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I have been thinking of penning this for a while.

As we all know (or anticipate and may be wanted) that it will be Raj who will slip down the love lane first and will fall with his head down for Kranti in love. I am presenting a scenario for the same.

 

Raj and Kranti (referred as R and K henceforth saving a bit on my poor typing) are asked by chaiji to go to the temple of their kuldevi as a part of the ritual where the new daughter in law of the family has to go and offer prayers along with her husband. Since BBR throws a fit both Chalji and Bua ji couldn't accompany them and Kullu and keval were in any case not interested. So RK set course together. Both are irritated with the scenario but then left with no other option they decided to bear with each other.

 

Both of them were sitting quite and there was an uncomfortable calm in the car.

 

R: Are you hungry?

K: No

 

 After this sort or no conversation the journey continues for some more time.

Suddenly car comes to a halt. and K is shaken out of her quite boredom.

 

K: why have you stopped the car?

R: I am tired of driving and the temple is still far hence I stopped to have a cup of tea. U can join if u want to or you can remain sitting in the car if you have an issue.

 

R starts walking towards to the roadside tea stall leaving K behind in the car. Who is still sitting in the car. He sits on one of the charpai (Cot) and orders some tea for himself. And then stretches his legs looking towards K and giving smug smiles to her, to irritate her further. And moment he realises that K is getting irritated he calls the guy and orders some pakora's for himself. And feels even nicer.

On the other side K is sitting in the car and getting irritated K to herself,

 

"R is doing this on purpose to irritate me otherwise he even has water after boiling and he is having roadside tea and pakoras to bug me.

He needs to be taught a lesson"

 

The scene shifts to R who is in the middle of chewing his pakoras and sipping his tea looks up to see K's Irritated face once again and suddenly realizes that she is not there in the car anymore. He gets very worried starts looking here and there not realizing that he is holding a mirchi pakora in his hand which he promptly ends up chewing while getting up. He starts getting hiccups due to the chilly he chewed starts to choke ( I am assuming this cos he has stayed in London for a very long time and is not use to spices of India)

Suddenly a hand appears with a glass of water and he sips it and looks up to say thank you and stops in between realizing that it was K standing with an amused smile on her lips.

 

K: If you have freshened up shall we leave?

R: Yes, let's go.

 

They start the journey again. K looks at R who is still suffering form the burn of chilly. And has tears in his eyes.

 

K: Are you ok?

R: Yes.

K: Doesn't look like though.

 

She pulls out a piece of sugar boiled candy form her bag which she always carries with her and offers it to him. Since he is driving she puts it in his mouth, and sweet candy soothes R's nerves immediately.

 

R: Thank you!

K: You are welcome, However be careful that you don't take pangas with Indian mirchy again it is very teekha for you to handle.

 

She gives him a smug smile and he a dirty look.

 

R: Looks like it is about to rain. Lets try and reach the temple fast.

K: Yeah anyway I don't want to get stuck anywhere with you for a company.

 

Again exchange of dirty looks.

 

And before R could hit the accelerator it starts pouring cats and dogs.

 

R: We cannot carry on with this journey even the road is not visible.

K: (looking visible irritated) we need to look for some place to stay cant sit in the car for the whole time.

 

R spots a inn kind of a place (This always happened in such scenerios however it is not a lone hut) R knocks at the door and one woman appears at the door in the mean time K is sitting in the car. R talks to the woman who allows them to stay with them for the night as it is already late and even if the rain stops it will not be safe for them to go any further.

 

R: Come, We can stay here for the night.  (Picks up his bags and moves on)

K follows him struggling with her huge bag (which is a big bag cos it has all the offerings for the temple)

R keeps walking ahead without offering help.  The woman of the house shows them their room. It is a spacious room with one double bed and couch in there. The house belongs to a person who works with the forest department and is an up beat family with husband, wife and 2 kids. 

 

The men start talk about some mundane stuff.  Lets say the guys name is Sohan and his wife is Preeti..

 

W: You guys get fresh I will organize dinner for both of you.

K: Thanks for your help I shall come and help you.  She goes out of the room then.

 

R starts changing his clothes and no he is not going to wear his satin night suits here but a kurta pajama offered by the officer.

 

R suddenly walks in with a cup of tea in her hands and R gets a little taken aback cos he is not wearing his shirt but the gets amused looking at her discomfort and carries on doing his work looking towards K still amused who for a while gets ashamed and then holds herself.

 

K: Here is some tea for you.

R: Give it to me.

K: It is lying on the table do the honors yourself.

 

R gets too close to her for her comfort and brushes against her (he is doing all to irritate her) she gets aside, and walks out. They go ahead with an uneventful dinner. After the dinner is over the two men sit with a drink each along to fire place.

The preeti joins in while K is gone to change. To which the wife tells R why don't you call your wife here. R walks into the room where he finds K wearing a simple sleeveless black suit offered by the wife.

 

She is standing beside the window with her hair open and no dupatta on her. She is looking very pretty with her Smokey eyes and open hair and a simple sleeveless suit still lost in her thoughts. He is taken aback for a while keeps looking at her.  She suddenly turns around.

 

K: (Angrily) When did you walk in, now you have started sneaking on me I am not running away anywhere not till I have taught a lesson.

R: (Coming very close to her) Yes I know that but I have come to call you as our hosts want to sit with us for some time.

 

K then picks up her dupatta and walks out ahead of R.  P welcomes her to sit and the two men sit down with their drinks in their hands.

 

S: So R it is been how long since you have been married.

R: 2 months.

P: both if you look so good together must be a love marriage.

R: Yes it was a love marriage (Looking at K amusingly)

K: Yes it was a love marriage for us. (Not it was R's turn to get shocked)

P: So how did you meet each other?

K: I met him while a kushti match.

S: That's strange R you are a lawyer then how some kushti.

R: I had to save her form some guys who were troubling my wife hence the match.

P: So  it is then you fell in love.

K: No after that he kept following me for a very long time before I said yes, since those men were sent by him so that he could impress me.

 

She turned towards R with a look of victory in her eyes.

 

Then they retired to their rooms. R plopped himself in the bed and K kept looking around for a spare bedding.

 

R: we have to manage with one bed today.

K: I will go and ask P for spare bedding.

R: Since I sent goondas behind you to impress you it does not look like a good idea. I don't mind you sleeping with me in the same bed. (Giving her naughty looks)

K: Not even if I die of cold.

 

She settles herself in the couch.

 

Suddenly R's eyes open and he sees K standing beside the window as he had a while ago. He gets up form his bed and takes a shawl and goes to her. He wraps the shawl around her shoulders.

 

R: You will catch cold.

K: Thanks I was feeling cold.

R: (touching her hair) Your hair are still wet don't stand here you will fall sick.

Then he takes her by shoulders and makes her sit beside him on the bed. They keep looking into each others eyes for some time. And then suddenly K comes close to him and rests her head against his chest. R very lovingly starts caressing her hair.

 

R: I never realized how beautiful you are. (K shies) R then holds her tight and is about to kiss her that she suddenly coughs.

 

R is woken out of his dream and looks around. Sees K trying to adjust herself in the couch and coughing she is feeling cold. He then gets up and puts a blanket on her.

 

R is confused "what is happening to me I hate this woman her only purpose in life is to destroy me why am I feeling such a pull towards her. I don't love her why am I feeling so helplessly attracted towards her"

 

R could not sleep the whole night.

 

Please read it and write your comments. Good or bad. I would appreciate that. I am not much of a writer anyway and after reading the writings of such talented people here definitely not. And if you like it I will continue R's Pitfall in K's Love.

 

Thanks a lot for taking time to read my bantering.

 

 
 
 


Edited by ranjnanarang - 18 April 2009 at 7:26am

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Amazing !! Just logged in , and this is the first post I read... and it totally drew me in.. awesome play of emotion Ranjna.. and very decent too..  Smile
 
Our forum sure is a talented one..  Clap


Edited by morningdew - 04 December 2008 at 6:46am

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Thanks a lot for the encouragement Dew.

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its awesome . even i used to u write fan fics on da the cha forum but dis one is amazing for sure . do continue it soon .

ranjnanarang

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Thanks stuti but actually I am  not talented enough to write FF but will try and create a scenerio about Raj falling for Kranti.

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Another budding writer in this forum, is there anyone, other than me of course, who is not one?

Good one Ranjana... Smile

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Ranjana where were u hiding your talent till nowShockedShocked..oh my god I take a deep bowClap ...looking at the talent of this forum,..I m really feeling proud to b part of such a wonderful parivaar nowHug
 
What an amazing piece of writing dearClap...Raj's dream was just soooo Passionate...I wish the kiss happened in the dream ...but anyways mayb it will happen in real onlyWinkLOLEmbarrassed...And I really hope the creatives read this FF of yours and quickly show us in the serialEmbarrassed...What a superb romantic scenarioClap
 
I used to write such scenarios in Kaajjal forum...now a days don't get much timeCry..but now looking at this masterpiece I feel like writing some here tooEmbarrassed
 
Will try to write some romantic scenarios this weekendEmbarrassed
 
Ranjna please continue it na...and make it a permanent RK-FFEmbarrassed...Would love to see the continuationEmbarrassed

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amazing amazing fan fic do continue it reminds me of kajjal famous situations created by kashish mala and jyoti madam..do continue i really loved this

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