Posted: 06 February 2009 at 12:42am
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reserved sam....have a great weekend!...will update the comments soon!
alright...extremely delayed sam...just had to much to cope with somehow, more than i would care for, its strange when somethings dont affect u the way they cud be aexpected to, n yet the efect they have is the least of the ones u can ignore n pass by...oh wel....all in its time thats one thing i wish n dont wish with equal fervour to be able to change!
the part...atul-angie...um delighted u got down to both of them in such a real way....ajie had been surfacing every now n then in little but significant bits, atul had been a rigid backbone to alot going on in the fic...but this part dealt so much more with their chars...it was much needed n perfectly timed nkudos for that....but....can i say...something abt parts of their conversation, to me felt like...um i duno it felt like...if i was narrating of turmoils as great in a curent situation, like not writing abt it, but speaking in a kind of frendship the two of them share, i feel like...in extremely crude words, i feel like my talking words cud have been alot more losely said....like....lets say much worse in terms of articulation...i mean we can, despite being the smartest with the way we talk, in watever language we do, at the grimmest of moments(is thats even a word but it shud tell u wat i mean) i feel like, the way arman had lost his track of using his best speaking skill with anjie...anjie shud have been close when she talked to atul, she was not far, but atul in reciprocation for the whole mindset he was in that moment sounded almost a rehersed talked , not thru n thru...but in tiny bits...u know its the worst thing to do, as a reader from me, that i tell u something u cud change in such a lengthy way when it ought to be the briefest, can u excuse me for that? um just bad at making points very often when i shud make them n move on, specially becoz against the whole update this one tiny bit was extremely inconsequential....n that i cant deny...a bunch of my buddies know..the nutters, that my brother proposed i shud be sold at the pharmacy as a depressant, he says it every time he asks me for editions to his papers!
oki...now th the superbly handled part...rahul muskaa,...was a stunner....the saxophone, to the fiddling of actions n thots, the finality in making his call...muskaans response, of half jesting, half thrilled anticipation which she doesnt know what to do with...it was all so completely real n so...ummm...its felt like i cud be sitting in there, being one of them. either one or even both n perform the scene in momnoact,.,,it was brillaint sam i can't think of a better way to have tackled the whole...its like...his sudden panic n consequent resigned calm at having said his confession...its such a real; thing when u do something uv been dying to, n not had the guts to, n it happens n u panic like u shud n then knowing that its all well done n dealt with now...u just start thinking of the other side...of wat it will take u too...n bcz u had wanted it to happen so long u cant even actually regret it completely!!..it was extremely real, n fantastically dealt with sam, kudos for that!
ridhima, armaan...brief, but point made well...he now, despite his doubts, believes he can take some authority n she lets him exert the rights, very settling, enjoyed the tranquility is created in the space they share....n the last...hahahah.. armaan wonders who cud be hurt by her having sid yes to him n now rahul in his absolutrely anothoer world anguish says just something which may make armaan re think??? um wondering if u will take the tarck on to something like tha, i trust u to never drag issues...but um wondering if u will go into a misunderstanding like that, its all so likely to happen n it seemed evident that u set the stage for it!
alright that a hell of a long comment, one of these daz um certain u will, in ur end of the update remarks admonish me for these lectures n tell me not make appearnce on the thread again!...il try to fix my blabbing soon, it hasnt worked in 23 years though i shud forewarn!
Edited by spln - 07 February 2009 at 2:27pm