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Chapter one

  It was a beautiful day where Nadia lived. The rain had just stopped pouring and the sun was peeking through the clouds and through the tree branches. The rain left little drops that looked like little diamonds everywhereEmbarrassed Nadia had just finnshed packing her things to go home from school when she decided to shoot some hoops in the school courtyard. Anything to get away from home she thought. Nadia set her bag near the benches and picked up a ball. She dribbled it a few times and then lazily threw it into the basket. Of course it missed, like it always did. She just needed something to do to past the time and right now (for some strange reason) this seemed like the perfect thing. She was tired of all the stress, and pressure, and sadness she had to deal with at home. Atleast here, she had peace and quiet. And she could just sit and think and look at the beautiful scenery...  
 
Nadia threw the ball again and instead of swishing threw the net it banged off the wall and hit her on the headLOL "Ughhhhh" she yelled. "Why do the balls always have to hit meAngry Eww.. that souded a little weird..." Now that she started talking again she thought she might as well just tell about her whole day to this little ball.
 
"Do you know what happened today ball? Wait, calling you ball sounds a little weird. I need to name you. Now let's see if there are any special marks on you so I can tell the diffrence between you and other balls." Nadia looked all around the ball and found that it had small dark lines that none of the other balls had. "Hmmm" she thought. "I think I'll name you Oliver! Yeah that's right. So as I was saying... OliverEmbarrassed Today I did something very bad. I was in line and I was talking to this other girl about our music teacher. I was making all these funny jokes and laughing when I heard that same teacher call me from behindShocked She said... Nadia... what is this I hear. Now I have detention after school tomorrow. I've never really had detention before... I wonder what it's like. Nadia threw the ball against the wall now. "OOoooh that has to hurt. Sorry Oliver it must feel horrible to be thrown against the wallLOL It looks like you're a new ball though... it's ok you'll get used to itWink Je promise. 
 
She tossed the ball a few more times and decided it was time to head home. She sighed. Home.
 
Life was hard living with a crazy family. With a sister whose every moment was spent trying to hurt you. And not that kind of hurting. The hurting that makes you feels so bad... and terrible. Like you can't do anything right. And then having no one to talk to about your pain. It's like burning yourslef on the insideOuch But Nadia's learned to deal with it. And to never trust someone with your heart. She was just about to leave when she had one more thing to say to Oliver.
 
"Oliver, I have to go now but I promise to come back and visit more often. And if it's ok, maybe I can talk to you like this more often?Embarrassed You see, I don't have anyone to talk to right now except for God of course. But it always helps to talk to someone physical too. Even if it's just a ball. Something that can't even talk back. But you're a special ball. And don't eve let anyone tell you that you aren't!!Big smile Good bye Oliver..."  She set him back on the shelf and sped off on her bike into the woods.
 
 
 
 
 
Well?LOL How did you guys like my first chapter? Please comment and CRITISIZE. This story is a lot diffrent from my usual writing so for some of my readers it might take some time getting used to...Tongue I know right now at the begining Nadia sounds realy weird and childish.. but she's not. You'll get to know her as time goes by..Wink Please tell me what you thinkBig smile  And also if you want me to PM you when I update.


Edited by *Nishi* - 17 April 2009 at 6:45pm

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Posted: 17 April 2009 at 7:59pm | IP Logged
Hi Nishi! I really liked it!
 
The part with Oliver was ultra cute, I do the same with me diary, haha!
There are a few grammar mistakes, but nothing big at all thats unfixable. I'd like to learn more about Nadia's home life. She's a really interesting character.
 
Again, I loved it...so please update quickly!

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Posted: 17 April 2009 at 10:41pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by MusicalAiswarya

Hi Nishi! I really liked it! thank u thank u thank thank uHug
 
The part with Oliver was ultra cute, I do the same with me diary, haha! yeahh..Embarrassed
There are a few grammar mistakes, but nothing big at all thats unfixable. Yeah I was writing in a hurryLOL I can fix it later I'd like to learn more about Nadia's home life. She's a really interesting character. 
 
Again, I loved it...so please update quickly!
 
wow thank u so much yaarHug 
thank you so much for reading and commenting
i'll try to updat as soon as I canBig smile

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Posted: 18 April 2009 at 5:57am | IP Logged
Good work!!

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Posted: 18 April 2009 at 9:48am | IP Logged

Nadia... she is a nice girl Smile, she has got her first detention in the first chap.. what a beginning! LOL.. j/king...  Smile

cant remember who are the other characters nor how many they are... Confused glad of that in the first chap, there were less characters Big smile thanku!
Oliver... is it a small ball? Tongue oh btw, i too think that the oliver part was cute... Smilehow old is Nadia? yep, she sounds childish talking to a ball, and immature saying things about balls... she reminds me of someone, who writes wierd things about balls LOL...
ouch... is her sis younger or older?? that makes me guess better wich kind of torture Nadia bears... LOLConfused no really... Smile, we older sis are different and comprensive u know.. SmileLOL ok enough!
yes, its good to express ur feelings to something physical, our faith, isnt alway strong enough... and sometimes even if that physical thing doesnt reply u, atleast u know that its hearing u, coz is there... and u dont always need a reply back... right? Smile

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Posted: 18 April 2009 at 12:54pm | IP Logged
Your welcome Nishi! Great job again!

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Posted: 18 April 2009 at 4:21pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by NIDIZ

Good work!!
thanksBig smile

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