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The Beginning of Something.. (Update pg29[short]) (Page 5)

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Try to introduce some new characters in the story like her mom and dad. Smile

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aaaaw i loved the story, i mean, wat u wrote so far... Embarrassed its so beautiful, so lovely... makes me sigh in a daydreaming way... Tongue... and makes ppl to write beautiful comments... before reading it completely, i frankly thought that it was another piece of the story.. LOLEmbarrassed
well... if u want us to feel suspense, u must not discuss about scenes etc. so openly, neither say why he ignores her before posting the next part... LOLTongue but its ok, now im more relaxed to know that actually its not the "ghajini" feverLOL, but a lil revenge.. Tongue
hey, along wid the story, im loving the comments wich are meant for you... LOLEmbarrassed hope u dont mind much... just.. cant avoid it... Embarrassed
 
waiting eagerly for ur next update.. Big smile
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well, this part was... above all.... short!! too short!!  i wanted more...! Ouch

but its ok... i can understand it from a writers view... but i still want more from a readers view...LOLTongue...
anyway, my comment:
i liked, well, i always like the descriptionClap its, neither too much, neither too less, just perfect Smile
the way he confuses her, its a fact, a real fact... and, so, that makes this realistic. Clap
the next coversation.... i think, its really exciting! Big smile in real life, would seem a bit too fast to happen some random and sweet thing... but as we are all waiting eagerly for their meeting.. its ok, thanks! Big smile and that encreases the confussion feeling in her.. Clap and in us! SleepyLOL 
 
so, thank you for this part, and as for ur question... keep doing it as so far... if u are decided to continue wid this story till the end, then you can collect all chapters in the middle of it or in the end itself on 1st page Smile


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lol... u wrote at 3:00 am??... Shocked and did u sleep well after that?..
lol yeah.. confussion factor, but still, this girl is lucky... coz he is gonna meet her soon... and the confussion doesnt last much.. Tongue
glad u liked my comments... thanks to you for writting this story Big smile

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