Posted: 29 December 2008 at 9:43am | IP Logged
Hello Ms. Day_Dreamer, Ika right?
1st of all, welcome, im not sure about ur stay here.. but phir bhi, even if its only while updating the time that ur here, welcome.
hope u enjoy.
lol.. neither i have watched DMG, neither i have ever readed it on fics.. but frankly speaking, it was the writters nickname this time wich pushed me to read it, [coz i remembered the text in wich u describe ur 2 worlds.
], and i was right, i didnt got dissapointed at all.
its amazingly great written, i just love the way u express the scenes.
well, widout more delay, my comments on the shots.
1st one: Obsession
i liked really really very much this beautiful story. it express something so true that i didnt even fall on thinking about it. its a beautiful concept and idea wich u have decided to tell, and i loved the end, i mean, coz, u are right, there wasnt any other end, otherwise the story wudnt have been wat it is now.
well, as i said, i dont know rahul.. nor muskaan.. but, the mad obsession wich hes supposed to have, and the changing of that obsession into the realization of truth its clearly visible
first, he doesnt want to listen or understand anything, then, somewhere he feels her love, but his obsessions wins over him, and finally, after her explanation, he feels helpless, or impotent at so many information in so less time, and then, the beginning of the outcome.
of course the dialogues are all matching perfectly wid the differents situations
lastly, the toughts of rahul, of his short love life being the punishment of his obsessions, were really touchy and full of meaning.
about ur note, well, for me, love has no other description than a cocktail of feelings.
coz it has differents tastes, differents shades and different feelings all under one same name, love.
2nd one: Silent confession
1st of all, i wanna say, u r a great writter
, yeah, again.
coz the first thing wich i noticed is the way of transmiting the things.
, Muskaans (Rahuls too) dialogues are obviously different, and quite more light-hearted or adorable than the previous storys.
and i liked very much the line: "A quiet and calm night, peaceful; but this peace is making Muskaan very much restless. "
coz it has opposite words and well, its good made.
so cute!! well.. i found cute when she falls and hes on her top, but muskaan still doesnt loose her temper..
just scolds him, accusing him of careless.
and well.. the next paragraph, its romantic, passionated... it makes melt anyone, i mean, any reader..
i liked the description of their thoughts and reactions at each movement.
and although i thought that it wud continue after the kiss on the neck, but nop, there rahuls feels shes tired and tells her to sleep.
thats so sweet.
then goodnight kisses.. and its morning...
well, the faith they have on each other, its very lovely.
and then the concept of silent confession comes out.
, even more clear.
well, i liked very much both stories, more the 1st one.
. thank u for sharing it wid us, and happy new year in advance.