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resered too*LOLTongue

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Girl_2007

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Posted: 27 May 2009 at 9:23am | IP Logged
Originally posted by legallyzoya

 
how long Amel and Arman dosti remains...?? omg... lol i dont care... LOL they can be in love after fighting too... ! its a bollywood classic! LOLLOLLOL
dont worry i wont make it too flimy....but yeah drama adds touch...LOL
yeah but i dont want that either.. LOLTongue there is already a great drama in ur story Big smile so i guess they might get close in sum dangerous scene.. Tongue
actually what i love the most is when Arman is telling the story... TongueEmbarrassedBig smile
and i dont know what my reaction wud be if EC knows my name... Tongue i would be surprised, i mean, i dont go out in night (not allowed yetSleepy) nor in cloudy days, and he cant come out in good weather.. so... Sleepy really not expecting that... LOL
Haha...have hopes. he might be the new dominoz pizza delivery boy :p
aaawwww! thats so cute EmbarrassedTongue

but i know how Arman must have felt at his crush knowing his name... Embarrassed i felt the same once in a time.. dont ask me how or why... LOLLOLTongue
not now. later u have to tell :p
ya ya... LATER LOLTongue
i need inspiration to write .....
well, sincerely i dont have any objections in telling u, whenever u want Smile
afterall, every love story is the same...Shocked LOL excuse me.. i didnt mean that... Dead
waiting for ur next update Big smile
today!
 
i readed it in the very day u updated, i think, but cudnt comment, sorry...

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Posted: 27 May 2009 at 9:39am | IP Logged

er... i have to read Samias POV again to understand it completely... Tongue right now all that i can say is that great going! Clap this is really seeming like a book, written by a professional and expert writer Big smile

ouch... Rahil... poor boy, u know, every person unfolds a complex story, another world, that are the kind of stories wich i like reading when i dont matter reading reality Smile, i mean, when im tired of cheesy "luv" stories..
and wich i like to write too.. Tongue
well, about Rahil, he is another cute guy, like Armaan Tongue and the way that Armaans cares for him, knows what he wants or what is better for the moment, shows that i wasnt wrong in guessing his personality.. Tongue
WOW! so Armaans secret is an open secret! LOL poor boy, everyone makes fun of him yaar.. OuchEmbarrassedTongue
just friends, celebrity couples.. ROFL
that scene was worth clapping Zoya Clap loved it! Big smile and im sure if i read it again, i will laugh again wid the same intensity... LOL u are capable of making my day Big smileTongue
thanks! Big smile
update soon please!!

legallyzoya

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Posted: 02 June 2009 at 8:56am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Girl_2007

@Nishi...thanks!HugHug

er... i have to read Samias POV again to understand it completely... Tongue right now all that i can say is that great going! Clap this is really seeming like a book, written by a professional and expert writer Big smile

aww thanks a lott!!

ouch... Rahil... poor boy, u know, every person unfolds a complex story, another world, that are the kind of stories wich i like reading when i dont matter reading reality Smile, i mean, when im tired of cheesy "luv" stories..
and wich i like to write too.. Tongue
thats nice, i hope ig et to read ur story as wellTongueBig smile
well, about Rahil, he is another cute guy, like Armaan Tongue and the way that Armaans cares for him, knows what he wants or what is better for the moment, shows that i wasnt wrong in guessing his personality.. Tongue
WOW! so Armaans secret is an open secret! LOL poor boy, everyone makes fun of him yaar.. OuchEmbarrassed
not really...thats only the fun they have...everyone loves armaan and i dint potray his chacrectar right
he is supposed to be really smartTongue
just friends, celebrity couples.. ROFL
that scene was worth clapping Zoya Clap loved it! Big smile and im sure if i read it again, i will laugh again wid the same intensity... LOL u are capable of making my day Big smileTongue
aww thank u so much!!
thanks! Big smile
update soon please!!

i sure will...im just a bit busy with my classes now...thanks a lot again!Hug

Girl_2007

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Posted: 03 June 2009 at 6:11am | IP Logged
Originally posted by legallyzoya

Originally posted by Girl_2007

@Nishi...thanks!HugHug

er... i have to read Samias POV again to understand it completely... Tongue right now all that i can say is that great going! Clap this is really seeming like a book, written by a professional and expert writer Big smile

aww thanks a lott!!

ouch... Rahil... poor boy, u know, every person unfolds a complex story, another world, that are the kind of stories wich i like reading when i dont matter reading reality Smile, i mean, when im tired of cheesy "luv" stories..
and wich i like to write too.. Tongue
thats nice, i hope ig et to read ur story as wellTongueBig smile
well, about Rahil, he is another cute guy, like Armaan Tongue and the way that Armaans cares for him, knows what he wants or what is better for the moment, shows that i wasnt wrong in guessing his personality.. Tongue
WOW! so Armaans secret is an open secret! LOL poor boy, everyone makes fun of him yaar.. OuchEmbarrassed
not really...thats only the fun they have...everyone loves armaan and i dint potray his chacrectar right
he is supposed to be really smartTongue
just friends, celebrity couples.. ROFL
that scene was worth clapping Zoya Clap loved it! Big smile and im sure if i read it again, i will laugh again wid the same intensity... LOL u are capable of making my day Big smileTongue
aww thank u so much!!
thanks! Big smile
update soon please!!

i sure will...im just a bit busy with my classes now...thanks a lot again!Hug
 
na well of course i know Arman is a smart and cool guy Tongue, wid a cool and smart hair cut WinkLOLTongue

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Posted: 09 June 2009 at 1:32pm | IP Logged

wow i love this story its really realistic u no wahh a mean/? lol

 
i fiink armaan and amel are very sweet and cyoote 2geva they wud mayk a sweet couple
 
sweet update
 
 
and armaan is so emotional? aww lol the first chapter made me laugh and i got wahh u wer saying crap damn shoot shit lol x
 
 
keep up the good work so far, plz update soon (am gettin impatient)

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update soon na...

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Posted: 26 June 2009 at 6:30am | IP Logged

Nias Point of View

 

'Armaan stop being so late alright!'  I told Armaan as he entered the car with Rahil.

' Don't you have patience at all?'

'No, God dint give me that one'.i would be perfect otherwise'

'Yeah youre perfect and Im Kali!'

'Shut up'first of all im mad at you'don't annoy me more'

'Why?' he asked

'Because you did not tell me!'

'tell you what?'

'That you spoke to Amel today''

'WHO TOLD YOU THAT? ' he looked at Rahil.

'Yoi told even Rahil and you cant tell me?'

'Excuse moi' Rahil said rasing his eyebrows.

'I meant, you don't even care about such things!'

'Who told you that?'

'Youre telling me you Care?'

'No I don't'but well he is my best friend I should be knowing such things''

'STOP IT!' Neal and Armaan yelled together.

I kept ym mouth shut.

'Nia'how did you know?' Armaan asked me again.

Yeh toh mujhe aise nahin chodhegha!

'I have my sources' I said with a huge grin and winked at him.

'Shitttttt'.Amel told you?' his mouth fell open.

'Maybe' I said.

'Whoaa whoa..what did she say?'

'That you spoke to her today''

' Gimme details!' he started jumping.

'Nananana' I taunted him. And Rahil joined me as well.

'She told you'soo, you think she likes me as well'maybe?' he asked turning slightly pink.

'NO, THEY PUT A STUPID BET ON YOU WHETHER YOU WILL SPEAK TO HER OR NO'.AND NIA WON. THAT'S WHY SHE CALLED. OKAY? JUST SHUT UP NOW' Neal yelled.

I would have yelled at Neal otherwise but I know what he is going through so I kept quiet and looked at Armaan.

'W-w-what? This is all about a bet?' he asked me, unable to digest whatever he heard.

'Not really''

'No really? Nia? ' he looked at me, and I never remembering feeling this guilty before. I felt like I betrayed him. And the worst thing is he did not yell at me, he just shut his mouth and stared out of the window. For the next 5 minutes no one spoke.

 

Neals Point of View

I felt bad about bursting Armaans bubble. But I was seriously pissed off! Like I don't have my own problems that are turning my world upside down now that I get o hear him yap all the time'and anyways whats the point in giving him false hope. We all know Amel wouldn't fall for him. Amel is smart, pretty and nice'she obviously gets her prince charming! I mean Armaans is nice' but, Never mind!

I wanted to apologize to him, but I couldn't, all I could think of was what happened in school'

* * *

7 hours back

Presidency High school

 

I entered my school after two weeks. And it felt so great to be back. I love my high school. Its said we have classes only till 10th grade here.

As I walked along the garden towards the Majestic school, I could remember all the football matches I played and I won, hours together I sat in the library coming up with the best essays and projects. Topping in my class always, tutoring students who needed help, joining various competitions only so that I get extra credits and  the ''Perfect Student of the year'' Award so that I get a scholarship to go to New Delhi to do my pre university college education {11th and 12th} .

The perfect student of the year award is given out every year and the winner gets free seat in 'St Joesephs Pre university college' In New Delhi. It was always been my dream to go there. They select only 27 students every year and train them. I hope I get it.

'You know if you go to Delhi I will really miss you Neal' Nia told me.

I looked at my twin, it was occasionally I go to see her senti. I smiled at her and told her 'That is if I get the scholarship'

'Duhhh you will get it!'

'You never know' I said, even though I pretty much knew it was mine!

' You have been in the students council you bought so many awards to the college, you always had your high grades'its all set Bhaay'

'Hopefully''  I said.

When we reached the main building I saw our school peon, John Dsouza, A.K.A Johndy.

'Hey Johndee!' Nia called out to him.

He smiled. 'How are you'll?'

'rocking as usual..wheres princy?' Nia asked.

'In his cabin..' Johndy said and we headed towards the office.

I knocked thrice at his door and then I heard my principal Mr. Desai say 'Come in'

We walked inside and wished him a good day.

'Neal my boy'how are you?'  he asked me ignoring Nia.

'I am fine sir, how are you?'

' I am fine..so tell me how come you'll came here..?'

'Sir actually we were wondering when the results were going to be out''

'By tomorrow..'

'Oh that's nice! And sir'about the scholarship..'

'Well after the results we will find out''

'Sir do you have the results?' I asked him.

'Yes but we cant let it out now yet'.after 3 hours''

'Sir please atleast mine..?'

After a few pleadings he goes all like 'Allright..' and clicks on his computer and tells me to take down my marks.

'English 121, Kannada 95, Hindi 98, Social studies 100, Mathematics 100 and Science 99!'

Nia jumped besides me.

'AWEOSME! Congrats brother'.youg et the scholarship!' She yelled and I hugged her.

Sir cleared his throat. We looked at him.

'I am sorry Neal but Keath got more marks than you did'.he gets the scholarship..'

'WHAT?' I practically yelled.

This couldn't happen.

'Sir'but the whole year Neal ahs performed better, Neal has bought much more laurels to the school than Keath did'.it is only fair-' but the khadoos principal stopped her .

'Im sorry'.but that's the rule!'

'WHAT RULE? NEAL SCORED BETTER THAN KEATH IN EVERY STINKING EXAM'THIS IS BECAUSE HE IS YOUR NEPHEW ISNT IT?!'

'Nia don't you know how to speak to your teachers?' Principal yelled at her as well.

Nia shut her mouth.

'Forget it Nia'' I said and walked off.

Nia tried to console me on our way back home as well.

Dad even spoke to the principal. But even out education system is so freaking corrupt.

               * * *

Rahils POV

'Sir, sir you've got a message''  A recorded voice spoke through my cell phone. I checked my inbox, it was a text sms from Arvind.  It said :

Results are out! Check out the website!

WHAT? RESULTS? CRAP!

'Guys our results are out'' I said.

'Oh yeah I forgot to mention that..' Nia said.

I stared at her 'You knew?'

'Yeah' she said.

Neal stared outside the window in his own thoughts and Nia looked like she couldn't care less.

'Whats up with you guys? ..Oh wait'you know your marks?' I asked .

'Yes' Nia replied.

'Whoaa'whats it'.bhayya please can you drive faster? I need to get online!' I said practically jumping.

Shit. Oh God please make me score well! Please, please , PLEASE!

'Bhaay got 98.1 % and I got 79.4%' she said.

'WHOAAAA'..OH MY GOD, THAT'S LIKE AWESOME'..NEAL CONGO'.SHEESH I WONDER HOW MUCH I SCORED!'  I said/yelled.

Armaan looked very tensed.

Till we reached the farm house I was the only one blabbering. My only company was the radio and apologetic glances from Nia to Armaan, which he ignored.

 

Amels POV

 

89%

 I stared at the computer screen for a few seconds and then blinked.

I GOT 89%.

AAAAAAAAAGHHHHHHHHHH.

DISTINCTION.

A w e s o m e!

And then I yelled 'Yaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaayyyyyyy'

Tanaaz, my grandmother grinned her fake-tooth grin and hugged me.

'Tanaaz I got 89%....yaaay!' I yelled again.

My maid Laxmi joined oru celebration as well. She bought a plate of laddos.

With my mouth filled with ladoo I ran towards the phone and called Ma.

After a few rings she picked up the phone :

'Mili? Got your marks?' she asked before I could say anything.

'Yes'Mooooommmmmm'..89%' I yelled.

'Amazing Mili am so proud of you'' she said, then the rest of her words got unaudible because of some animal screeching.

'What was that?' I asked mom.

She laughed 'Rahil got his marks'' she said.

'Ooooh how much? How much?'

'He got 86%, Armaan got 92%.....'

'AWESOME! And Neal and Nia?'

'98% and 79%'

'shut up. Did neal like top?'

'I guess'here you want to speak to them?'

'sure'

After a few moments I heard Neals voice.

'Hey' he said.

 but it dint sound as enthusiastic as usual. Infact he sounded dull.

'Hey Neal'congratulations'awesome! I am sooooo proud of you'!'

'Thankyou Mili....'

'Wont you ask me how much I scored?'

'Sorry'how much?'

'Not as perfect aas your 98% but im happy with my 89%'

'Oh wow'congratulations!'

'Thanks'.'

And there was silence. Minus Rahils yelling.

'Neal?'

'Yes?'

'Are you alright?'

'Yes'.here speak to Nia..'

And the voice changed.

'Hey mili'' I heard the familiar chirpy sound greet me.

'Heyyyaaa '..congratulations!!'  I said

'Thanks' she said. Even she sounded dull.

'why do you sound dull? Aren't you happy with ya marks?'

'No I am'.i was expecting less'' she said and I laughed.

'Hahah then you should delighted.'

'Mili listen he found'' but she was cut short and the voice changed.

'Heyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy Milllliiiiiiiiiiiiiiii congoooooooooooo' Rahils husky voice greeted me.

 '  H-H-Hey Rahil'congratulations!' I strutted.

'Thankyou thankyou'.how much did u score?'

'89%'

'oh wow'you beat me!' he said

I dint know what to say next.

'Oh wait..here speak to Armaan' he said.

'I don't want to speak to her;' I heard Armaans voice say.

And I felt very bad. Why would he say that?

That was so mean. I was right he is a freaking meanie.

But then after a few seconds Armaans voice said

'Hey Amel'congratulations''

'Thanks' I said.

And there was a long awkward pause.

'Umm Okay then ill keep the phone..bye'

'No..'

'huh?'

'Nia wants to speak to you..'

'Ohh. Okay'

'What's Armaans problem? Will a thousand pelicans attack him if he behaves nicely?' I asked Nia when she took the phone.

'Shut up'he is very nice kay! Its just that he found out about the bet'!' she said.


W h o o p s.

 

 

 

 

 



Edited by legallyzoya - 26 June 2009 at 6:33am

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