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hey guys...well...im back...i know...i just ended on ss and now im back with another...first of...let me thank everyone who read "In Search of Chahat"...your feedback was greatly appreciated and omg...it made me feel so good Embarrassed...here is another idea that i have been messing with for a while now...it was on the back burner...so i thought...why not...lets see where i can take this one...as of right now this is slated to be a short story (ss)...but...depending on the response and my wacky ideas...it may turn into a small ff...im not sure yet...Tongue...

this story is not based on the actual plot of Kis Desh, in any way...i only use the characters...in this story you will see new twists, new parings and new sides of old characters...which i hope you all enjoy and accept...more or less WinkWinkWink....so here it is...Tanhai

NOTE: Please...note...that this story will be updated once a week...please...please dont leave comments asking for updates or bombard me with PM's about updating...i update as soon as i can...i know sometimes (ok...most of the time)...there are delays...but i do try my best...harassing me or bombarding me with messages/comments...is not going to make me post any faster...it may just make me post slower...i know..im evil like that Evil Smile....

NOTE2: oh oh...thanks to all of you for putting up with me and my crazy ideas and wacky
schedule

Prologue - Pg 1
Part 1 - Pg 07
Part 2 - Pg 13
Part 3 - Pg 18
Part 4 - Pg 26
Part 5 - Pg 33
Part 6 - Pg 39
Part 7 - Pg 46
Part 8 - Pg 57
Part 9 - Pg 68

JAZ




Edited by jnawaz - 27 December 2009 at 3:08pm

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NOTE: Let me know if you want to me continue Big smile

Prologue

The sun had set hours ago, taking with it the light of the day. It was now well past 9 in the evening as a couple walked hand-in-hand down the secluded streets of Amritsar. The day had started off on one note and ended on one that no one, not even the couple themselves, thought it would. The sequence of events that transpired that day couldn't be helped in any way. What had to be done was also what needed to be done.

 

Before taking any steps he had asked her to think over her decision because he didn't want her to have any regrets later. She hadn't even given the statement much thought, there was only one thing on her mind that morning – how far would she go for love? This wasn't just some school girl infatuation; this was love…real love. It was a love that had passed the test of time, discrimination and pain.


This was a love that had started 13 years ago in the school yards of a local school in her home town of Amritsar. She was the quite spoken and introverted 5 year old in the kindergarten class of the school. From the first day she started she had been teased and picked on relentlessly by a few of her own class mates, but also by many of the boys in the higher grades. She did have three older brothers who could easily beat up any one who teased their baby sister, but they were much older than her so they no longer went to the same school. It was one day during the play period that two boys had began to tease her about her pigtails and the oil in her hair. After their taunts she scurried away to a corner of the play yard where no one ventured. She sat there and cried until the bell rang for class to resume. Just like any other day, as she walked back to class, the boys found her again and this time, instead of just teasing her they pulled on one of her pigtails hard. They were about to pull another one when suddenly they stopped.

 

This is where a day like any ordinary day turned into an extraordinary day.

 

She looked up to see another older boy standing next to her, with his hand on the hand of the boy who was about to yank her hair. He pushed away the hand and stood in front of her. In a very authoritative tone he said that from this day on if anyone teased her, they would pay – from this day on if any one made her cry, they would answer to him. She hadn't expected the warning to affect the monstrous boys but it did. Almost immediately they shrunk back and disappeared. But not before her savior warned them that if anyone touched her again, he would see to it that each and every one of their fingers were broken. Once the boys were gone, he gave her a smile and went off to his own class. Later on that day she had found out that her savior was the new 7 year old boy who had just joined the school. It was that day she knew she loved him.

 

From that day, their relationship had grown from acquaintances to friendship, and from friendship to love. From that day they had been inseparable, whether it was him at her side saving her from something, or if it was her at his side helping him with his homework after school. They had celebrated many first together – first Valentines Day, first time holding hands, first hug, first kiss, even their first heart break. When his mother had died he had broken because once she was gone, he had no one left in this world. She had then reminded him that she was his and his only, until the end of time. Unashamedly he had cried on her shoulder as she held him. It was that day he realized he could never love any one more than he loved her. 

 

As they evolved into maturing adults, so had their relationship. He made her a stronger woman and she made him a caring man. They were their love and their love was their lives. Many had tried to break this relationship but nothing worked. Their trust and faith in each other was like nothing anyone had ever seen. Their love knew no bounds; their love is what made them who they were.

 

When her family refused to accept him because he was not of their standard, it broke her heart. She was shattered at the thought that they wouldn't accept the one good thing in her life. It broke her because they wouldn't accept the man she loved. It tortured her because she was given the ultimatum of choosing the family she adored or the man who she held in her heart and soul. She didn't know what do to. However, when she found out about her engagement to some big time business mans son, she knew what she had to do. Her heart and her mind told her the same thing.

 

That is why, she was here now – walking down the street with the man she loved; her hand in his, her head resting on his shoulder, and her heart one with his. She was dressed in a simple red churidar outfit; her hands done with mehndi, her wrists hidden by her chuda, her neck adorned with the sacred necklace of gold and black beads, a flowered garland resting over her arms as she walked and the parting in her forehead was the color was blood red.

 

He had asked her to make sure she had no regrets about what she was doing. She had just married the man of her dreams, she would never regret that. She was now a happily married woman, she could never regret that. She saw a bright future for herself and her husband, she could never regret that. She had trusted her heart and her love, she would never regret that.

 

"Paata nahin mausam ko kya hua hai. Lagta hai ke koi tufaan aane wala hai," he said.

 

The winds had suddenly picked up and were swirling around them as black clouds huddled over head.

 

"Kya sooch rahi ho?" he asked, as he nudged her with his shoulder lightly, when he got no response.

 

"Kuch nahin," she replied coyly.

 

"Kahin tum yeh toh nahin sooch rahi ho, ke tumne bohot badi ghalti ki hai iss garib admi se shaadi kar ke?" he teased.

 

She looked up at him and gave him a look – a look he understood too well.

 

"Aare baba, aaise akheen maat dikhao. Main toh baas mazak kaar raha tha," he said as he drew her hand up and kissed it. "Aab bata bhi toh, kya sooch rahi ho?"

 

"Main sooch rahi hoon ke…" she said as she snuggled closer to the warmth of his body, "…ke main tumse bohot pyaar karti hoon."

 

"Woh toh main jaanta hoon," he said arrogantly.

 

"Aur tum? Tum mujhse pyaar nahin karte?" she teased.

 

He leaned down and kissed her forehead before saying, "Iss duniya mein saab se zyada toh main hi tumse pyaar karta hoon."

 

She smiled and hugged him with all her might. She was married, she was happy and she had the love of her life with her forever. No, definitely no regrets.

 

The sun had set hours ago, taking with it the light of the day. It was now well past 9 in the evening as couple walked hand in hand down the secluded streets of Amritsar. The had had started off on one note and ended on one that no one, not even the couple themselves, thought it would. The sequence of events that transpired that day couldn't be helped in any way. What had to be done was also what needed to be done. Little did this couple know that the sun had taken the light from their lives with it. Little did this couple know that the winds and the rain of the on coming storm would wash away their happiness.



JAZ

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Posted: 11 August 2009 at 9:43pm | IP Logged
Okay so like.... i am finally here... and omg!! that was sooo freaking short!!!! i started reading it.... and boom.. its over!!! kya yaar...

anyways...... back to my comments..... haila.... they are sooo nice and loving right now!! why... why do u want to ruin people's happiness!!!AngryAngryAngry wats wrong with u??? they both love each other.. let them go!!. but nope.. ur last line about washing away happiness.... uff!!CryCryCry so sad!!

i dont even want to know wat the heck will happen next! poor kids man!!!.......... well.. i am waiting..... i am here and i commented....... so can i just get my update now?LOL makes my life easier!!!!LOL......

man i didnt even catch typos.. i think its becuz... i didnt pay attention thats why!!LOLLOLLOL.... cant expond our dictionary today!!!!!!LOL oh well.. next time.....


plz cont soon jaani!!!!!!Embarrassed


Edited by *Guli* - 12 August 2009 at 11:37pm

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Posted: 11 August 2009 at 9:49pm | IP Logged
my spot! Big smile

*edited*

I'm not gonna say sorry cus you told me not to, but dude di! That was too short!! Unhappy I'm with Guli di on that! UnhappyAnyways...you'll be proud to know I did not cheat to see who the couple was, but right now, I love the relation between them!!! Big smile

It's sooo romantic and sweet and much more than just love, there's a trust and security bond between them! Big smile

Awwww you made the girl sound sooo sad back then! Unhappy *hugs her tightly* but the guy! Big smile I'm proud of him, and ohh he was new too? Shocked Shocking! I'm glad he was there for her though! Big smile

And ahh he's garib? and her parents/family was against it? Unhappy That sucks...and now this whole thing of the upcoming storm frightens me...so I'm gonna wrap up these comments go read the first part! Big smile

Love you Jaz di,

MeeraEmbarrassed


Edited by indiandoll89 - 16 August 2009 at 11:46pm

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Posted: 11 August 2009 at 9:51pm | IP Logged
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I had a feeling it was gonna be Premeer,( When i read the prologue i was already hoping it would be Premeer) Anyways  the whole part was just Omg.. like the way you wrote it. It was soooooo good!! And the way you explained the childhood and their love it was really sweet!!
 
 Im already loving this story!Smile


Edited by purplestar22 - 08 September 2009 at 11:31pm

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OMG Di this was amazing! I cannot WAIT to read the next part! So yeah, in case you haven't figured out, I DO want you to continue! Big smile

The way you wrote the prologue was just fantastic. It totally gave a little taste of what's to come, and that taste just gets you craving for so much more, that there's no way anyone can be content with just one little lick. (What is with all the taste metaphors?!)
 
PM me when you update? Embarrassed
 
Love,
Bhav (:

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Posted: 11 August 2009 at 10:00pm | IP Logged
wowwwwwwwww...................awesome......continue soonnnn....waitin fr more..

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Posted: 11 August 2009 at 10:12pm | IP Logged
yes i also want u to continue
wow the prologue was awesum
if u can plz pm me when u update


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