Zindagi..Teri Meri Kahani(RN)urgnt nt pg116(29/10) - Page 2

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Posted: 15 years ago
Hey Priya,

           finally able to catch ur fic....πŸ˜› like the starting keep updating n will comment more when it 's story progressed.......
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Posted: 15 years ago
plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz ud karo dear................plzzzzzzzzzzzz mention when will u ud
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Posted: 15 years ago
nice story ... update soon...
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Posted: 15 years ago
Originally posted by: watch rajeev

plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz ud karo dear................plzzzzzzzzzzzz mention when will u ud

Actually, i m a little busy with my studies...bt i promise u i will try to write asap.
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Posted: 15 years ago

Watch Rajeev, Prerna, Soumya, Suhana, Hinal, Lipi, Varshita, Vertika, Namita,Preeti.. a big hello to all of u.

& thank u sooooooooooooo much friends...!!! U all are don't know how ur comments makes me feel. Thanx a lot again.....bcz that was my fic's intro.....& getting this responses. All of ur comments means a lot to me.....keep them coming.
                                           Thanx.......PRIYA
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             *PART:-1*
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1:00 p:m...............
 
Aasha ji ghar par nahin thi. Ek rishtedar ki shadi main gayi hui thi... aur do din baad waapas anewali thi. Ghar k sabhi naukar bhi chutti par gaye hue the...do dino k liye. Ghar main sirf Naina aur Palak the. Amar waise bhi ghar main kaam hi rahta tha.
 
Palak so chuki thi. Magar Naina ko neend nahin aa rahi thi. Kareeb 30 min. k baad Amar ghar aaya. Woh kafi pareshan lag raha tha. Bich bich main use kuch phone calls aa rahe the to woh aur bhi jyada pareshan ho jata tha. Naina us k liye khana lane gayi, to us ne khane se inkaar kar diya.
 
Phir woh Naina se bola:- "Mujhe tumhara woh diamond set chahiye....!!!"
 
Naina ne shant awaz main jawab diya:- "Main use nahin de sakti....!!!"
 
Tabhi Amar ka phone phir se ring hua aur woh Naina se thoda dur jakar dhime awaz main kisi se baat ki. Aur Naina k paas aa kar gusse se bola:- "Pyar se kahta hoon....woh set mujhe de do.....warna aage jo hoga us k liye main zimmedar nahin hoon."
 
Naina:- " Maine use Pallo (Palak) k liye rakha hai....main use kisi ko bhi nahin de sakti!"
 
Amar gusse se bolta hai:- " Tumhare is apahij beti se shadi karega hi koun....??? Jo tumne us k liye woh set rakha hai....!!!!"
 
Naina chup rahi. Woh is argument ko aur jyada nahin badhana chahti thi. Naina ko chup dekh kar Amar ko aur gussa aa gaya.
 
Woh ek pillow le kar Palak k pas gaya aur bola:- "Agar main ise maar dun...to...!!! Tab tum woh set ko kis k liye rakhogi....??? Aur waise bhi is k marne se ek mushibat to kam ho hi jayegi.....!!!!"
 
Naina daar gayi. Usne socha k 'waise bhi ghar main koi nahin hai...aur Amar ne agar kuch galat kadam uthya to ............'
 
Naina ko chup dekh kar Amar aur jyada gussa ho jata hai aur bolta hai:- "Tum aise nahin manogi....!!!! Thik hai...dekho main kya karta hoon."
 
Amar Palak k kareeb gaya. Naina chillai:- " Nahin........!!!! Ruko... main woh set deti hoon."
 
Naina woh set Amar ko de deti hain. Aur Amar use le kar chala jata hai. Naian Palak ko apne seene se laga leti hai.
 
Lekin woh aaj ro nahin rahi thi. Aaj tak woh sirf Aasha ji k pyar k wajah se chup thi. Lekin ab aur nahin....!!!!! Ab to baat Palak k jaan k upar aa gaya hai.
 
Naina ne soch liya k use kuch na kuch faisla kar na padega.....Amar ko le kar.....!!!! Use Palak ko bachna hai........us k liye woh kuch bhi kar sakti hai......!!!!!!
 
Naina ne soch liya hai ....use kya karna hai.....!!!!! Ab to roz Amar Palak ki jaan ki dhamki de kar Naina se manmani  karta rahta hai....
lekin ab aisa nahin hoga....Naina ne faisla kar liya tha k use kya karna hai......!!!!!!!
 
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AFTER ONE YEAR.........................................................
 
12:00 p:m.
 
Police head-quarter..............................................
 
Alekh apni cabin k taraf ja raha tha. Corridor main us ko Pooja mili. Woh kafi parshan lag rahi thi. In fact jab se Pooja ne police force join kiya hai tab se woh hamesha pareshan rahti thi.
 
Us ko dekhte hi Alekh bola:- "Hey....Miss Pareshan...!!!!!! tera Mr. Usul kisi aur k sath bhag gaya kya?"
 
Pooja ne Alekh ki taraf dekh aur bhagti hui us k paas aayi aur boli:-" Achha hua....tu mujhe yahin mil gaya... mujhe tujh se kuch jaruri kaam hai."
 
Alekh:- "Haan....bol na! Waise bhi public k seva k liye hi to hum yahan par hai...aur tu to dost hai....!!!!!!"
 
Pooja:- " Yahan nahin....!!! Us kone main chal."
 
Alekh smile karta hua kahta hai:- " Nahin...main wahan nahin jaunga. Jo bolna hai yahin bol...!!! Agar tere hero ko pata chal gaya k main tere ko kone main le kar gaya tha to woh mujhe ulta latka ke 'voice of india' ka shooting start kar dega."
 
Pooja chid kar boli:- " Mazak mat kar.....Chal mere sath....!!!!"
 
Aur woh Alekh ka hath khinch kar ek kone main legayi. Aur boli:- "Mujhe tujh se ek favour chahiye."
 
Alekh:- "Bolti ja.....sun raha hoon!!!!"
 
Pooja:- " Meri ek friend hai....Neelu....Neelima Kapoor."
 
Alekh:- " Sorry...yaar! Mera abhi shadi ka koi irada nahin hai....!!!!!" Alekh ne phir se mazak kiya.
 
Pooja gusse main boli:-" Tu thodi der chup rahega..... kya???"
 
Pooja dhire dhire se boli:- " Meri baat dhyan se sun....Neelu thodi si trouble main hai. Usne mujh se help mangi thi...lekin tu to janta hai na k main abhi ammunition k smuggling k case main busy hoon Ali k sath. Isiliye tujhe mere liye Neelu k help karni padegi. Aur main tere alba kisi aur par bharosa nahin kar sakti. Aur...haan....!!!! Yeh un-official hoga...matlab kisi ko bhi is k khabar nahin honi chahiye! Samjha......!!!"
 
Alekh ne ek gahri saas li aur bola:- "Thik hai.....!!! Agar un-official hai to....woh to yahan aayegi nahin!!!! Tu ek kaam kar use kisi coffee bar main bula lena....main us se wahin par baat kar lunga."
 
Pooja:- "Nahin.....woh wahan nahin ja sakti! Us ko khatra hai..... jaan ka....!!! Tu ek kaam kar....yeh mere flat k chabi le.....!!!"
 
Yeh kah kar Pooja Alekh ko apne flat k chabi deti hai. Aur kahti hai:-"Mere flat k dushri chabi Neelu k paas hai. Tu ek kaam karna.....raat ko thik 10 baje mere flat main aa jana. Woh tujhe wohin par milegi.....!!!!!"
 
Itna sun ne k baad Alekh Pooja ko hug karta hai. Pooja hairan ho kar puchti hai:- "Kya hua.....????"
 
Alekh smile karte hue kahta hai:- "Yaar...tu sach main meri best friend hai......!!!!"
 
Pooja:-"Matlab.....!!!!"
 
Alekh usi tarah se smile karta hua kahta hai:- "Aur nahin to kya.....!!!! Tune mujhe apne flat k chabi de di aur permission bhi k main tere friend k sath raat bhar.....
 
Is se age Alekh kuch aur kah pata Pooja ne use ek punch mara. Aur boli:-" Woh aisi waisi ladki nahin hai.... samjha!!!!! Aur abhi woh sach much main musibat main hai.....isiliye apna bakwas band kar. Aur jitna kaha hai.... utna kar."
 
Tabhi un k side se koi bulata hai:-" Pooja!!!!"
 
Alekh aur Pooja ne dekha k Ali khada tha.Ali Alekh ko dekh kar kahta hai:- " Are...Alekh bhai! Aab tak kahan the aap....? S.p. sir aap ko dhund rahe the.....!!!! Aur aap office 12 baje aa rahe hain....!!!!!!" 
 
Alekh:- "Are...yaar! Main to kab ka aa chuka hun ...teri hi girl friend ne mujhe rok liya tha....!!! Waise main official kaam se hi gaya tha....main abhi ja kar unhe report karta hun....!!!!"
 
Ali ne phir Pooja k taraf dekhte hue kaha:- "Pooja....!!!! agar aap ki baat khatam ho gayi ho...to hum jara kaam kar le......!!! Aap sayad bhul rahi hain k humain investigation k liye jana tha.....!!!"
 
Pooja Ali se kahti hai:- "Haan...aati hun."
 
Phir Alekh k taraf dekh kar kahti hai:- "Yaad se...thik 10 baje pahunch jana....samjha!!!!"
 
Alekh Pooja ka hath pakad kar kahta hai:- "Yaar....tere to aish hain.....!!! Duty k time par bhi tu apne hero k sath romance kar sakti hai! Aur mujhe dekh......un-official kaam main bhi tu mujhe romance karne nahin deti.....!!!!!"
 
Pooja:-"Jyada bak bak mat kar....!!! aur haan.....main Neelu ko phone kar k kah dungi...aur tu sahi time par pahunch jana ....plz."
 
Itna kah kar Ali k sath Pooja chali gayi. Ali, Pooja, Alekh teeno dost the, aur sath hi main unhone police force join ki thi.
 
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7:00 p.m...............................
 
Mahak flowery shop....................
 
Naina ne shop k sare lights off kiye aur shop ko acchi tarah se lock kar k apne flat k taraf aayi.
 
Uska sar kafi dard kar raha tha. Woh apne flat main wapas aayi. Uska dil kar raha tha ek cup strong tea k liye. Lekin ab us main itni energy nahin thi k woh apne liye ek cup chai bana paye. Use kafi kamzori mahsus ho rahi thi.
 
Woh wohin sofe par let gayi. Ghar main koi nahin hai. Aasha ji Palak ko le kar Punam aunty k ghar gayi hui hain.
 
Naina k nazar diwar par lagi tasveer k taraf gayi. Amar ki tasveer thi...us par phulon ki mala chadi hui thi.............!!!!!!!
 
Amar ab is duniya main nahin raha. Kareeb ek saal pahle us ki maut ho chuki hai. Us ki maut kaise hui kisi ko nahin pata.......!!!!
 
Amar ka murder hua tha.....kaise...? Kisi ko nahin pata....!!! Kyoun....? Yeh bhi kisi ko nahin pata....!!!! Us ki dead body bahat bure halat main mili thi....aur us ki death ek suspense bana hua hai.....police ko bhi koi surag nahin mile hain aab tak.....!!!!!
 
Tabhi darwaje par dastak hui. Naina apne khawalon ki duniya se bahar aayi aur darwaja khola. Aasha ji khadi thi Palak ko god main liye hue....
 
Palak ne Naina ko dekhte hi 'Mamma' kah kar us k god main kud gayi. Aasha ji ander aayi aur Naina ko gaur se dekh kar kaha:-" Tune abhi tak kapde nahin badle....!!! Aur tera yeh chehra itna pila kyoun dikh raha hai?"
 
Itna kah kar unhone Naina k mathe par hath rakha aur boli:- " Are....tujhe to bukhar hai!!!!!"
 
Naina:- "Nahin....maa!!!! Bas thoda sa temp. hai. main kuch medicine le lungi aap phikar mat karo....!!!"
 
Aasha ji:-" Tu pahle ja kar freash up ho kar aa ja. main khana lagati hoon."
 
Naina:- "Ji......!!!!"
 
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8:30 p.m...................................................................................
 
Aastha mansion......................................................................
 
Raj launge room k sofe par hi soya hua tha.....ya....phir kah sakte hain k sone ka natak kar raha tha.....!!!!
 
Amit ji kafi gusse main ander aaye....to dekha k Raj bade hi chain se so raha hai. He slaaped Raj's forhead.
 
Raj chaunk kar utha aur Amit ji ko dekh kar phir se let gaya aur bola :-" Kya....dad!!! 15 min. baad nahin jaga sakte the.....? Mera sunder sapna tod diya aapne....!!!! Main bas us k gale main 'baarmala' dalne hi wala tha k aapne mujhe jaga diya.......!!!!!"
 
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Ok friends............this was it for now. I hope all of u liked it & plz do comment.
 
                                       thanx......
                                                      PRIYA😊
Edited by Sweet-Lioness - 13 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
Hi Priya
Update was really very interesting..How can a father b so cruel to his own daughter..🀒Its gud dat he is no more..May b he was killed bcoz of his bad habbits..If he wud have been alive den he wud have made Naina's life hell.😑😑😑...
Alekh was really funny..πŸ˜‰πŸ˜‰πŸ˜‰..Woh kabhi nahin sudhrega....Neelu is in trouble ofcourse Alekh is coming in her life...
Pooja n Ali r also dere..πŸ˜›  Where is Yudi???????πŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜†??
Raj is still dat same carefree person..
 
Do update soon..n Pls update Ehsaas too
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Posted: 15 years ago
fabulous1......too good........

just loved it.......good dat amar died.....but i think der will much mystry unfolded as it progresses....

updt soon
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Posted: 15 years ago
hi priya
thks for the pm dear
nice part yaar
but it was little bit confusing
when did amar die??
u skiped one year
update soooooooooooooooooon
and plzzzzzz clear my confusion
luv soumya
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Posted: 15 years ago
update was amazing
but yeh amar ka kya suspense ho gaya. matlab ke death he kar di. well its good ab RN ki line clear hai
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Posted: 15 years ago

Hello Priya too good updateπŸ‘ n full of commedy of Alekh.

Apun ko nahi pata tha ki Alekh ji itne sharati hain vow kya baat haiπŸ˜‰?Ab vo Neelu se milne jaa raha hai that's g8.😊

Ye Ali bhi na humesha ek dum tuff bana rehta hai baap re thoda hassi mazak bhi nahi kar sakta hai.

Amar kitna kameena tha apni bacchi ko maar daalna chahta tha accha hi hua ki mar gaya vo.😑

Naina ne apni flower shop khol li good.πŸ˜›

Hope Raj jaldi hi Naina se mile.😊

update soon.

Edited by Mahak Sinha - 15 years ago