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luvraj4ever

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thanks dear for d comment...i m glad that u liked d gift part...and the ball part too...yeah they all will see what raj  can do LOLthanks for d comment and keep reading and commentingSmileSmile
Originally posted by sumaiya wahid

Hey gr8 part. I luved Raj's gift. Mujhe laga tha koi pic hogi but sumhow I cudnt zero on this. Tum to yuhi darr rahi thi. Sach me best gift di hai Raj ne Naina ko. But then Raj hai hi Best to uski d hui gift bhi to best hi hogi. Luved this whole scene.

Aur ball pe Raj ke sath jo hua it was all very funny. I like this comic element. But mujhe cadets par gussa aa raha tha as they made fun of Raj. I'm w8ing 4 the day when Raj will get married n then they'll knw wat actually Raj can do.Embarrassed

Anyways, pls continue soon.

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so sorry yaar...for late rply...!!! aur is k do wajah the...!!! 1st one is yeh pg nahin khul raha tha...aur dushra...mera mood baht hi off tha...!!!
 
by d way ab aate hain ud par...
 
funny and beautiful ud...Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap Clap
 
raj ka gift sach me unxpected tha...Ouch!!! kyoun ki maine socha tha ki raj kuch aisa gift karega ki jis se us k feelings k bare me pata chalega... naina ko...!! par raj ka gift toh sach me baht emotional tha...Cry!!! aur raj ka dream bhi...!!! us ne bilkul sahi kaha tha...sapne k bare me...!!! voh mera fav line hai...pata hai kyoun ...??? kyoun ki mai bhi bilkul yahi sochti hun...!!! hmmm....lagta hai raj aur meri soch kafi milti hai...!!!Wink
 
raj aur naina ka hug scene bhi kafi achha tha...Clap Clap Clap!!! kam se kam dono ko kuch alag aur khaas toh mehsus hua...ek dushre k liye...!!! Tongue Big smile Smilewell...raj toh janta hai na...ki use yeh ehsaas kyoun hua...!!! par pata nahin naina kab jaan payegi...!!!Confused Confused Confused
 
shalini ka charechter bilkul sahi likha hai...tum ne..Tongue!!! voh LRL me bhi itni hi naughty thi...aur hamesha raj ki taang khinchti rahti...aur gr888 suppoter bhi toh thi...Big smile!!! raj-shalini ka convo....funny tha...LOL!!! raj ne toh bilkul sahi samjha...tha...!!! par baad me shalini ne hi is baat ko ghuma diya...!!!LOL
 
aur raj aur waiter ka convo...!!! gr888...!!! main us scene par baht baht hassi thi...!!! aur baki sab k reactions bhi raj ka convo sun kar waiter k sath...!!! mera toh us whole scene (raj,waiter & cadets) par hass hass k bura haal tha...!!!LOL LOL LOL LOL LOL LOL
 
& at last raj ka naina ko dekh kar kho jana...aur dil dil me compliment dena....choooo chweet yaar...Embarrassed  Embarrassed  Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed
 
well...ek baat toh hai tumhari aur meri soch comedy scene me baht achhe se milti hai...Tongue Wink Tongue Wink Tongue Wink!!! jarur hum last janam me 'chalbaaz' ki anju aur manju the...!!!LOL  LOL  LOL  LOL  LOL  LOL


Edited by srojaleen - 02 July 2009 at 8:35am

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totally rocking ...n loved d way u presented it a little diff.

tooo good.....


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i was just reading this fic but there is some technical error on page 6Confused..

can any of u or the author post the 3rd part again..
 
plsssssssssss.... i really want to read it!!!Smile

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Great update.
Raj's gift was fantastic...a perfect surprise...(Yaar itna unique idea aaya kaise)
Raj need not have worried about naina being upset or hurt by seeing his gift...because today he has not only shared naina's dream but has assured her that he will always be with her.
The teasing at the party was just superb...a perfect comedy...infact it was nice to see that everyone was so relaxed and having a good time.
But i could not believe that event he cadets were teasing raj...
 
Please continue soon and thanks for the PM

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plsssssssssssssssssss friends it would be very nice of ou if u could post this part again for me.

plsssssssssssssssssssssss 

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ok guys i m posting this part again coz some were saying that there is some error showing on that page
 

part 3..hope u all will like it

raj girls hostel ki taraf ja raha tha...ki tabhi usse ek orderly aa kar kehta hai ki brigadier chandok ne usse abhi bulaya hai..

raj{mann hi mann}ab fir naina se baat nhn ho paayegi...pata nhn usse kaisa lag raha hoga....aur vo ye sochte2 BC ke cabin ki taraf chal deta hai...

in d evening....
sab tayiaar ho rahe hain...sab ke mann mein bass yahi baat chal rahi hai ki ye shaam un sab ki ek saath aakhri shaam hai...kal subah hote hi vo sab apni apni manzilon ki taraf chal denge...pata nhn fir kab vo iss tarah se ek saath honge...iss liye aaj har koi bas sab bhula kar ek saath iss moment ko poori tarah enjoy karna chahta hai...vo cadets jo hamesha apni training tough hone ki vajah se apne academy mein aane ke decision ko coste rehte the unhone ne kabhi nhn socha tha ki jab yahan se jaane ka waqt aayega to unhein itna dukh hoga....

cut to naina's room

pooja-oye naina...kitni der se aise hi baithi hai...taiyaar nhn hona...

naina-hona hai bas tu chal main thodi hi der mein pohanchti hun...aur sunn jaaane se pehle dr.shalini ko apne saath le jaana

pooja-kyun????

naina-kyunki tujhe dekhke ali behosh jo hone waala hai to doctor ki zaroorat to padegi na...{she said hiding her smile}

pooja{blushing}-tu neeche aa tere ko dekhungi tab{saying dis she left d rum}

naina smiled at her friend...vo taiyaar hone hi waali thi ke tabhi usse captain rajveer ke gift ki yaad aati hai..vo usse khol kar dekhne hi waali hoti hai ki tabhi darwaaze par knock hota hai...naina darwaaza kholti hai aur....

naina-aap???

vo dekhti hai ki saamne raj khada hai ek dum taiyaar{he's wearing black suit with white shirt...his hair neatly done as always}naina ko pata nhn raj ko iss waqt dekh ke kya mehsoos hua...par iss se pehle ki naina khud se koi sawaal kar paati raj ne bolna shuru kia...

raj-gud evening naina

naina-ahh gud evening sir{still looking at him wid a strange expression}

raj-aap abhi tak taiyaar nhn hui ball shuru hone waali hai..

naina-ahh bas sir hone hi waali thi ki....

raj-ki.....beech mein maine aake disturb kar dia...

naina-nhn sir aisi koi....{she suddenly stopped seeing him smile} to aap mazaak kar rahe the?????{wid fake anger}

raj-chalo academy ke aakhri din hi sahi cadet naina 'ah'singh ko ye to samjh mein aane laga ki main kab mazaak kar raha hun

naina ne bas smile kia aur kaha-vaise main ye kehne waali thi ki main bas taiyaar hone hi waali thi ki mujhe yaad aa gaya ki maine abhi tak vo gift khol ke nhn dekha jo aapne mujhe dia tha...ye sunn kar raj ke chehre ka expression badal jaata hai

naina-rukiye main abhi khol ke dekhti hun

raj-ahh nhn naina isse aaj mat kholo..kal khol ke dekhna plzzz

naina-par sir kyun

raj-kyunki.....

naina-......

raj-kahin tum isse dekhkar upset ho gai...i dont want that....aaj khushi ka din hai...issliye aaj isse rehne do

naina-aap ke diye hue gift ko dekhkar main upset kaise ho sakti hun sir???aur vaise aap to aaj hi chale jaayenge...aur mujhe ye gift aap ke jaane se pehle dekhna hai and dont worry main bilkul udaas nhn hongi...

iss par raj ne kuch nhn kaha...kyunki raj bhi yahi chahta tha ki naina uske saath ek baar uss gift ko dekhe...vo bas naina ko gift kholte hue dekhne laga...jab naina ne uss gift ko dekha to usse yakin nhn ho raha tha ki vo kya dekh rahi thi....aisa lag raha tha jaise vo jaagti aankhon se sapna dekh rahi hai....kuch der tak naina ne kuch nhn kaha...bas vo aankhon mein aansun liye usse dekti rahi....vo ek tasveer thi jo raj ne usse di hai...jismein naina,raj aur naveen ek saath khade hain....aur muskura rahe hain...raj ne vo tasveer banwaayi thi....

naina-sir ye gift....aapne kaise??mujhe to yakeen hi nhn ho raha ki main kya dekh rahi hoon...

raj-ye ek sapna hai naina...jo poora to nhn ho paayega lekin sapna poora nhn hoga isska matlab ye to nhn ki hum vo sapna dekhein hi nhn...

iss par naina ke aansoon ruk nhn paaye aur vo uski aankhon se behne lage....

raj-janti ho naina jab se tum yahan aayi ho..tab se main hamesha yahi sochta tha ki agar naveen zinda hota tab jab milte to shayad itni takleefon se guzarna na padta...agar vo hota to shayad itna dard aur itna khaalipan na hota...bas ussi sapne ko iss tasveer mein poora karne ki koshish ki hai maine....aisi hi ek tasveer mere paas bhi hai aur ye tumhaare liye...

par naina abhi bhi khamosh thi...

raj-naina kya hua??????tumhein ye pasand......

naina-bhut pasand aaya....isse pyaara gift mujhe aaj tak kisi ne nhn dia aur naa hi mere liye isse azeez aur koi gift ho sakta hai....main aapko bata nhn sakti ki ye mere liye kya mayene rakhta hai...isse main kbhi apne aap se alag nhn karungi...kbhi bhi nhn

raj-tum udaas to nhn ho na...i mean main issi liye keh raha tha ki....

naina-nhn sir....aapko aise kyun lag raha ki isse dekhkar main udaas ho gai hun....balki main aapko bata nhn sakti ki isse paakar main kitni khush hun...isse dekhkar aise lag raha ki aaj meri graduation day ceremony mein naveen bhaiyaa bhi shamil hue hain....thankyou soooo much sir.....ye keh kar naina raj ko hug karti hai....

raj ko pehle to samjh nhn aaya ki vo kya kare...fir ussne dhire se naina ko vaapis hug kiya....vo dono kuch der tak aankhen band kiye ek doosre ko hug kiye hue the....par achanak se bahar se kuch aawazein aane lagi...hostel ki baaki girls baatein karti hui ball ki taraf jaa rahi thi....aur unki baaton ki aawaaz se raj aur naina vaapis hosh mein aaye

raj{slightly embarrased}-ahh mujhe ab jaana chahiye...tum jaldi se tyaar ho jaao nhn to ball ke liye late ho jaaogi...i'll c u there

naina{also slightly embarassed}-yes sir...i'll be there on time...

aur fir raj vahan se chala gaya aur naina taiyaar hone lagi...par dono ko hi ek doosre ke liye kuch khaas mehsoos ho raha tha...par jahan raj ko pata tha ki aisa kyun ho raha hai...vahin doosri taraf naina ko koi andaaza nhn tha ki usse kya aur kyun mehsoos hota hai har baar....

cut to ball

almost sab taiyaar ho ke wahan pohanch chuke hain ...sab ladkon ne black suit pehna hai aur ladkiyon ne white....raj ko bhi aadhe ghante se zyaada ho gaya hai ball mein aaye hue..tabhi peeche se koi whistle karta hai...vo peeche dekhta hai to....

raj-dr.shalini aapne mujhe dekhke whistle kiya??{totally red ahhh not wid anger...raj hai sharma raha hai}LOLLOLLOL

shalini-ofcourse captain...app aaj bhut hi hot jo lag rahe hain..

raj-dr.shalini aap ye.....

shalini-dont be embarrassed captain...compliment hai

raj-ahh thnxxx{still embarrassed}

shalini{laughing}-poor she!!!!!!!!!!!

raj-she who?

shalini-ur would be wife{laughing}

raj-what???????my wife??????ab vo kahan se beech mein aa gai?????aur ek minute why poor????????

shalini-ahh no offence captain but aap mere ek chote se compliment pe itna sharma rahe ho pata nhn uske saamne kya karoge...i mean u know shaadi ke baad aap aur vo....

raj-what r u saying dr.shalini plzzzzz...i mean...mera matlab hai ki i dont feel comfortable talking about such things..

shalini-such things??captain main to keh rahi thi ki shaadi ke baad aap aur vo saath rehnge aur tab vo ek doosre ko compliment bhi to diya karenge to kya aap tab bhi aise hi sharmaayenge???aur shaadi ke baad hi kyun shaadi se pehle bhi to compliment denge na?????{she said dis trying very hard to control her laughter}

raj-ahh sorry vo mujhe laga ki aap....{aur fir raj ek dum chup ho gaya}

shalini{trying to be serious}-ahh kya laga aapko captain...

raj ko aise lag raha tha ki sharam ke maare vo bas abhi zameen mein dhass jaayega....aur shalini ko samjh mein nhn aa raha tha ki vo apni hassi kaise roke kyunki vo janti thi ki raj ne kya socha tha...usne jaan bhooj ke raj ko tang karne ke liye ye sab bola tha...

raj-ahh dr.shalini i think i need some waterLOLLOLLOL

shalini-yes i think soo too

ye bolte hi raj vahan se bhaagte hue gayab ho gaya....usne paani peeya aur khud se hi baatein karne laga...ye dr.shalini ek din mujhe maarkar hi chodengi....par main kya itna sharmata hun?????ahh nhn main itna to nhn sharmata...aur main apni wife se?????naaa koi apni biwi se thode na sharmata hai...jaise jaise raj ye sab sochta gaya bechaara aur bhi confuse hota gaya....tabhi ek waiter uske paas aaya

waiter-sir drink

raj-ahh thanx

waiter jaane hi waala tha ki

raj-aise nhn hota na?????

waiter-sir?????

raj-arre koi apni biwi se thode na sharmata hai

waiter bechaare ko kuch samjh nhn aa raha tha....usse laga ki raj ne kaafi pee rakhi hai iss liye aisi baatein kar raha hai

waiter-kya hua sir?????

raj-kuch nhn yaar....tum bataoo apni biwi se koi sharmaata hai kya?????

waiter-pata nhn sir meri biwi to shaadi ke baad ek hi mahine mein hamaare dhobi ke saath bhaag gai thi...to mujhe kuch zyaada pata nhnLOL

raj ko ye baat sunn kar hosh aaya ki vo apni confusion mein ek waiter se baat kiye ja raha hai...

raj-ohh i m soo sorry for u...thankyou soo much for d drink...{ye kehkar raj wahan se bhaagne hi waala tha ki...}

waiter-nhn sir aise bhi koi karta hai bhala...pehle shaadi karo fir bhaaag jaao vo bhi bina bataye...ye kehkar waiter rone laga...

raj ko samjh nhn aa raha tha vo kya kare......ussne apni jeb se rumaal nikaala aur waiter ko diya waiter ne rumaal lekar drinks ki tray raj ko pakda di.....raj vo tray ki taraf dekhkar sochne laga ki vo kahan fass gaya

waiter-aapko nhn pata sir vo karamjali chhitti mein kya likhar bhaaagi thi

raj-karamjali kaun????LOLLOL

waiter{zor se rote hue bola}-arre hamari vo janamjali biwi aur kaun?????

raj{gehri saans lete hue}-oh ok

waiter-likhti hai ki mere saath rehkar usse ghar ke saare kaam karne padte hain....kam se kam uss dhobi ke saath kapde dhone aur press karne ka kaam to nhn karna padega...ab aap hi batayiye ye bhi koi kaaran hua??????

raj--u r right...par honi ko kaun taal sakta hai..tum himmat se kaam lo sab theek ho jaayega[ye kehkar raj ne fir wahan se bhagne ki koshish ki]

waiter-nhn sir....aap hamaara dukh nhn samajh sakte...par fir bhi aap se baaat karke hamara mann halka ho gaya....bhagwaam kare aapki shaadi jald ho par ek baat kahenge sir apne ghar mein dhobi ko kbhi na aane dena agar biwi kapde dhone ko na maane to aap dho lena lekin jo bhi ho jaaye kisi dhobi ko apne ghar mat aane dena

raj-dont worry..main dhobi kya kisi cook,maali ya sweeper ko bhi ghar mein aane nhn doonga....ab khush???????ye kehkar raj ne waiter ko uski tray waapis pakda di.....ab tum jaao

waiter-theek hai sir par yaad rakhiye ki kabhi bhi....

raj-ahh i know no entry for dhobiLOL

ye sunkar vo waiter khush ho kar wahan se chala gaya....aur raj ne ek deep breath li aur bola-god yahi sunna baaki tha

par raj ko pata nhn tha ki ye saara nazaara uske saare pyaare cadets ne dekha jinhein ye to pata nhn tha nhi tha ki raj ne waiter se shuru mein kya baat ki aur kyun ki par unhon ne waiter waala part saara dekha....aur ab sab ek doosre ke uppar chad kar hass rahe hain...aur iss baat ka bhi saara shrey dr.shalini ko jaata hai jinhon ne unko raj ki taraf dekhne ko kaha tha

huda-sunna bhaiyo..no entry for dhobi[hehehehe]

yudi-mujhe to captain rajveer ka future dikhayii de raha hai...ki vo apni fauj ki naukri chod chaad kar ghar mein kapde dho rahe hain....

pooja-oye sirf kapde hi nhn...sunna nhn tune..khaana, jhaadoo maarna aur maali ka kaam bhi sir hi karne waale hain...haaye mera shahrukh kitna cute lagega na bageeche meinEmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassed

ali-pooja bas bhi kijiye humein sir ka mazaak nhn banana chahiye ek to bechaare wahan uss waiter ke sath fass gaye aur hum yahan sab unka mazaak bana rahe hain

pooja-oye ali....to aakhri din bhi apne ye prawachan band karke enjoy nhn kar sakta?????

aalekh-ye lo hogai mahabharat shuru.....

shalini-ok guys bas bhi karo...captain rajveer apni shaadi ke baad kya kya karte hain vo hum baad mein dekh hi lenge....lekin abhi hum sab jis kaam ke liye aaye hain vo kyun nhn kar rahe??????

ali-kya mam?????

shalini-dance...i hope u all remember that

pooja-sab yaad hai mam hum bas yahan naina ka wait kar rahe hain...vo bas aati hi hogi....

shalini-ohkk

tabhi vahan raj aata hai---

raj-hey guys aap sab yahan kya kar rahein hain???cum on guys go and dance

yudi-vo hum ye discuss kar rahe the ki shaadi ke baad ghar mein dhobiiiiiiiiiiiiiii.............{isske aage vo kuch bol nhn paaya kyunki aalekh ne usse peeche se zor ki taang maari thi}

raj-wat did u say?

huda-ahh kuch nhn sir....hum to bas yahan phoolan ka wait kar rahe hain

raj-huda ab aap yahan se pass out hone waale hain agar aapki posting cadet singh ke saath kahin hui to plzzzz wahan sab ke saamne usse phoolan mat keh dena{ussne muskurate hue kaha}

huda-kya karun sir aadat pad gai hai....aur waise bhi aaj bhi jab uske baare mein sochta hun na bas dimag mein bomb hi ghoomte hain jo bas fatne ka intzaar kar rahe hain....

issspar sab zor zor se hasne lage....yahan tak ki raj bhi na chahte hue apni hassi rok nhn paaya

pooja-lo aa gai naina

sab ne entry ki taraf dekha to ek pal ke liye sab kuch bol nhn paaye... sab naina ko aise dekh rahe the ki jaise ye pehchanne ki koshish kar rahe ho ki ye naina hi hai na????aur raj ussne to kabhi socha bhi tha ki naina aisi bhi lag sakti hai...pehle bhi naina kayi baar iss tarah taiyaar hui hai...par aaj kuch khaas tha...bas raj ye samjh nhn paa raha tha ki vo khaas kya tha...tabhi usne mann mein bola....."white"......yess....yeh colour hi tumhaari khoobsoorati ko aur badha raha hai....ye colour hi tumhaari chupi hui masumiyat ko saamne lekar aaya hai...sach naina kaash main tumse keh pata ki tum aaj kitni khoobsurat lag rahi ho.....

aur tabhi naina sab ke paas aa jaati hai

end of part 3 

note-i know aap mein se kayion ko aaj characters mein kaafi change lagi hogi....jaise raj aur shalini ko convo...raj ka ye comic touch...khud se funny se sawaal karna...but i told u guys ki chahe ye fic lrl pe based hai but even den try n percieve d characters differntly....sirf lrl ka background hai story aur characters differnt honge.....wid some similarities ofcourse....

and yes one more thing if u guys r not liking dis comedy element in my updates den too u guys can tell me i'll start writing d story on more serious notes....actually i hd decided to include dese comedy sequences just to make the fic light and entertaining....sirf seriousness hone se bhi fic thodi boring ho jaati hai...that's wat i think...but lemme know wat u all think.....waiting for ur comments

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