feelings.....coz sum of them like RN n sum like SK......sum take Priyanka as Asmi n sum take Amna.....and I thik I shud be hurting any of them by casting any1 at this point.....hope u understand wat am trying to say....
Asmi n Samay ka realtion bahut khoobsurat hai ye baat to samajh me aayi fir Asmi itne pareshaan kyoun hai ye samajh bhi nahi aaya.Well thats due to the fact that she never got the true happiness of her lyf as I had mentioned her parents were quite negligible towards them.....but haan, shayad main ye baat zyada clearly samjha nahi payi....sry abt that.....actually first tym likh rahi hu so thodi garbad ho jati hai.....I'll definitely try to do better next tym so that u dont hav nay confusion Aur engagement kis ki ho rahi hai? Dear maine pehle part me do baar mention kiya Its Asmi's bro Samay's engagement....ConfusedConfused donno tumhe samajh me kyun nahi aya?ConfusedConfused But again I am sry that u had these confusionsOuchOuch
Lovely start, update soon.
Clap Clap ClapThnx Smile


Thnx for replying. And I hope I hav been able to make myself clear abt the suggestion. And yes, if U hav any problem to imagine the female lead, I'll suggest u take Priyanka as Asmi as u r an RN fan. But anyways, thnx for the  suggestionSmileSmile.
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Part # 3

 

The guys enter the Shergill Mansion n Mrs. Shergill (NS) notices them n she recognizes the first guy.

 

NS: Arre tum……abhi ja kar ana hua…..aaj shyam ko sagai hai aur tum ab pohuch rahe ho?? Ye kya baat hui bhala?

 

1st guy: Sorry Aunty…..extremely sorry….kya karu flight k tickets nahi mil rahi thi….aur to flight delay bhi ho gaya tha…..main to warna parso hi pohuch jata….sab uss bewkuf flight ki ghalti hai…..warna aap to janti hai na…..main kitna responsible hoon (making a sweet adorable face)….

 

NS: Bas….bas….bahut baatein bana liya….bahut sayana ho gaya hai lagta hai….

 

1st guy: Arre nahi aunty main to aaj bhi bilkul seedha sadha hoon….(just then other guy nudges him which reminds him he needs to be introduced)….aah….Aunty….ye mera dost hai…..Arnav….actually wo kabhi India nahi aya na….to maine kaha iss bar mere saath aa jaye…..hope its ok agar….

 

NS: Arre haan…haan…beta iss me poochhne wali baat nahi hai….tumhara dost hai akhir….(to Arnav) beta tum araam se raho yaha ok…..feel comfortable….(and she smiles)

 

Arnav:Thnx aunty….

 

NS: Tum dono ek kaam karo….apne room me jao…fresh hoke zara rest karlo…..shyam ko sagai hai….bahut exersion hoga…..aur abhi tum dono safar k baad tired hoge na…..(to the first guy) ab jaa….tera kamra intezaar kar raha hai…..

 

He just smiles n goes towards his room along wid Arnav. Then he just turns and…

 

Guy: Umm…aunty usse mat batana main aya hoon….

 

NS just smiles n nods her head.

 

The guy n Arnav r going towards the room.

 

Arnav: Tumhara kamra? Iss ghar me tumhara kamra kyun hai?

 

Guy: Haan….actually bachpan me aksar yaha ata tha….aur isi kamre me rehta tha (entering the room)…phir maine kaha k ye kamra mera hoga…..sirf main rahunga yaha…..aur Asmi iss baat se bahut chidti thi…

 

Arnav: Asmi?

 

Guy: Haan…..Iss ghar ki beti, Samay ki chhoti behen aur meri bachpan ki dost…cum dushman….hum hamesha ladha karte the…..jhagra hi zyada hota tha hamara…..jab bhi main yaha rehta tha main kabhi kisiko iss kamre me ane nahi deta tha…..aur ye baat usse zara bhi achhi nahi lagti thi…hamesha ladti thi mujhse…..(he says this smiling remembering the old times)

 

Arnav: Hmm….sum1 is very happy???

 

Guy: Huh…..aah nahi aisi baat nahi hai….main to hamare bachkani harkaton ko yaad karke has raha tha…..

 

Arnav: To maine kab kaha k tum kisi AUR ko yaad karke has rahe ho?

 

Guy: Tum bhi na…..ab chalo ye baatein chhoro….filhaal fresh ho jate hai…..main to bahut thak gaya hoon…

 

Arnav: Haan…thik hai.

 

Nishant: Waise hum pehle Samay se milke phir thoda rest karlenge…kya kehte ho?

 

Arnav: Haan….ye sahi rahega.

 

They meet up with Samay….Arnav was introduced to him n they seem to hav bonded well…..they teased Samay a lil bit n then left to get sum rest.

 

It was abt 1 pm. Every1 in Shergill Mansion was very busy…though everything was quite perfect, they didn't want anything to go wrong at the end. Asmi was checking sum things when…..sum1 pats her from behind. She turns around to find a guy behind her……but the thing is he was quite far to pat her…..she just dismissed the thing n returned bak to wat she was doing. But again sum1 patted her n turning around she found that guy smiling sheepishly…..this angered her.

 

Asmi: Hey mister……tumhari problem kya hai? Aur waise tum ho kaun aur yaha kya kar rahe ho? Tumhe kisine roka nahi kya? Aise kaise andar chale aye? Xcuse me….main tumse baat kar rahi hu….sunai nahi deta kya? Ya phir gunge-behre ho?

 

Asmi was asking these questions non-stop without letting the guy open his mouth let alone answer. He just stood there raising his brows n wondered wat actually she is.

 

Just as she finishes talking sum1 from behind says, " Arre iss bina lagam k ghori pe abhi tak kisine lagam nahi dala kya?"

 

Asmi was shocked to hear the words n she kinda recognized the voice…..yes….it was him. It was Nishant…..Nishant Oberoi…..He is HERE!!!!!

 

Asmi just turned around to find him right there in front of her eyes…..at first she was very happy to hav him here…..he was always a relief for her from her tensed normal course of lyf. He was a very lively person n cud make any1 laugh effortlessly. He was a very gud frnd to her alongside being that naughty rival of childhood…..or may be even now this rivalry exists coz she is just reminded of the prank he was playing n due to which she was almost (!) bashing another guy….

 

Asmi: Youuuuuuu…………I shud hav understood it has to be u….only u can be so…….

 

Nishant: Cool ryt?

 

Asmi: Cool???.....Huh…u r kidding me…..u r simply disgusting….I wonder how can sum1 be disgusting so effortlessly????

 

Nishant: Well….its becoz not every1 is Nishant Oberoi……

 

Asmi: Huh….just get lost ok…..mujhe tumhari bakwas nahi sunni….

 

Nishant: Achha main bakwas karta hu?? Aur abhi abhi jo tum iss bechare pe apne betuki sawalon k teer chalaye jaa rahi thi uska kya???


So guys it was Nishant who was irritating Asmi. And Arnav was just standing a lil behind to watch the drama but guess, unintentionally he became a part of it.

 

Asmi: Ye….??

 

Nishant: Ye Arnav hai…Arnav Jaisingh….mera dost…..mere saath US se aya hai….wo pehle India nahi aya tha na….to maine socha iss baar mere saath le aau..

 

Asmi: Gosh…kitna bolte ho tum…..pura Ramayan kyun suna rahe ho…..ye tumhara dost hai itna janna hi kaafi hai….anyways…(turning to Arnav) I'm sorry for that….but haan….ghalti puri meri bhi nahi hai….tum bhi to kuch nahi bol rahe the….aur to aur has bhi rahe the…..ab main kya karti….mujhe to yehi lagna tha na ki tum mujhe pareshan kar rahe the….ye to tumhara kaam tha k tum mujhe batao ki main ghalat soch rahi thi…but no….tumne kuch nahi kaha…as if kisine muh pe patti bandh di ho….

 

Arnav: Exactly miss….

 

Asmi: Huh?

 

Arnav: Jab apki zaban chalti hai tab baki sabki bolti bandh ho jati hai……patti bandhne ki zaroorat kaha hai? Listen free me ek baat kehta hu….zyada baat karne k bahut se side effects ho sakti hai…..isse insaan hyper ho jata hai, bahut exersion hota hai….aur log asani se exhausted ho jate hai….and most importantly…..aas paas k logo ka jeena dushwar ho jata hai….(he ended quite stressfully)

 

Asmi was sumwat shocked….no one had ever talked to her like this….koi usko usiki bhasha me (jaise wo hamesha bak bak karti hai) iss tarah ulta jawab dega…aisa usne nahi socha tha…..she was literally dumb-founded….

 

Asmi: U knw wat…..tum apne free lectures apne paas hi rakho…..iss tarah unhe neelam karne ki zaroorat nahi hai….

 

Arnav:Main neelam nahi kar raha hu….main to bas tumhe gyan dene ki koshish kar raha hu…waise bhi kehte hai gyan ek aisi cheez hai jo dene se aur badhta hai…waise bhi lectures to free k hai na? To lene me kya problem hai?

 

Asmi: Problem ye hai k mere paas tumhare ye faltu lecture rakhne ki jagah nahi hai.

 

Arnav:Par aisa kaise ho sakta hai….apka dimag to bilkul khali hai…..jagah kaise nahi hai?

 

Asmi: Tumhe kaise pata mera dimag khali hai?

 

Arnav: Kyunki mera dimag jo khali nahi hai…..aur ye baat janne k liye thodi si hi common sense chahiye….

 

Asmi: Gosh…..tum na….hopeless ho bilkul…mujhe nahi kari tumse koi bhi baat…...main chalti hu yaha se….

 

And she leaves. Till now Nishant was standing there witnessing this stupid convo btwn them…..even he was shocked to c Arnav back-firing like this….but then he thought may be he was like this only…..However he came to Arnav..

 

Nishant: Tumne to uski bolti bandh kar di…..pehli baar Asmi aise kahin se khud chali gayi…warna hamesha uski wajah se log bhaag jate hai…..

 

Arnav just smiled n thought "Lekin mujhe lagta hai…ye khud bahut pehle se bhaag rahi hai"

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Ok guys....this is the 3rd part. I actually donno if its long enough.....jab main likhti hu tab lagta hai bahut zyada likha hai....but then it doesnt turn out enough big....do let me knw if it was a gud n enough big part. ConfusedConfused

And yes, I wud like to knw if any1 faces any kinda confusion while reading.......pls tell me honestly so that I can rectify my lackings. SmileSmile  And pls dont think i am not gonna reveal who is Rajeev....I am gonna do that of course but it will cum a lil later.
And thank u all for commenting. Hope u like this part too.

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Posted: 18 September 2009 at 12:04am | IP Logged
grt prt
but ab mujhe bahut confusion hai aakhir rajeev kaun hai aur pls luv triangle mat banana pls. maine sepeartion bardasht nahi kar paoungi dear
 
pls cont soon
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Posted: 18 September 2009 at 12:09am | IP Logged
hailaaa! nice part!
i likd the dialg..." is bina lagaam ki ghodi..."LOL
convo betn Arnav and Asmi was awesome!
Waise...is Arnav Rajeev?
waiting 4 nxt part...
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Posted: 18 September 2009 at 2:19am | IP Logged
damn cool
awesome
update soon

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Posted: 18 September 2009 at 2:36am | IP Logged
Liked the convo of love birds so much.
Update i mean the second part was truly jhakaas. Choice is good with Ikbal Khan. I really like him n his stylish acting so much. He looks good too.
Kajal was saying sorry but she said after teasing Samay a lot. Asmi is so cute , she was helping her bhai but her bhai was in ino mood to listen anything but when he understood that she is Kajal to raha hi nahi gaya janaab se.



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Posted: 18 September 2009 at 2:42am | IP Logged
Originally posted by sumaiya wahid

Originally posted by Mahak Sinha

Hey abhi maine fic ka first part padha.
Sab se pehle to ek suggestion dena chahti hoon tujhe, may be u will not mind. Suggestion ye hai ki tune jis role me jis ko bhi imagine kiya hai us ka naam de de. I mean for the role of Asmi , vo is liye kyounki jab ye pata hota hai ki kis ko cast kiya hai to imagine karna easy ho jaata hai. Actually main khud kabhi female leads ko imagine nahi karti so it was a bit difficult for me to cast any1 like that....so I gave the liberty to the readers to imagine whoever they like.....as far as I knw u r an RN fan so Asmi might be Priyanka for u......well, I am glad that u suggested this to me n I surely didnt mind.....but kyunki maine pehle hi apne readers ko female lead khud imagine karne ki liberty di hai....I cant change my words now as I knw it will definitely hurt their feelings.....coz sum of them like RN n sum like SK......sum take Priyanka as Asmi n sum take Amna.....and I thik I shud be hurting any of them by casting any1 at this point.....hope u understand wat am trying to say....
Asmi n Samay ka realtion bahut khoobsurat hai ye baat to samajh me aayi fir Asmi itne pareshaan kyoun hai ye samajh bhi nahi aaya.Well thats due to the fact that she never got the true happiness of her lyf as I had mentioned her parents were quite negligible towards them.....but haan, shayad main ye baat zyada clearly samjha nahi payi....sry abt that.....actually first tym likh rahi hu so thodi garbad ho jati hai.....I'll definitely try to do better next tym so that u dont hav nay confusion Aur engagement kis ki ho rahi hai? Dear maine pehle part me do baar mention kiya Its Asmi's bro Samay's engagement....ConfusedConfused donno tumhe samajh me kyun nahi aya?ConfusedConfused But again I am sry that u had these confusionsOuchOuch
Lovely start, update soon.
Clap Clap ClapThnx Smile


Thnx for replying. And I hope I hav been able to make myself clear abt the suggestion. And yes, if U hav any problem to imagine the female lead, I'll suggest u take Priyanka as Asmi as u r an RN fan. But anyways, thnx for the  suggestionSmileSmile.
Smile


Oks no problem by not declaring any partcular gal for that role i understand ur problem. Samay ko le kar mai confuse thi ki vo Rajeev to nahi hai na that's y i asked u.

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