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HUMTUM (a RagVir story)..FF..Pts 31,32..Uptd..Pg56 (Page 2)

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Posted: 30 September 2008 at 3:00pm | IP Logged
wow this is mindblowing - keep it up!
hope we cud c this in bidaai.
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wow that was really very nice! Clap i just love your writing style.
thanks for the PM, im looking forward to reading more soon!!


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LOvely simply fantabulous, as i said cud imagine all the scenes in real i wish dis wud have happen wud have been simply rocking seriously waiting for the next Chapter amazing work Sonal!!

Luv,

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wow very nice !!!
keep up the good work ! Clap
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Nice FF...!!! Looking forward to read next parts...!!! Keep up the great work...!!! ClapClapClap
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Congratulations!!Clap
Love the way ur story is going.
Loved the last line:
Ranvir ne soncha ke abhi toh yeh shuruaat hai....dekhna kaise main tumhaare dil mein apni jagah banata hoon....ke tumhe bhi pata nahi lagega.
 
Please do continue. In ur FF ranveer is trying to pataao ragini, the vice-versa is going on in the serial. Love both the situations.Wink
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Part 5




Ranvir bada hi muskurata hua ghar pahuncha...voh khush hua ke Ragini se uski baat shuru toh hui.....per ab voh kaise apne pyaar ka ehsaas uske dil mein jagayega yeh usse samajh nahi aa raha tha.

 

Ab yeh janne ke baad ke Anamika kaun hai...Ranvir ko Ragini se door raha nahi jaa raha tha.....voh aankhen band karke bhi Ragini ka chehra uske expressions mehsoos kar sakta tha voh saari baatein sonch kar jo usne Anamika se ki thi.

 

Usne Anamika se baat karne ke liye phone uthaya hi tha ke waha Sadhna aa gayi Ranvir ke liye juice le kar....usne poocha...."kya baat hai Ranvirji....aap toh bahut khush lag rahe hai.....kya Anamika se baat hui hai aapki ??"

 

Ranvir bade excited tareeqe se Sadhna ko pakda aur gol ghoomne laga aur kaha..."bhabhi...bhabhi....bhabhi.....main aapko kya bataao.....meri Anamika se sirf baat hi nahi....balke mulaqaat bhi ho gayi."

 

Yeh kehte hi Ranvir achanak khamosh ho gaya yeh sonch kar ke Sadhna ko yeh bataye ya nahi ke voh jaanta hai ke Ragini hi Anamika hai.....phir usne soncha ke bataa dale....phir usse khayal aaya ke isse pehle bhi Anamika ki behen keh kar uski bhabhi ne jhoot moot usse Mall bulaya tha.....per iss baar voh yeh galti nahi karega.

 

Per yaha yeh sunte hi....Sadhna ke chehre per alag si khushi aa gayi....voh apne aapko sambhaal nahi paa rahi thi....usne jaldi hi Ranvir se poocha..."sach mein Ranvirji....aap Anamika se mile hai ?? kaisi lagti hai voh...aap khush toh hai na ??"

 

Ranvir Sadhna ka pura sawaal samajh hi nahi paaya....voh abhi yehi sonch raha tha shayad yeh sahi waqt nahi hai bhabhi ko batane ka.....aur usne kaha..."khabon mein toh har koi bahut achcha hi lagta hai na bhabhi."

 

Sadhna achanak udaas si ho gayi....usne soncha tha ke shayad ab jiji aur Ranvirji ko le kar jo uske dil mein darr hai voh shayad Ranvirji ka jiji ko dekhne aur unhe pure dil se apnaane mein hi kam hoga.....usne hichkichaate hue poocha..."khabon mein Ranvirji??"

 

Ranvir bhi dabi smile dete hue kehne laga...."haan bhabhi....khabon mein....jab sach mein milunga toh aapko zaroor bataonga."

 

Sadhna ne Ranvir ko dekh kar ek pheeki si smile di aur waise hi pareshaan waha se chali gayi.

 

yaha Ragini ka bhi alag hi haal tha....voh Ranvir ke ajab bartaaw se pareshaan bhi thi per uske honton per ek smile bhi thi....usse yakeen nahi aa raha tha ke voh Ranvirji se.....voh Ranvirji jo Sadhna ke dewar hai....jo ek taraf se ajnabi bhi hai....unke saath asaani se itni saari baatein share kar daali....yaha tak ke agar apne aapko sahi waqt per nahi sambhaalti toh shayad Anmol ke baare mein bhi bata daalti.

 

Anmol ka naam aate hi Ragini udaas si ho gayi....yeh sonch kar ke aaj Anmol se baat hi nahi ho payi....voh yehi sonch rahi thi ke achanak ghar ka phone bajne laga.

 

Ragini ne phone uthaaya toh waha se awaaz aayi...."Anamika ??"

 

Yeh sunte hi....Ragini ke chehre per ek khushi cha gayi...honton per muskaan aa gayi aur dil zor zor se dhadakne laga....usne halke se kaha...."Anmol ?"

 

Phir Ranvir ne jaldi se kaha..."sorry Anamika....main jaanta hoon ke tumne mujhe iss number per call karne se manaa kiya tha....per maine tumhe din mein uss wrong number per phone karne ki bahut koshish ki thi....tum mili hi nahi...aur tumse baat kare bine reh nahi paa raha tha....isliye iss number per phone mila diya....iss baar maaf kardo...ainda nahi karunga."

 

Yeh sunkar...Ragini ke ankhon mein aansoon..aur honton per ek hassi si aa gayi...."usne bade hi emotional andaaz mein kaha..."koi baat nahi Anmol...mujhe bhi aapse baat karne ka bahut mann kar raha tha....abhi bhi aapke hi baare mein sonch rahi thi...aur aapne phone kar diya....thank you."

 

Yaha Ranvir bhi smile karne laga...voh ab Anamika ki baaton mein Ragini ko mehsoos karne laga...usne kaha..."achcha mere baare mein sonch rahi thi aur maine phone kar diya....isse kehte hai dil se dil ki raah milna."

 

Ragini sharmaane lagi....toh Ranvir ne achanak se bade shararti andaaz mein pooch liya...."waise aapko meri yaad din bhar nahi aayi.....mujhe toh bahut aayi...maine aapka phone kitna try kiya....per shayad aapko meri utni fikr nahi hai."

 

Ragini ek dum pareshaan si ho gayi..."nahi Anmol....aisi baat nahi hai....aapse baat nahi karoo toh kuch achcha nahi lagta....lekin aaj hamare koi rishtedaar mil gaye the...aur unse baatein karne mein waqt kaise nikal gaya pata hi nahi chala...voh khareebee rishtedaar hai isliye unhe manaa nahi kar payi."

 

Ranvir ne chedte hue poocha..."khareebi rishtedaar hai....sirf yehi baat hai....ya koi aur baat hai....warna waqt ka guzarna toh sabko maloom hota hai."

 

Ragini ko achcha nahi laga...jis tarah Anmol uss per shak kar rahe the....usne bade naraazgi se poocha...."aisa kyu keh rahe hai Anmol....aisi koi baat nahi hai....voh bhi mujhe ek rishtedaar hi samajh kar bade achche tareeqe se milte hai...agar main na miloo toh achcha lagta hai kya."

 

Ranvir ne Ragini ki naraazgi mehsoos ki phir achanak baat badal di...."arre baba...main toh mazaak kar raha hoon."

 

Ragini still gussa thi yeh sonch kar ke Anmol uske baare mein aisa kaise sonch sakte hai....phir usne kaha..."achcha Anmol main aapse baad mein baat karti hoon."

 

Ranvir samajh gaya ke voh abhi bhi naraaz hai....voh chahta hai ke Ragini Ranvir se pyaar kare magar uske liye Anmol ko galat tehrana achcha nahi hoga....yehi sonch kar usne bade pyaar se kaha..."Anamika....tum naraaz ho kar phone rakhogi toh main chain se so nahi paaonga....mera mazaak karna kya achcha nahi lagta."

 

Ragini ko bhi bura lag raha tha ke usne Anmol ko upset kar diya..."Anmol...kya main aapse naraaz hone ka hak bhi nahi rakh sakti?"

 

Ranvir ne iss baat per Ragini ko aankhen band kar imagine kiya aur kaha..."Anamika...aapka jitna mujh per gussa hone ka ya pyaar jatane ka hak banta hai...shayad maine kisi aur ko utna hak nahi diya hoga.....aur main yeh sirf isliye nahi keh raha hoon ke hum sirf phone per baatein karte hai toh aap mujh per yakeen karle....balke apne dil per haath rakh kar sonche....agar aap bhi mujhse utna hi pyaar karti hai toh aapko iss baat ka andaaza ho jayega jo main kehna chahta hoon."

 

yeh sunkar...Ragini ka dil zoro se dhadakne laga...uske chehre per ek sharmili si smile thi....usse samajh nahi aa raha tha ke voh kya kahe....phir usne halki awaaz mein kaha..."kuch baatein bin bataye bhi samjhi jaa sakti hai."

 

Ranvir yaha smile kar raha aur waha Ragini....dono ka dil zoro se dhadak raha tha...dono ki khushi ka koi thikana nahi tha...ab jab yeh confirm ho gaya ke voh sach mein ek dusre se pyaar karte hai....phir Ranvir ne poocha...."jo main sonch raha hoon....kya voh sach hai ??"

 

Ragini ne halki si hassi se kaha..."Good Night Anmol."

Ranvir ne ek lambi aah bhari aur kaha...."Good Night toh hai Anamika....per ab neend kise aayegi."

 

Ragini ne smile kiya aur sharmaate hue phone rakh diya....usse bhi aisa lag raha tha ke ab usse neend kaha aayegi....pehle pyar izhaar karna chah rahi thi....toh bechayn thi.....ab jab izhaar kar diya....toh ajab si khushi bechayn kar rahi hai dil ko....uske chehre se smile hat nahi rahi thi.

 



Edited by starz4me - 05 October 2008 at 9:42pm

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wow!!!!! that was lovely.......cant wait to read more

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