Posted: 15 years ago
I read the updates .....Its gud but abhi story is in its initial phase na Edited by suhana_dixit - 15 years ago
Posted: 15 years ago
damn cool
awesome
superb
update soon
Posted: 15 years ago
that was so good
i just loved it
plz continue soon
Posted: 15 years ago

Interesting. The start was nice. PLS CONTINUE SOON.

Posted: 15 years ago
hey I just read your ff and i found it really interesting. however it seems a little bare if you know what i mean...for example you could describe the situations and the characters a bit more and then the story would really come alive....this is just a suggestion of course cause I love RN and you seem to have a lot of bright ideas regarding them
Posted: 15 years ago
Originally posted by sea_nyx


hey I just read your ff and i found it really interesting. however it seems a little bare if you know what i mean...for example you could describe the situations and the characters a bit more and then the story would really come alive....this is just a suggestion of course cause I love RN and you seem to have a lot of bright ideas regarding them
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
thanks
Posted: 15 years ago
Originally posted by starasdf


πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘gr8 updateπŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘
 
😑😑😑he gave her money?!?!?!😑😑😑
 
πŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜†LOL she showed him, throwing a rock and than stuffin a 1000rps in his handπŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜†
 
πŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜†awww poor Raj in a bad mood, she showed him alrightπŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜†
 
πŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜†Karan is too funnyπŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜†
 
cont. soon
 
 
                 Star⭐️
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
thanks
Posted: 15 years ago
Originally posted by srojaleen


too gud.
ud soon.
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
thanks
Posted: 15 years ago
Originally posted by prerna1


that was so good
i just loved it
plz continue soon
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
thanks
Posted: 15 years ago

n aur kripa ghar aate ha

dia-di eh aap

dia is laughing like hell

ma-are dia kya hua

dia-ma aap di ko zara dekhye

ma-hey bhaagwan yeh tere main itne mud kaise lag gaye

n-ma us carbale larke ne mere dress par yeh mud laga dia aur uper se aapko pata mujhe ek cheque bhi de the eh paisebale log hote he asse ha

ma-aacha aacha ab jaake haath muh dhole
 
dia-oh dii
 
n-shut up
 
n room main jaate ha
 
ma-kripa baith beta main kuch khanna late hu
 
ma kitchen main jaate ha
 
kripa jaake tv dekhne lagte ha
 
n fresh up hoke aate ha
 
kripa aur dia n ko dekh ke phir se hasne lagte ha
 
n-kya hua tum dono ko
 
kripa-kuch nahin
 
dia-di sach aap
 
n-ma dekho na yeh dono mujh par hase jaa rahe ha
 
ma-kripa dia kun has rahe ho tum dono n par sorr bolo
 
kripa-sorry n
 
dia-sorry didi
 
n-its ok
 
ma-aao tum log aake nasta kar lo
 
n kripa dia sab log nasta kar rahe ha
 
ma-n main tere masi ke ghar jaa rahe hu
 
n-thik ha ma
 
ma masi ghar jaate ha
 
n kripa aur dia 3 room main jaate ha
 
idher
 
karan aur raj bar main jaate ha
 
raj is drinking
 
karan ka mobile bajta ha
 
karan-hello
 
nandini-kaha ho tum
 
karan-jaan main woh raj
 
nandini-pata tha mujhe us raj ke saath he hoge tum waise abhie kaha ho
 
karan-woh jaan hum bar main ha
 
nandini-karan ghar wapis aa jaao jaldi
 
karan-nandini abhi
 
nandini-ha ahie
 
karan-par jaan
 
nandini-karan agar tum abhie wapis nahin aae na toh tumhe aaj raat guestroom main sona hoga
 
karan-jaan plz
 
nandini-no way tum abhie wapis aa rahe warna
 
karan-ok ok i am coming
 
karan -raj woh
 
raj-tu jaa nandini tera intezar kar rahe hoge
 
karan-tu bhi ab ghar jaa
 
raj-nahin
 
karan-raj chor de ab gussa jaa ghar jaa
 
raj-karan us larke ne mere insult ke
 
karan-are chor na ab chal main tujhe ghar drop kr deta hu
 
raj-nahin tu jaa main bad main jaaynga
 
karan -ok
 
 
karan ghar jaata ha
 
karan aake nandini ko hug karta ha
 
karan-hi jaan
 
nandini-yaad a gaye mere
 
karan-yeh tum kya bol rahe ho
 
nandini-karan sara din tum office main rahete ho aur phir shayam ko roz tum aapne us raj ke saath bar main chale jaate ho tumhe toh mere koi chinta he nahin ha
 
karan-aasa mat kaho jaan i love u
 
nandini-plz eh bar bar i love u kahena bad karo bilkul film type lagta ha har baat par i love u
 
karan-jaan tum hamesha kranti ke mood main kun rahete hu thora romantic baate karo na
 
nandini-ha raat ke 11 baje romantic baate mujhse nahin hoge
 
karan-jaan jaan plz aaj maaff kar do tum dekhna kal se main shayam ko 5 baje ghar chala aayunga plz plz
 
nandini-thik ha last time
 
karan-haiiiiiiiiiii
 
karan nandini ko aapne bahon main leke bed par litta ha
 
karan-nandini tum na gussa main bilkul aache nahin lagte
 
nandini smiles
 
aaluwalia house
 
n dia dono so gaae ha
 
ma bister thik kar rahe ha aur papa college ke copies check kar rahe ha
 
ma-suniye aaj main bina ke ghar gaye the
 
papa-hmm
 
ma-bina ka beta itna bara ho gaa ha bina bol rahe the mahesh ke shaadi kara dega
 
papa-hmm
 
ma-aur sahe bhi toh ha ghar main bahu ayege toh kitna aacha hoga
 
papa-hmm
 
ma-par mere kismat main yeh sukh kaha
 
ma rone lagte ha
 
papa-plz ab phir se suru mat ho jaana
 
ma-ha ha main chup he rahete hu har waqt aap mujhe ek baat baataye kya aapko kabhie alekh ke yaad nahin aate
 
papa-plz mujhse is bare main koi baat nahin karne ha kal subhe mujhe jaldi uthna ha light bad kar do
 
ma light bad karke rote rote so jaate ha
 
 
 

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